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Posted: 17 years ago
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Ok, guys sorry for making you wait for so long..But my muse and I had a fight. Here's the update:

Episode 12-Prema against Prema

Next morning. Bajaj House, Kitchen Prerna is sitting at the head of the kitchen table,reading a newspaper Kuki, Tanvi, Sneha, Doris and Palchin are all there. Prem saunters in.

Prem: Good morning, everybody.Whats for breakfast?

He sits next to Palchin, facing Sneha and reaches for the juice carton and pours orange juice. Prema comes in, walking exactly like Prem.

PD: Good morning, everybody! Whats for breakfast?

She sit next to Prem, and reaches for the same juice carton and pours juice. Sneha watches in wonder at the resemblance between the two.

Sneha: Kyun PD, tumhara aaj kya khanay ka dil chah raha hai?

PD: Jo Prem uncle ka chah raha hai.

Prerna looks up from her newspaper suspiciously. She lowers the paper and watches her granddaughter carefully.

Prem: Wow, since when did you become a fan of mine?

PD: Since, actually main aap ko bata nahin sakti, maine kissi sey waada kiya hai.

Prerna looks on,

Prem: A secret, huh?

PD: Yes.

Prem: I am very good at getting secrets out of people.

PD: Me too!

She smiles up at him.

Prem: Acha, to phir test karte hai, tell me mujhe meethay main sab sey ziyaada kaun si chez pasand hai? I mean, what is my favourite dessert?

PD: Yeh secret nikaal ney kay liye mujhe aap sey kuch poochna bhi nahin paray ga. Because you like what I like, aur mujhe sab sey ziyaada rasgullay pasand hai.

Prerna smiles as she remembers when she found out for the first time that Prem loved rasgullay, just like her.

Prem: How can you be so sure that I like what you like?

PD: Thats the secret you have to figure out.

She gulps down the rest of her juice and jumps off her chair.

PD:Chalo, Tanvi hum khelne chalte hai.

Tanvi runs off after her.

Sneha: PD, tera naashta?

PD: Sneha Mausi, aap khatam kar leyna.

She suddenly turns and gives a thumps-up signal to someone, its unclear to whom.

Prem shakes his head after her.

Prem: Well i have to go work

He jumps out of the chair.

Prerna: Prem, tera naashta?

Prem: Mother India, aap khatam kar laye na.

He goes out of the room, leaving his mother and sister staring in wonder after the pair.

Scene 2, Evening, Satara, Mukti comes home carrying a huge briefcase and a lot of files in her arms.

Mukti: Prema! Baby, Come help Mamma with-( she stops as she realizes the girl isnt there-) Mujhe kya ho gaya hai? Woh to yaahaan par hai bhi nahin. Jab mujhe us ki zaroorat hoti hai, jab kabhi nahin hoti, aur jab usse meri zaroorat hoti hai to foraan meray pass aati hai. (shakes her head) Bilkul Baap par gaye hai.

The phone rings.

Mukti: Yeh wohi hogi. Aaj ja kar usse apni Mamma ki yaad aaye.

She drops all the stuff on the floor and reaches for the phone.

Mukti: Hello?

PD: Mamma, main bol rahi hoon.

Mukti: Wow, main abhi tujhe hi yaad kar rahi thi.

PD: Saat baj rahe hai, aap office sey aaye hogi. Kya aaj ghar ziyaada files lai thi?

Mukti: Excuse me, tumhe kya lagta hai keh main tumhe sirf is waje sey yaad karti hoon?

PD(reproachfully): Mamma!

Mukti: Okay, fine, main tujhe is waajaa sey hi yaad kar rahi thi.

PD: Haan dekha Basanti, pakar liya na? Main aap ka kitna saara kaam karti thi aur phir aap ki kehti ho kay main zaroorat kay waqt kabhi nahin hoti.

Mukti: Maine yeh kab kahaan?

PD: Jab aap ney woh saari filay zameen par girai hogi to tab to kaha hi hoga.

Mukti: Tu kaise samjh jaati hai keh main kya soch rahi hoti hoon?

