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Posted: 17 years ago
#31
wow rhana di...ur awsome. i luved ur ff. its great. plz cont soon,
i am waiting...i luved preet senes....
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Great update Rehana....
i'm putting you up on my must read FF list 😆
Prem seemed sooo heart broken by this but thank god he has Preet and Kulraj di to support him...
Their bother/sister relationship are gna make history....
it seems that lallu wont be a obstacle here....
good coz i don't fink i can hack him ruining things here too....

i loved the way you included Heer's past here, soo quickly but soo detailed...
Manmeet 😡 thank god he's out right now!!!! Prem's words just touched my heart,
he really wants to help her with her pain and all he wants in return is her and her happiness....
Brilliant hun

thanks for the update.... keep up the great work
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Edited by salma_786786 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#33
awww thanks iqra and salma🤗.......u ppl r just so sweet........n i tell u guys, u will love each and every character EXCEPT manmeet, in this story😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
#34
i can't wait till the next part loved it ewwwwwwwww she liked manmeet🤢
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Posted: 17 years ago
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My heartfelt thanks to all my readers......I just want to let you guys know that this a 10 parter story or may be less depending on how fast I can write BUT I have to finish this story before September since my class will start from then😉.......if you think this is going like a roller coaster ride, which btw I think it is 😃 and not too happy with it then MY ADVANCE APOLOGY TO ALL.....muah😊
PART 3
Opening the main door of her apartment, Heer went straight to her bedroom as she didn't want to face her younger sister right now. Leaning against her bedroom door, she broke down crying. She wanted to scream out herself, let that anger out of her mind, out of her heart......how could I let him do that.....how could I??clenching her fists she demanded to herself......She was unable to believe that she let him touch her......love me......my foot.....first Manmeet, his so called bloody best friend........now him???!!!........am I a bloody doll to those men, who would just pass me around after done playing with me???.....why me god??!!........why me??.......what sin did I do to get such punishment??.......first my parents left us.....then the person I trusted the most......I loved him with all my heart, but what did he do??.....he just left me on my wedding day for my parents last sign, that land....holding her head in her hands she sobbed to her content to let those frustrations go away......
Coming out of the washroom after taking a long shower in order to get a break from her haunted past, Heer was drying her hair with the towel when she heard the door bell ring. "Meeheerr!!!......can you please open the door? I will be there in a minute hon" requesting her younger sister, Heer hurriedly combed her wet hair.

While fixing her saari, she appeared in her living room to see the visitors and got the biggest shock of her life. In 2 years this is the first time they came to visit them. Like a obedient girl, she gently went to welcome them. She was about to bend down to touch her feet when Gayetry stopped her in the middle and gave blessings to her would be daughter-in-law with a warm hug....."Bless you beta" Gayetry whispered in her ear. "Thank you auntie" Heer sweetly replied to the older lady who has been always like a mother to her and meher. Looking over Gayetry's shoulder Heer greeted Gayety's husband Lalit, who was blessing meher with a kiss on her forhead while asking about her progression in studies, folding her hands together saying "Namaste Sir!".......not too happy with the young lady's use of words Lalit complained, "Excuse me!!.....did you just call me 'Sir'?"....."Jii sir??!!" asked Heer with a confused look on her face. "what Jii Sir??", his sudden outburst frightened the girl....observing her panicked face Lalit knew that was enough as he continued "kya yaar??!! You call Gayetry 'auntie' and me 'SIR'????.....bhala mere saath yeh na insaafi kyun??......agar Gayetry tumhari auntie hui toh mein tumhara kya lagta hoon??......" "Uncle..."Heer softly uttered while blushing for not being able to get the trick at the beginning......

Opening his arms, Lalit welcomed the girl with a smile "Come here my child!".......smiling back, Heer went over to Lalit, who also showed his fatherly affection towards her with a warm hug "Always be happy.....I want to see you happy...dear?!"........holding her face like a father, he made Heer look at him, "...and that smile on your face too.....God Bless You beta " controlling himself as he realised he was getting emotional, Lalit quickly said, "Ok ladies, I will see you in the evening as I have to attend an important meeting right now"....pointing towards Gayetry, " I will pick her up at 7:00, till then my lady love is under your supervision, my princess " while giving Gayetry's hand on to Heer's........nodding her head in affirmative Heer laughed at the old man's short and quick performance.

After sharing a good laugh, Meher went to the kitchen to arrange some refreshments for the guests, when Heer's eyes fall on her dining table, which was almost loaded with packages and stuff......Heer looked back at Gayetry, who has already settled herself on the couch, and asked "Auntie yeh sab??" .......taking Heer's hand, Gayetry made her sit beside her.......still holding her hand, " Shagun ". Before an already confused Heer could open her mouth Gayetry gently squeezed her hand making her silent, and she continued, "Please let me finish then I will listen to whatever you want to say.."...taking a deep breathe Gayetry started, "I know we didn't keep in touch with you two after that incident.....But trust me beta, it's not like we didn't want to keep any relationship with you girls but because we were ashamed of ourselves......we didn't know how to face you two since we were the one who first brought that proposal for you.......but believe me hon, we had no clue about that land or Manmeet's plan to get that land by marrying you.......2 years have passed, in this 2 years, neither you are able to forget about that incident nor Lalit and I are able to get rid of that guilt........please forgive us Heer......please " folding her hands Gayetry pleaded to Heer while crying.......

Feeling sorry for the lady, Heer wiped away her tears, giving Gayetry an assuring smile she continued with her teary eyes, " Nahin auntie, please don't ask for forgiveness......We have no complains against anyone from your family.....seriously!!!.....and I know you guys could never even think of hurting us........also, I know, may be you weren't here to support us physically but your blessings were always with us......Uncle gave me the job to support myself and meher.......and that was enough for us to lead our lives...."

