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Batukchand BittuJi Sharma

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Posted: 16 years ago

#191

Originally posted by: cutykoo20
congo for 200 post
thank u Saruu😊

robbie wore pink shirt to impress ka😆😆 how lovely
glad u liked it..
oh she thinks he is pakao😆😆 thats too lovely like rab ne😉
LOL... u watched rab ne? It's soo swweet na? nd thanks...glad u liked it😆
shiv thats very gud part
thank uu
update more
will soon

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Batukchand BittuJi Sharma

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Posted: 16 years ago

#192

Originally posted by: FunkyChick
Hey Shannu
hey Mariam!
well i am new to ur FF I never seen it before I know i am blind and feel like such an idiot forgive me for that 😭
awwee... no prbz sweety, It's ok....😊
but i started reading ur FF and read 7parts so far so i thought i will leave my comment ur such a creative writer and i liked the concept of ur FF it is really different.The way you described all the characters were great you made Kasturi a Superstar thats intresting and you switched devika and Kashaulia character around lol puru got a secret wonder what it is Robbie secretly loves kasturi aww how sweet well it is such an intresting
awwee...this means alot to me....I'm glad u liked it😳
story I am never good at leaving long comments
awwee...of course u r good...this is one of the sweetest comments ever!😊
so how many parts i have read so far were great ur such an creative person will read the rest parts later and comment
ok....thanks.... will wait😊
Love Mariam xx

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robina

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Posted: 16 years ago

#193

hiya shannu, i didnt know that you were writing a fanfic...i will read the parts that i have missed and then defintely comment, sorry again, but the loss isnt your as much as it is mine, i have missed out it seems by people's comment on a fantastic, creative fanfic...will defintely be back shannu, give me a day or two..

take care and keep the creative juices flowing...

robina di

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Batukchand BittuJi Sharma

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Posted: 16 years ago

#194

Originally posted by: mimi0295
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Ok...will wait for ure comments😊

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Batukchand BittuJi Sharma

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Posted: 16 years ago

#195

Recap-
Bani shouts out loud: Kassy dahi paas karna! (Kassy pass me the yogurt!)

Kasturi comes out of her thoughts and puts her hand forward to the bowl. At the same time, even Robbie puts his hand forward.

Their hands touch. A current passes through Kasturi's hand when she touches him.

Part 10- Yeh tera mera milna

Kasturi: Oh! I'm sorry.

She quickly moves her hand away. Robbie gives Bani the bowl.

After eating:

Kasturi: Acha, main chalti hoon. Namaste. (Ok, I'll leave now. Bye!)

Everyone else smiles at her.

When Kasturi reaches home, Alka opens the door.

As soon as Alka sees her, she grows angry. Alka pulls her ear and yells at her: Kalmohee! Kaha gayee thi itni subah subah? (Stupid girl! Where did u go so early in the morning?)

Vicky sees this from behind and thinks: Hey bhagwan! Aaj toh papa bhi business trip par gaye hai... aaj didi koh kaun bachyegah? (Oh god! Papa's gone on a business trip today.. who will save didi now?)

Kasturi said in a painful tone: Maine kuch nahin kiya chachi! She began to cry. 😭 (I didn't do anything!)

Alka: Teri itni himat ki tu mere aage bole? 😡 (How dare you talk back at me?)

Just then, Devika comes and says: Bhabhi! Please! Rukiye! Jab dekho aap mere bacho ke peeche parre rehte ho! (Bhabhi! Please! Stop it! U're always after my kids!)

Alka: Haan! Haan! Meri suntah kaun hai! (Yeah! Yeah! Who listens to me?)

She storms away.

Kasturi was happy that Devika saved her. She never felt that happy when someone else saved her. Altough her ear was paining very much, she had a big smile on her face. 😃

8 PM:

Devika looked into the fridge to take vegetables to cook for dinner. But, there was nothing.

Devika didn't know who to ask to go and get something. If she told Alka, she would go mad at her. If she told Ganga, she would become a volcano and errupt all her anger at her and would tell her the famous puchline she often said " you treat me as a servant". If she told Vicky, he would go fooling around instead. She thought of telling Kasturi.

She went into Kasturi's room trying to be as nice as possible. (Devika was only nice when she wanted something.)

