RishPrerna New Fanfic PART7- PAGE15 - Page 2

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Posted: 18 years ago
#11
thank u so much for liking it,,it took an hour to write all that down and half an hour to clear mistakes(lol)..u can call me rabi...it was just a tester, i'll be coming up with PRB romance soon,...i m just in love with their chemistry,although i hate chemistry...lol
i wud like some suggestions and criticism so i try to correct my mistakes..though i m not good as sammie di or psawyer or others...
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Posted: 18 years ago
#12
Everyone has their own style Rabi- and you rock in your style- there's no comparison going on..

You could do with some spacing between the separate paragraphs and writing the dialogues one below the other if you have the time..

It was really groovy and we really enjoyed it!
:)
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Posted: 18 years ago
#13
Yea sukhi is right there shouldn't be any comparison...everyone is unique. Rabi...i m like totally loving ur ff...just smashing

btw u r the first one to call me di..aww shooo shweet 😳
btw psawyer aka vasu is older than me too 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
#14
i'll be updating a small part soon..
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Posted: 18 years ago
#15
It is awesome. especially the bournvita part!
aawww my rishu baba :)

hey do join us at the hub if u r a PRB fan. we hv lots of PRB fans there.

waiting 4 next part :)
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Yea Rabi..
visit the hub sometimes as well..

waiting for your update!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#17
me waitiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnng 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
#18
sorry for delay,my net is messing around ,keeps disconnectin,thank u everyone for appreciating my work,i hope u like this part too,i tried a bit romance in this one,...i hope im not overdoing anything,forgive my mistakes of anykind,thanku for the advice,really i m glad that u did,and as m not much familiar with how the forum works i'll be needing ur help to let everybody know ,where the update is or if it is updated, i guessed if it is taking so much time then why not give a full account of hwithout further delay here it is...

2nd Part

next morning in PRB love nest

its 6:30 am (i know u'd b wondering y tell time, but u'll know, read first)

Bajaj wakes up with the feeling that somebody is stroking his hair gently,he slowly opens his eyes and sees his prerna kneeling on one elbow stroking his hair and smiling at him ,Bajaj looks at his wife looking as fresh as a tulip after rain ,he just finds himself speechless and doesn't blink and keeps looking at her,seeing this prerna blushes like a girl ,suddenly one her lock of her open hair falls on bajaj's face he gets intoxicated by the very feel of it,he just closes his eyes and it seems that he is dreaming a beautiful dream prerna laughs softly looking at his expressions,he opens his eyes on her laugh,both don't say anything just keep looking into each other's eyes,eyes do all the talking,prerna blushes and moves her hand in order to remove her lock off bajaj's face but before she could ,bajaj holds it between his finger and thumb,and starts wrapping around his index finger and thus drawing her face closer and closer to his ,prerna is blushing and her heartbeat is rising she breaths heavily she tries to resist but bajaj keeps wrapping her lock of hair around his finger and in order to avoid the pain she has to come closer,,,(she isn't trying )prerna is so close that bajaj can hear her heavy breathing he brings her more close, smiles and then he just gives her kiss,a PASSIONATE kiss ,prerna turns red as a rose and she feels her ear lobes and cheeks burning and her body numb,she is holding her breath, bajaj releases her from the kiss(finally..lol)looks at her and sees her eyes closed and with held breath and smiles ,prerna opens her eyes,and looks into bajaj's eyes,they stare at each other for a while and then prerna gives up she cannot match upto bajaj...both of them are still close though so close that they can hear each other breath, bajaj puts his arm around her waist and pulls her close,she just gives in,gives into his warm,passionate hug,puts her head on his strong chest and closes her eyes,bajaj just holds her never to let her go...

somebody knocks at the door of the LN(love nest..hehe)they both get up,bajaj makes a face..both look at the time,its 9:00 am,they both get up ,prerna goes to the washroom still smiling and bajaj walks upto the door and opens it ,smiles,its kasak...
still a bit sleepy,

kasak: dad can i sleep in ur room ..yawns
sneha who is standing behind her smacks her on her head and says.
sneha: we r here to wake them up not to put u to sleep here idiot,,
kasak makes a face, and starts immitating sneha..both start quarrelling
bajaj just can't help but smile,his heartbeats standing infront of him still fighting like they used to when they were little...
sneha just hits kasak on the head again and she makes a crying face and hugs her dad,
Bajaj: snehaaa...buri baat beta ,she is ur little sister...
kasak taking advantage of the situation makes a face to sneha
kasak: see sneha di , u shud not hit me i m ur cute little adorable baby sister...
both bajaj and sneha laugh..while kasak hugs her dad like he is a teddy bear or something...
sneha : move a bit fatso...
kasak: AH!u called me a fatso..fatso hogi tumharree saas...
all three of them start laughing...
Bajaj:thats very bad u shud not call elders names(he is still laughing himself)
meanwhile sneha finally moves kasak a bit and comes into her papa's arms as well ,,
three of them hugging and laughing in the doorway..
Prem sees this from his room...feels something amiss in his life..feels something ..what ..he knew not, or didn't want to know...watching those three woke something up in him that he had lulled to sleep ages ago..and he deliberately avoided to explore that side of his heart ...
bajaj tells his daughters to go and they'll(PRB) will join them in a while..they leave while bajaj watches his daughters go towards the dining room still quibling,smiles and closes the door...