PD: Mamma, aap ki beti hoon, kya aap apni Mummy ki baat baghair un key kuch kahe samjh nahin jaati thi?

Mukti suddenly remembers the numerous times she comforted Prerna when she cried and vice versa, realizing just how much she misses her foster mother.

Mukti(with longing in her voice): Prema, kya teri Big P waahan par hain? Mujhe un sey baat karni hai?

PD: Big P?

She looks around the room. Prerna is sitting on the sofa, going thorugh some files. She looks up at the mention of her name. PD spots Prem coming downstairs.She snaps her fingers mischeviously as an idea comes to her mind.

PD: Mamma, ek second hold karay, main unhe bolati hoon?

She carefully covers the mouthpiece and calls out to Prem.

PD: Prem Uncle, meri Mamma ko aap sey baat karna chahti hai. Aap idhaar aaoo gaye?

Prem shrugs and makes his way towards the phone. In a flash, Prerna rises and reaches for the phone handset, pushing it onto the floor. The line disconnects.

Satara-Mukti stares at the phone, not realizing how close she came to being discovered.

Mukti: Oh God, kaash main ek baar in sab sey waapas mil leyti. Apne parivaar sey mileyti. Prem sey mil leyti. Phir mujhe baaki ki zindagi us ki sirf parchaye kay guzaarna bhi manzoor hota. Par, sirf ek baar main us ki shakal to dekh loon. Us ki awaaz to sun loon.

Then resigning herself to a fate without him, she picks up a picture of her daughter.

Mukti: Par, meray pass atleast tum to ho. Ghar jaldi aa ja, PD, tum jaanti nahin ho kay teri Mamma tumhe kitna miss karti hai, kiddo.

She kisses the picture.

Mumbai-same scene.

Prem: Umm Mother India, aap ko kya hua tha? Itna jaldi to aap bhashan denay kay liye bhi nahin bhagti jitni jaldi aap aaj phone ley kar bhagi?

Prerna: Mera haath phisaal giya tha. (PD looks at her, angrily) PD, tu ja Tanvi kay kamray main jaa, mujhe Prem sey baat karni hai.

PD glares at her grandmother and then stomps off.

Prem: God, kitna ghussa karti hai. Bilkul aap ki jaisi hai.

Prerna: Tu issse bahut yaad kare ga jab yeh chali jaye gaye?

Prem(smiling to himself): Much as I hate to admit, par haan, isse yaad to karoonga. Is kay yaahaan aane yeh ghar jag jaata hai.

Prerna(gearing up): Par tu is bachi ko itna pasand karta hai aur woh bacha jo Palchin..

Prem: Not again, maine aisa kya kar diya?

Prerna: Woh aaj phir sey akelay checkup kay liya gaye. Beta, kabhi to tu us kay saath chala jaya kar. Us sey is waqt sab sey ziyaada teri zaroorat hain.

Prem(angrily): Jis tareekay sey aap ko Dad Basu ki zaroorat thi jab main paida honay wala tha. aur woh aap kay saath bhi thay. Unhe kya mila, seeney par goli!

Prerna(losing her temper): Prem!

Prem: I wont judge you, Mother India for killing my father but you dont judge me about my role as a father either. Jab main aap sey pehli baar mila tha, jabhi maine aap ko apna usool bataya tha: Live and Let live, Mother India.

He walks off, leaving her standing alone with the influx of memories.

Prerna: Tujhe to samjha nahin paye. shayd teri beti ko samjha paaon.

Scene 3-Prema is in Tanvi's room, holding her parents' picture in her hands.

PD: I am sorry, guys, plan fail ho gaya. Par dont worry, main aap ko mila kar hi choroongi.

Prerna enters the room and knocks on the door.

Prerna: Prema, beta?

Prema looks up and quickly hides her parents' picture under the pillow.

PD: Big P, andar aao na.

Prerna walks over to the child and looks into her eyes, identical to her own. She reaches for her and kisses her on the forehead.

Prerna: Tu jaanti hai na keh main tujh sey bahut pyar karti hoon na?