Devika: Kasturi beta.

Kasturi was on cloud nine. She was so happy that Devika came to see her. For a second, she thought she was dreaming. She pinched her self without letting Devika notice. When she found out it was real, she became extra happy.

Kasturi (trying to control her hapiness): Ji maa. (Yes, maa)

Devika: Tum market jaake sabzi le kar aaogi? (Can you please go to the market and buy vegetables?)

Kasturi: Zaroor! (Sure!)

While coming back home, Kasturi saw Robbie.

Kasturi: RUBIII! (She called him Rubi on purpose.)

Robbie turns around to see who it is.

Robbie saw it's Kasturi and thought in his mind: Kasturi! Calling mes! She likes mes! She likes mes!

He thought that she likes him. He got soo happy! He wanted to jump and shout. But, he couldn't.

Kasturi comes to him and says: Hi Rubi.

Robbie: Hellos! 😃 And, me names no Rubi. It's Robbie.

Kasturi:....(She wanted to laugh out loud.)

Robbie: Par agar aap mujhe Rubi bulaana chahtee hai toh main apna naam badalke Robbie se Rubi rakhdoonga. 😃 (But, if u want to call me Rubi, I'll cange my name from Robbie to Rubi.)

Kasturi thinks in her mind: Ajeeb hai! Yeh mujhe dekh kar itna khush kyon hojata hai? Yeh toh meri liye apnaa naam badalne koh tayaar hai.😕 (Weird! Why does he get so happy when he sees me? He's even ready to change his name for me!)

Robbie: As Shake the Speare says: Whats is in thes names?

Kasturi: Waise, tum yaha kaise? (Anyways, what brings u here?)

Robbie: Bus yuhin.. (Nothing, just like that)

The wind came and blew Kasturi's hair a little bit on her face. That made her look even more beautiful. She looked so beautiful that all Robbie wanted to do is stare at her.

Kasturi move her hair. She noticed Robbie staring at her which made her uncomfortable.

Kasturi: Excuse me!

Robbie came back to his senses and said: Sorry.

There was silence for a few minutes. Kasturi finally broke the silence saying : Kal mera birthday hai... toh party hai... tum zaroor aana... (Tomorrow is my birthday.... so there's a party.. Please do come.)

Robbie in his mind: Gods! She likes mes so muchs! She invites mes for Happy Birthdays! 😃

Robbie: Haan... main zaroor aaonga (Yeah... I'll surely come.)

Kasturi: Thanks! 😊 but, in her mind she was thinking: God! What have I just done? Maine iss Rubi koh invite karliya?(I've invited this Rubi?) How could I?

Suddenly, thunder strikes and it starts raining. Kasturi gets scared of the thunder and hugs Robbie tight. Both went into a magical world. Kasturi felt so nice in his arm. It was the best place in the world. She felt as if she wanted to die in his arms.

After a while, both came back to their senses. Kasturi moved away and said: Sorry.

When she turned around, she felt her dupatta stuck to something. She thought that Robbie stopped her. She felt angry. But, deep down inside her heart, she felt happy thinking that he stopped her.

She turned around to see that Robbie didn't stop her. Her duppata was stuck to his button.

Kasturi:

She felt sad that he didn't stop her. She wondered why she felt sad.

Robbie: Kasturi, your duppatas sticks to mes!

Kasturi: Oh! Sorry.

She quickly took the duppata out. She covered her head with it as it was raining.

They walked back home. As they were walking, Robbie said: Pataa hai Kasturi, agar tum pehli baarish mein kuch maango toh woh miljaata hai. (U know what Kasturi, if u ask for something in the first rain of the year, it comes true.)

Kasturi: Acha? (Really?)

Robbie: Toh aap ne kuch maanga? (Did u ask for anything?)

Kasturi: Nahin toh. Aapne kya maanga? (No... what did u ask for?)

Robbie: Maine yeh maanga ki duniya ki sabh se beautifuls ladki mere saath ho aur woh such bhi hogaya. (I asked for the most beautiful girl in the world to be right beside me... and see, it's come true!)

Kasturi thought in her mind: Bhagwan yeh phir se shuroo hogaya?🤢 (God! There he goes again!)

