MB&M [final note- pg. 44] Closed - Page 8

Created

Last reply

Replies

333

Views

24.1k

Users

40

Likes

31

Frequent Posters

kimmu thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#71
you didn't tell me.

*edited*

Hey, at least I edited before Shabz. 🤣 Anyways, loved how you started off with Heer getting up in her bed. Reminded me of a certain Mayank... lmao! Right so Guru Nayak Ji, I was like who the heck is that, then i realized she's sikh... so yea. Are you sikh? 🤔 I think you are cuz your punjabi, and hindu, and if thats that... then your sikh, right? I'm a muslim and punjabi, so I'm just a punjabi. But where both punjabi so don't get why I'm talking about this. 😆 Her skirt coming up to her knees for some odd reason reminded me of your mom's 'song'. 🤣 Your mom is awesome, dunno why you were making fun of her. 😛😆

"the prestigious Prem Juneja" That sounded so cute. Oh and I just noticed, you got a new color. Its really cute, like a tealish, sea grean . Really nice, its like really comfortable to the eyes when your reading. Gosh, I keep getting carried away. I could totally imagine Heer in that outfit, like I just remembered her when she was working under Prem in kis desh, except with hotter clothes.

Aww... Rinkiii!! My uncle sleeping with his teddy bear, and his mustache itching the poor teddy bear. 🤣 Okay okay, i'm just kidding. Calm down.... Rinki, your just like my little sister, I always have to wake up in the middle of the night and go and check on her to see if she's wearing her blanket. Cuz when she's not, she pee's on the bed, and I have to clean it. Awww... cutttiee Rinki woke up... Seriously that whole part was shooo cutee! And hun, your just like me. I never eat breakfast either. *high five* Ooh, and my mom's always nagging at me like Heer too. 😆

Wow Rinki, your so lazy. You didn't pick up till the third time it rang? Uff, but can't blame you, you really don't feel like getting out of your blanket when your in your bed. *sigh* I want my blankyy... Never mind, I want a knife and kill this Rahul. WTF! I hate guys like him, Rinki, you don't have to deal with him. (I hate how i'm talking to you about the parts your in here. I know its all fictional, just can't say Rinki and not talk to her. 😆) And dude, this Kiara is a slut. She got pregnant the 2nd time, and they came to YOU for help. Rinki, your scaring me. WHY did they come to YOU for help? Why are you so angry at Rahul? What did Rahul do? Do I have to get my gun instead? You totally got me hooked on here after that whole thing. So suspicious, really makes me wonder about what the heck is going on.

The last part broke my heart. Rinki crying.

***

That cute Heer part makes up for Rinki crying, specially that part where Heer gets all worried by just hearing your voice. Like she can tell that somethings wrong... I'm glad that Heer gets respect at her office, i mean the people at her office seemed really nice. The dude that was giving her the offer was so nice, unlike the people Heer was working under in Kis Desh. Hmmm... Its so much more real here, like it shows the good/better side of working in a hotel. No matter what/where you work, you deserve respect. And if you don't get it, then you just don't work there.

Heer knows about your secret too, and you got kicked out of your house because of that secret. Rinki, i'm seriously worried now, what the heck did you do? I'm happy to know that Heer was with Rinki, it shows that no matter what happens she'll be with you. I loved the sisterly relationship you showed between the two of you.

Ooh Greece, you already told me, but still... OOOH! They speak Greek in Greece, but I think that they know Latin too. Ooh and you were asking what beautiful was in Latin right, well today in my latin class we learned what very beautiful mean, so i asked her what beautiful means, and it means bellus. I'll get you some more phrases in latin if you want, tell me what you want though...

I loved your reaction to Greece... But i was confused, where you just pretending to happy so she wouldn't wonder about your tired/weary voice... Or did you REALLY want to go Greece. It think you just wanted to get away, and thought this was probably going to be the best opportunity. Oh, and I couldn't help but laugh when Heer was telling all this to you all nervously. I was like 'YOUR OLDER THAN HER, YOU CAN BOSS HER AROUND HEER!'.. uff.. i swear, she's such a shy woman. Then again, thats a good thing. ☺️

***

Prem's part was so HOT! ☺️ I totally loved each and everything about it, and Lisa, yea you BE scared. Stay away from the Juneja, you aint ever getting him. 😆 I totally loved his part, it showed how Prem's character is going to be. Does that mean that Heers going to be scared of him too, or is she finally not going to be shy. I'd enjoy both idea's, lets see what you have up your sleeve. Waiting for the next parrt.. 😃

Spelling Mistakes: (goes in order)
- opportunity (...Sounds like a great oppertunity but...)
- genuinely (...voice genuinly sounded excited...)
- understanding (...little sister's understanting nature...)
- comfortance isn't a word, comfort would work though. (...a hint of his comfortance in his cabin...)
- lightly (...He lighlty rubbed at his stubble and motioned...)
- interrupt (...workers didn't dare to intrrrupt in fear)...
- prestigious (...yelled at by the presitigious Mr. Prem Juneja.)