PD: Aap yeh kyun pooch rahi hai?

Prerna: Beta, mujhe tujh sey ek baat poochni hai.

PD looks up, knowing whats coming next.

Prerna: Jab, tu ney woh phone Prem ko diya tha. Kya sach much teri Mamma ko un sey baat karni thi?

PD doesnt answer but looks at the ground.

Prerna: PD, tu to hamesha kehti hai keh tu sach bolti hai. Mujhe sach bata, kya to jaan kar Prem ki baat apni Mamma sey karana chahti thi?

PD: Haan, Big P, main chahti thi keh woh un sey baat karay.

Prerna: Kyun?

PD: Kyunki woh un sey baat karna chahti hai.

Prerna: Kya Mukti ney tujh sey yeh kahaan tha?

PD: Mamma ko kehnay ki zaroorat nahin hai. Woh meri best friend hai. Jo woh kehti bhi nahin main samjh jaati hoon.

PD: Aur main samjh gaye keh Prem uncle sey saalo sey baat karna chahti hai. Jab bhi woh mujhe dekh kar roti hai, woh unhe hi yaad kar rahi hoti hai. I hate seeing my mother cry, agar un kay aansoo sirf meray Papa kay aane sey kam ho gaye to main unhe meray Papa sey mila kar hi choru gi.

Prerna(shocked): Tujhe kis ney kahaan keh woh hi teray Papa hai?

PD: Please, I am six, not stupid. Aap jabhi mujhe Mumbai ley kar aaye taake main kuch samay apne Papa sey saath rahoon. Aur mujhe apne Papa pasand aaye, aur main hamesha apnay Mamma aur Papa dono kay saath rehna chahti hoon. With both of them together.

Prerna(angrily): Jo tu chahti hai, main kabhi honay nahin doongi.Tu jaanti nahin hai, Maine pehle hi tai kar liya tha keh main Prem aur Mukti ko waapas nahin milne doongi.

PD: Aur shayad aap nahin jaanti keh main kitni ziddi hoon. (she folds her arms in anger) Main Prem Sharma aur Mukti Deshmukh ki beti hoon, un dono ki tara hi ziddi hoon. Aur meri zid hai meray Mamma aur Papa ko milana.

Prerna stares at her, seeing the child's father clearly in her anger.

PD's face softens at Prerna's expression.

PD: I am sorry, Big P. I love you, I really do. Par main aap ka yeh kehna nahin maan sakti. But I still love you, a lot.

She runs from the room, crying.

Prerna: Tu ney ek baat to sach kahi, tu sach much Prem Sharma aur Mukti Deshmukh ki beti ho. Tujh mein, main apne dono bacho ko dekh sakti hoon.

End of Episode

Hope you liked it!

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Next Episode: A Mystery Helper

Note: Only Eight more episodes to go.

Edited by Karrie - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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wow......amazing update 👏
cant wait 4 the nxt update 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago
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awwww so cute....continue soon...dont take too long...lol...i'll be waiting....continue soon and good job! 👏

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Posted: 17 years ago
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simply amazing, just loved it continue soon, its so good!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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im enjoying the fan fic
plz i m waiting for the next part
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Posted: 17 years ago
#96
prema is so cute
wonder who the mystery helper is?
continue soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hey I loved it!!!
Awesome! No doubt ur an ecellent writer!
Can't wait for the next part!

Do cont. soon!!
Love,
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Edited by ^PoocHi^ - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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shes such a cutie! really only 8 more epis? well im realloy loving it, continue soon!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Thanks you guys, hope it was worth the wait. 😉

@Robin M: Yeah well, I had already decided the pace and lenght of the FF when I started it. Its just the dialogues where I get stuck.. 😆 😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
Wow. Thanks. Had waited for soo long. Very good epeisode. Prema is Cool, just like Prem :D

Please Update soon Karrie :D
You FF is the Best!

But 😕 unfortunatly only 8 episodes left ;( Hope prerm and mukti will meet eachother.
What will happen to palchin?

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