Robbie: Aap ne kuch nahin maanga? Kuch toh chahta hoga aapka dil. (You didn't ask for anything? Your heart must be wanting something!)

Kasturi: Nahin ji. Mera dil kuch nahin chahta. (No. My heart doesn't want anything.)

Robbie: Aisa kaise ho sakhtah hai? Sabhka dil kuch na kuch toh chahtah hai. (How can that be? Everyone's heart wants something.)

Kasturi (a bit angrier this time): Acha, toh aap sabh ke dil ki baath jaanta hai. (Yea rite! So u know what everyone's heart wants?)

Robbie: Haan... Main jaanta hai ki aapka dil kya chahtah hai. Batao? (Yes, I know what your heart wants.. should I tell you?)

Kasturi (even more angrier this time): Haanji... baataiye! (Ok... tell me!)

Robbie: Aapka dil yeh chahtah hain ki main yaha se chalaajaaon kyunki main aapka dhimakh khaaraha hoon. (Your heart wants me to leave because, I'm annoying you.)

Kasturi: Nahin, nahin, aisa kuch nahi hai. (No, no, there's nothing like that.)

Robbie: Aap ki shakal se toh aisa dikhtah hai. (I can tell from your face!)

Kasturi (feeling embarrased): Chalo chodo! (Leave it.)

Robbie: Apni aankhen bandh karke iss baarish ki har ek boondh koh apne dil takh pohchne doh. Phir dekhna tumhare saare ghum door hojayenge. (Close your eyes and let every raindrop go to your heart. Then see how all your sorrow dissappears.)

Kasturi: Oh! mera ghar agaya bye! (Oh! my home is here bye!)

Robbie: Byes! *He keeps waving at her*

Kasturi: 😕

She runs inside and yells: Maa! main ghar aagayi! (Maa! I'm home!)

She keeps the vegetables for dinner , goes and takes a quick shower changes in to her night gown and comes down to eat dinner.

As she was coming down, she was sneezing. She caught a very bad cold.

Kasturi: aaaa- CHOOOO! aaaa- CHOOO!

Devika, Ganga and Alka at the same time: Tum mein tameez nahin hai kya? (Don't u have any manners?)

Kasturi: Sorry! 😔

Later that night, it was still raining. Kasturi went in the balcony in her room. She looked at the sky and closed her eyes and remebered what Robbie said: Apni aankhen bandh karke iss baarish ki har ek boondh koh apne dil takh pohchne doh

Kasturi: aaa-CHOO!

She came back to her senses and thought: Main paagal ho gayi hoon! Main uss Rubi ki baath sunrahi thi? Oh my god! Mujhe kya horaha hai? (I'm going mad! I was listening to that Rubi? Oh my god! What's happening to me?)

Hello readers! How're u all?

Hope u all like this part.... It took me more than 2 hours to write it.... I wrote all of it then, it all got deleted! so, I re-typed it LOL.. so I hope u all liked this part.. it was the loongest part so I hope u all liked it and it had a RoKa scene..lol
This part was dedicated to 3 people:
Hummy- She was the one who reminde me of Alka... I had almost forgotten bout Alka... thank u Hummy... Unfortunately, our Hummy has hurt herself very badly... Let's hope she recovers soon and comes back! I miss u Humz!
Annu di-I put SRK's latest dialogues from RNBDJ just for u in this part.(the ones in green) hope u liked it😊
Mimi di- Unfortunately, my di sprained her finger and ankle...Let's hope she gets well soon

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shumshad parveen

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Posted: 16 years ago

#196

wow...i am first.👏it is my pleasure .

lol the title is superb...Yeh tera mera milna

Kalmohee! ...i never heard of that word.yaahooo..i learned a new word

lol kasturi called robbie as rubi...that was good.once in my ff i made kastui say robbie as ragi...poor robbie.

so sweet of him lol he want to change his name for the sake of kasturi.

robbie refering his as mes is too cute.i like that.

wow kas invied him for his birth day...great going.

hanks to hunder.it did a great job both the ffs (mimi and you )

lol i canot read you green print.😭may be i have colour blindness😭.i just read the english translation.

yep it is true u r prayers will be accepted if you pray when it starts raining.

