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soul76

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Posted: 16 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: Grateful Dead
Muneee...My eyes moist...i have a lump in my throat...but cant even cry as im at work...wht a touching update...specially Milind's situation...

Prachi is a Lonely soul too..where does Ayesha stay???

Brilliant Start Munee..Cant wait to read the next part!

Yeah hun i had wanted to evoke such emotions in the readers it'll be a touching ff I mean atleast I hope it to be one. Both mIchi are lonely in their respective ways, Ayesha is a free spirit I'll be elaborating on her in the next update. Thank you for the appreciation dear love you for it. 😊

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soul76

@soul76

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Posted: 16 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: sailat@PA

egads!! why'd you say THAT!! i'm an an awful writer with zero imagination! *shiveeerss*

I said you can't write one as you dan't have much free time ofcourse everyone can write atleast you of all pppl can I'm sure of it.

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Opti

@Opti

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+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#23

Munee, another Fic????? How do you do it girl? I can't manage even one! Loved the pardesi Prachi and the desi Milind. Looks like Milind's "Paanch saal, saath mahine, baarah din" has had its influence going by the age count you gave for Prachi and Ayesha.

Milind is as lovable as ever (not a surprise considering the love you have for this guy) . I especially loved this line.

His father must be waiting for him there was no one else in his world besides that old and ill form who probably counted each second of every hour silently from the minute he left till he returned.

Shows the guy's concern for his father.

One humble request, Munee. Can you break your paragraphs into smaller ones. Would make them easier to read. Alternatively, you could use extra line spacing so that they are not huddled together.

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soul76

@soul76

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Posted: 16 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: optimist
Munee, another Fic????? How do you do it girl? I can't manage even one! Loved the pardesi Prachi and the desi Milind. Looks like Milind's "Paanch saal, saath mahine, baarah din" has had its influence going by the age count you gave for Prachi and Ayesha.

Milind is as lovable as ever (not a surprise considering the love you have for this guy) . I especially loved this line.

His father must be waiting for him there was no one else in his world besides that old and ill form who probably counted each second of every hour silently from the minute he left till he returned.

Shows the guy's concern for his father.

One humble request, Munee. Can you break your paragraphs into smaller ones. Would make them easier to read. Alternatively, you could use extra line spacing so that they are not huddled together.

Aw thanks Opti for your appreciation how do I do it I dunno stories keep spinning in my mind so you finally deciphered my love for Milsi... hahaha I haven't been secretive about it either. 😊 I'l try hun to make my written work more gramatically correct god I'm so bad at it. But I'll keep your suggestions in mind. 😊 The age count just came to me I wanted to show how sensitive Prachi is to everything will help explain her plight better.

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Opti

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Posted: 16 years ago

#25

Munee, I am not bothered by the grammar, but long paragraphs become difficult to read onscreen.

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soul76

@soul76

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Posted: 16 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: optimist
Munee, I am not bothered by the grammar, but long paragraphs become difficult to read onscreen.

Ok hun next update I'll break it up.... 😊

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Mrs.Edward Cullen

@.Angel

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+ 4

Posted: 16 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: blind horizon

Aw thank you sweety for being such a loyal reader. 😊

u r welcome sweetie,I will read it and let u know my thought on it hun once drop my daughter of at her Nursery school and home alone by myself....😳lolzzzzzz

by the way I should be the thanking u dear for giving me something wonderful to read everyother day not u saying thank u 2 me.

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soul76

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Posted: 16 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: angel's life
u r welcome sweetie,I will read it and let u know my thought on it hun once drop my daughter of at her Nursery school and home alone by myself....😳lolzzzzzz
by the way I should be the thanking u dear for giving me something wonderful to read everyother day not u saying thank u 2 me.

Oh my God angel you'r married and have a daughter and still you fight over Milsi ...... my my what a revelation.... well drop her off soon and come back mommy dear. 😊

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Saima

@sailat@PA

Voyager

Posted: 16 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: blind horizon

Oh my God angel you'r married and have a daughter and still you fight over Milsi ...... my my what a revelation.... well drop her off soon and come back mommy dear. 😊

I KNOW, Munee!! when reading it i was sOOOOO surprised!! i thought Angel was some teenage angel!! haha....like Ira--who's 15!! i am laughing coz the other day when she wrote that cute post abt 'KIt wants you to update!!'...i was like...'awww, ur soo adorable!!'...haha!!

Munee--let them being married not deceive you!! Sangs is married too but always tries to haq jamao on Milind!! hell, she was the brainchild behind the thread--Patni, mistress and others! i hope i got it right!! :D

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soul76

@soul76

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Posted: 16 years ago

#30

Yeah you got it right Saima this married lot is as bad as us though they should be taking a breather having their male counter parts at home and leave Milsi for us. Per nahin aisey kaisey ho jaye they want to eat the cake and have it too.

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