Giving Heer a content smile still holding her hand, Gayetry started the topic for which she came here today, " Look Heer, for whatever I just said, please don't think that I have a selfish motive behind it......humlog saach much uss baat par sharminda hai.....and now whatever I am going to say right now, please don't take it as a favour.......mein tumse kuch mang-ne aayi hoon.......mujhe dogey naa beta??"........"..I swear auntie, I am not getting any head or tail of whatever you are trying to say..." confessed a totally puzzled Heer......" I....I am talking about you.......kya tum mere Prem se shaadi karoge?? "......that hit it.....her little world turned upside down in less than a second.......

Releasing her hands away from Gayetry's hold, looking down, Heer just sat there like a sculpture. She didn't know what to say as her answer. All of a sudden, that decorated mandap flashed in her mind........the mandap that was supposed to be meant for her wedding......the wedding that never took place......and it would never.....she would never get married.......she was not ready to go through the same terrible phrase of her life.....not ready to trust anyone again......not ready to fall in love all over again and then get herself hurt at the end........as all those painful moments came back like a flood rolling down her face......seeing her crying face, Gayetry couldn't control but held up Heer's innocent face, making the girl look at her, as if realising her fear, she tried to assure her " I promise you won't get hurt again.....Please trust me one last time......My son loves you.....He will give you all the happiness that you deserve......We all want you and meher as a part of our family......Please beta, I have come here with so much hope......aur waise bhi tum apne saath saath meher ke baare mein bhi socho naa.....I know you have been everything for Meher, her sister, her brother even her parents but don't you think it will be better for her to get a family where she can find brothers like Prem and Preet, sisters like Kulraj and Veera?.......tell me are you happy with your life??....just think about it beta, if you are not happy then how can Meher be happy seeing you in lifeless state"....

Talking about Meher, "....Oh my goodness!!!.......how could I be so selfish?......Meher......Meher, who thinks I am her everything.......and I always thought I am living for Meher and doing everything that would make her happy but never did I ever realise that Meher's happiness is in me.......How can I punish my little sister for something that she has nothing to do with......how could I do this to my innocent sister???......I am sorry Meher.....I am sorry maa, papaji.......I promise, I will give Meher whatever she wants.......I am sorry!!" closing her eyes, Heer quietly apologized to her family in her heart........

Looking up to see Meher was standing by the door, heard everything, Heer gave her an apology look with her teary eyes while Meher just smiled at her didi accepting her apology.......coming towards the ladies, Meher made herself comfortable on the other side of Heer, resting her head on didi's shoulder, almost hugging her sideways, Meher held her sister's hand with hers, requesting her to agree to this proposal..........understanding her little sister's wish, Heer looked back at Gayetry, who was watching the two sisters wonderful bond.........Heer smiled at her while nodding her head in affirmative, giving her the gesture of accepting the proposal........Couldn't hold her excitement, Gayetry just hugged Heer tightly, saying "Thank you dear........I knew you would never disappoint me....welcome to the family beta".....leaving a kiss on her forehead, Gayetry went to hug Meher to congratulate her as well.......missing out the sad face on Heer, who is now afraid of the thought whether she will be able to keep Prem happy or not!!!
Precap:
She was shocked to see the person at the door, leaving the thread of her upper part of the lehenga still untied, she quickly took the dupatta from the bed, somehow covered herself and rushed towards the door, slightly pushing Prem out of her way, Heer left the room.....
ENJOYYY
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Posted: 17 years ago
#36
aww both parts were awesome!!
YESH!!!!!! they gonna get married *dances in chair* lolz
aww poor heer she's sooo sad....but im sure that prem will make her smile and laugh :]
oooh the preview.....aaah poor gal so shy nd scared of him...
haha prem's expression will be worth waiting for
plz plz cont soon
ur doing an awesome job...
rinki
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Posted: 17 years ago
#37

Originally posted by: ~Rinki~

aww both parts were awesome!!

YESH!!!!!! they gonna get married *dances in chair* lolz
aww poor heer she's sooo sad....but im sure that prem will make her smile and laugh :]
oooh the preview.....aaah poor gal so shy nd scared of him...
haha prem's expression will be worth waiting for
plz plz cont soon
ur doing an awesome job...
rinki

thanks for liking it hon......n ur wonderful comment...🤗
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rehana
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Posted: 17 years ago
#38
awesomeeeeeeeeee too good very nice part waitinggggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 17 years ago
#39
My last comment of the day.. So i'm gonna try to make it long.. 😆

Aww.. Heer's going through so much! I really feel bad for her, for some reason I can feel her pain. The words, the scene you created really made me feel bad for her. Both the sisters are going through so much... I really hope the new family can give them the happiness they deserve..

I felt a little angry at the fact that Gayatri and Lalit found the time now, to come and meet the girls. They seemed so selfish, if only they helped out the girls more. She was there best friends daughter, right? I think they should've done more for her... But i guess its all okay with me now...

Woaaa, Prem was Manmeets best friend.. 😲 Okay that gave me a big shock, no wonder Heer didn't say yes to him that easily... I'm totally with Heer on this one.. Though I would like to know since when he's been loving Heer...

Omg the Precap is really scaring me, but then again your not ekta like you said and your gonna be nice to us, so I'm just gonna push my worries away... And trust whatever you do will be for the best, soo Continue soon! 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
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That was great, She's accepted the marriage!
YAY! (for Prem, not sure about Heer yet)
I hope she becomes happy!
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