Hope u all like this part..ofcourse.. It took me more than 2 hours to write it..i know.because i too take that minimum that much time to write... I wrote all of it then, it all got deleted! omg...it happens to me also.i hate that.so, I re-typed it LOL..so sweet of u dear so I hope u all liked this part.. it was the loongest part so I hope u all liked it and it had a RoKa scene..lol.it was rocking.i love reading it.

Edited by robbii - 16 years ago

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Batukchand BittuJi Sharma

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Posted: 16 years ago

#197

Originally posted by: robbii
wow...i am first
lol... U're always first 😛
.👏
OMG! claps for me?
it is my pleasure .
awwee... thank u soo much Shumi di!

lol the title is superb...Yeh tera mera milna
awwee...thank u... I was going to change it since it's a Himesh Reshamiya song (no offence I HATE him) But now, I'm glad that I didn't 😆

Kalmohee! ...i never heard of that word.
hehe... I've always heard it on TV😆.... I've heard Alka saying it billions of times... so I thought of putting it... I don't exactly know what it means...LOL
yaahooo..i learned a new word
hehe.... congratulations

lol kasturi called robbie as rubi...that was good.once in my ff i made kastui say robbie as ragi...poor robbie.
yea...lol... I remember that😆.... Bandhan was one of my favourite FFs...I miss it😭...but I love Ishq huwa too.... It's become one of my favourites, too😊

so sweet of him lol he want to change his name for the sake of kasturi.
yea... he's soo sweet😳

robbie refering his as mes is too cute.i like that.
I'm glad u liked it😊

wow kas invied him for his birth day...great going.
LOL.... u'll change ure mind after reading the next part....or maybe not... wait and watch😆

hanks to hunder.it did a great job both the ffs (mimi and you )
awwweeee.... thank u Shumi di😳

lol i canot read you green print.😭may be i have colour blindness😭.i just read the english translation.
awwee... nooo! u r not colour blind.... my mistake I put it in green!😭... I tried to change it but I don't know why it doesnt change😕

yep it is true u r prayers will be accepted if you pray when it starts raining.
OMG! really? I just thought it was a filmi dialogue said by SRK... I never knew it was true😆

Hope u all like this part..ofcourse..thank uu It took me more than 2 hours to write it..i know.because i too take that minimum that much time to write ohh...lol..ok... but this seemed to be crazy for me! My brain wasn't even working and my fingers were tooo tired... I wrote all of it then, it all got deleted! omg...it happens to me also.i hate that I know... Inn computers ki toh 🤬 .so, I re-typed it LOL..so sweet of u dear awwee.... it's ure lovely comments that make me do tht.... all the feedback from my readers make my day! so I hope u all liked this part.. it was the loongest part so I hope u all liked it and it had a RoKa scene..lol.it was rocking.i love reading it. thank uu soo much Shum di 🤗

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LAHORIKURI

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Posted: 16 years ago

#198

wooww ....me 2nd

ll come back after reading..

but thanks for the update.....

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swan20

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Posted: 16 years ago

#199

Shivi it was soooo nice to see ur update when i logged on.......😃

Awesome part........loved to read so many ROKA scenes......😳

Alka called kasturi ''kalmuhi''........😡 .......meri taraf se usko ek thappad de do.......😛,,,,,,,,devika is also so mean.......

kasturi calls robbie rubii.......🤣.......robbie is willing to change his name for her......so sweet.........😳
As Shake the Speare says: Whats is in thes names?...........this is too funny.....never heard Shakespeare being quoted like this......😆 😆 😆...........Me likes Robbies and his englishes very muchs.......😛 😆

Aww ROKA hugged........😳...chooooo chweet....waiting for kasturi's b'day party now.

You know when i was reading the baarish wale dialogues i had this huge smile on my face.......they are just so beautiful........i especially liked this......Apni aankhen bandh karke iss baarish ki har ek boondh koh apne dil takh pohchne doh. Phir dekhna tumhare saare ghum door hojayenge........and then i read that these are SRKs dialogues from RNBDJ........i'm so happy & touched that u put them here for me ........thankyou sooooooooooo much sweety.....🤗........you have very beautifully put these dialogues in ur ff.......well done........👏

I'm loving ur ff.........keep it up dear.......😊
Aww u had to re-type the entire part.............thanks so much for taking all this effort for us.....😊