prerna comes out after the shower ,her hair wet ,asks him what was he laughing at...bajaj turns around to tell her but stops,smiles and speaks almost in a whisper...prerna just looks at him..
Prerna :Mr.bajaj aap kya keh rahe hein ,,mujhay kuch sunai nahi diya...
Bajaj comes a bit close and speaks in the previous pattern,prerna still not able to hear him walks upto him(thats what he wanted)
prerna: Mr. Bajaj aap ooncha bolein ge..mujhay kuch sunai nahi diya..
Bajaj almost pounces on her and startles her...she laughs..as he holds her in his arms and is laughing himself too..
Prerna: (still laughing) Mr.bajaj...kya kar rahe hein..chorein bhi..
Bajaj: apni patni se romance kar raha hoon...or waise bhi abhi main nei kuch kya he kahan hai....(looks at her with earnest emotions in them)
prerna turns crimson red seeing the look in his eyes..
he removes her wet hair off her face with his hand...he sees some water drops on her face and neck...
kisses her ..and thus removes the water drops off her face and neck...prerna hugs him tight...he hugs back ...even tighter..
tring tring(mobile rings...lol)
both of them break the hug..bajaj looks at the mobile ,darn this technology...
prerna smiles...its a reminder, he has an important business lunch...
prerna goes infront of the dressing table and blow dries her hair...bajaj mean while looks at his schedule in his PDA..
Bajaj:prerna,aaj main nei aik ajeeb sa sapna dekha...(prerna turns around to look at him while combing her hair)...main nei dekha ke tum mera sar apni god mein rakh ker, bournvita wala doodh pila rahi ho...thats so silly(starts laughing an unsure laugh)..prerna just looks at him trying hard to control her laughter...keeps looking at him like that ..bajaj notices that...he understandes ...both of them break into a hearty laugh...
prerna tells bajaj..aap ja ka fresh ho jain main aapke kapre nikaltee hoon..goes towards their walk in closet...
while going to the washroom...bajaj walks by prerna but not before kissing her..
she almost pushes him into the washroom..comes back all smiling...and starts thinking what he shud wear today..hhhmmmm
prerna thinks to herself: he shud look gud today well he always looks good no matter what he is wearing..takes out a dark chocolate colored suit with offwhite italian silk tie...(she is herself wearing same colored saree as his suit..
by chance not deliberate..lol)
bajaj comes out and changes..while brushing his hair infront of the mirror he notices something...
prerna is clearing the room.she is all ready and looking very pretty..unknown to her is bajaj's interest..
Bajaj: prerna zara yahan aana...signals towards the tie with his eyes...she smiles and moves her head as if in dismay(but at heart she likes doing that..)(y u'll know in coming updates)
Prerna: aap kabhi to apni tie khud baandh liya karein...
Bajaj moves his arms aorund her waist...
prerna:Mr.Bajaj .baaz aa jaye aap...aaj aapko ho kya gya hai..kuch zyda hi romantic ho rahe hein...
bajaj is abt to answer but there is a knock on the door...its kasak again...she yells from outside the closed door...
kasak: mom ..dad..aa bhi jain..bhook se mera bura haal ho raha hai..
PRB walk towards the door and open it..sneha again comes from behind kasak and again smacks her on the head..
sneha: tum kiswaqt bhooki nahi hoti...
kasak makes a face..
kasak: mom,dad look...
Prerna: o come on u two,subha subha na shrow ho jao..
kasak:ab subah kahan reh gayee hai...aaj hum record late nashta karein gei..
prerna: woh kyun?
kasak: my dear mom ,agar aapko ....realizes and stops in between...
kasak:time dekhein mom,(drags her literally towards the dining hall,while sneha and bajaj follow them..)

will update soon...
thank u 4 bearing with me
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Posted: 18 years ago
#19
It was ammmmmmmmmmmmazing- and I dare say- it was even better than the first part- thanks a lot for the quick update.. just too good!!

Keep it up Rabi..
Will make sure all the PRB fans give your FF a try...
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Posted: 18 years ago
#20
And yeah..
here's the important thing.. now that you have posted the second part on this page.. just go to the first page and you will see an 'edit' option below your post..

Click on that button and edit the title to your post and include- part2 on pg3

- so that everyone knows..

:-)

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