PreRish One-Shot: The Smell of Dread and Guilt - Page 2

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Posted: 6 years ago
#11

So heart touching. His sacrifice started to melt Prerna's heart❤️😭

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Simple, gripping, natural, believable, plausible, and perfect.

The journey of P from start to the end....miles covered and described beautifully.

At the start, she was in the hospital bcoz she was supposed/expected to be there, towards the end she wanted to be there.

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Absolutely amazing. 😊

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Posted: 6 years ago
#14

Amazing writing shruti 🤗

Now hope aisa kuch show mein bhi dekhne ko mile 😆

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Well written, Prerna guilt, desperation superb.

Respect and being cordial with each other might be a good start

Love is too soon..

Wonderful OS and brilliant writing

Dil maange more... keep writing

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Posted: 6 years ago
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OMG. This is brilliant Shruti. And you wrote this in an hour👏.

The beginning explaining her guilt, restlessness, fear for him, she is as if in some trauma, looking him like this in the ICU. The calmness and solace she gets in his presence even when he is unconscious.

I loved how she was about to say I was scared, but changed to Kuki was scared. And the way she assured him that Kuki is safe and is waiting for him so that he would recover soon.

The ending❤️. She wondered what she meant to him, a wife or a caretaker of his daughter.

Edited by MR21 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#17

It's really beautiful.its beyond amazingly feels good when prerna normalised her Racing heart by hearing his heart beat.in unconscious state too he is soothing her !last part where she determined to make herself a worthy wife is really very endearing. Thanks

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Shruti!

REs

Edited!

Finally caught up to this!

Okay, there are so many unsaid things among them and you have captured the essence of it wonderfully. The confusion and the unasked, unanswered questions are heightening the emotions.

I love the question posed in end. This was absolutely wonderful. Keep them coming Shruti.


Love❤️

Edited by Eternized_Blues - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Loved it, beautifully written :)

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Posted: 6 years ago
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WHAT BAJAJ TO SAVE PRERNA AND BE IN HOSPITAL WHERE HAVE YOU READ IT ?????p.s truly amazing OS had all my heart

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