I think I got them all.

kimz
Edited by kimmu - 16 years ago
purplestar22 thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 16 years ago
#72
That was great.. i also loev the way you write!!
Cant wait for the next chappy...update soon!!!!!!!
~sweet Ash~ thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 16 years ago
#73
great update it was worth the wait. i like ur writing style.btw have a happy birthday this sunday🥳
-Garima- thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 16 years ago
#74
Hey rinki!! omg ur update was AWESOME!! ur a great writer!!! and i understood everything clearly so no need to think that its not understandable...u give detail of every aspect of the story..i just love that and the way u rite!! cant wait until the next update!! continue soon!...btw HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!! hope u hve a great sweet sixteen...isnt it weird ur bday is just 5 days b4 mine..mine's on the 28th *a little heads up! lol* and im gonna turn 15! ttyl

~Garima
P.Kamaljit.Sean thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 6
Posted: 16 years ago
#75
hey rinkz
update was awesum
moving to greece wow

happy advanced birthday rinkz
x.sunayna.x thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 16 years ago
#76
Hey fantastic update!
Hmm, Greece!
I love Greece its sooo coool there, i wish i could live there....
Can't wait to read the next part!
?xXx?
Sunayna
= ]
and Happy birthday!
Have and awesome day!
?.
Edited by .xganga.x - 16 years ago
Anhdara13 thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#77
ooh.. mystery too? nice! haha.. cannot give you a detailed response, no time unfortunately..though I have some ideas on where you're taking this.. but liked the update.. and waiting for the next.. thanks for the PM!
Love,
Radz
indiandoll89 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Trailblazer Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#78
YAY! I found this one all on my own! 😛
Will edit with comments!
*EDIT*
Aww Heer is defintiely awesome! 😃 I love the way you made her character! 😊 So strong!
ooo You're in the ff too! 😊 That's so cute, I sometimes put myself in mine too! 😳
Awww what happened that made Heer like this though? 😊 I hope we find out soon, and you fix it! 😃
Awww Heer defintiely looks stylish on her way to work! 😆 Awww Rinki...what's this whole story with Rahul and Kiara and Kris...sounds very interesting!
YAY!! She's going closer to Prem! 😛 I'm excited!
Ooooo okay so I LOVED the way you introduced Prem! He sounds...amazing! The vampire line...really added to it! 😛 Have you read Twlight! 😉😳
Continue super soon Rinki! Can't wait to see PH's meeting scene!!
oooh and I defintiely want to be on your pm list! 😊
purplestar22 thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 16 years ago
#79

Originally posted by: indiandoll89

YAY! I found this one all on my own! 😛

Will edit with comments!
*EDIT*
Aww Heer is defintiely awesome! 😃 I love the way you made her character! 😊 So strong!
ooo You're in the ff too! 😊 That's so cute, I sometimes put myself in mine too! 😳
Awww what happened that made Heer like this though? 😊 I hope we find out soon, and you fix it! 😃
Awww Heer defintiely looks stylish on her way to work! 😆 Awww Rinki...what's this whole story with Rahul and Kiara and Kris...sounds very interesting!
YAY!! She's going closer to Prem! 😛 I'm excited!
Ooooo okay so I LOVED the way you introduced Prem! He sounds...amazing! The vampire line...really added to it! 😛 Have you read Twlight! 😉😳
Continue super soon Rinki! Can't wait to see PH's meeting scene!!
oooh and I defintiely want to be on your pm list! 😊

i was gonna say somehting about the vampire thign cuz it reminded me twilight. but i forgot about it!!! lol
ashpush thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 16 years ago
#80
yayyyyyyyyyyy so u finally updated rinki dinki.......
that was a fantastic 1....
hmm wonder wat happened 2 rinki(d 1 in d ff😆)...
update soon...im eager 2 read more..

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".