FF: Love Sick Part 9 pg8

hey guys

hv been a silent readn for many ff n kasamh se has been my fav show but lately i wannna kill the creatives newayz i jus got an idea for a ff so if u like it respond

jai n bani's family's hv been friends for years n jai's rishta has been fixed wid pia the oldest but bani has been luv sick for jai for years n wen she learns abt the rishta she goes abroad to study but suddenly shez called back.......bani is married to jai????

if u like dah idea respond n i'lll continue wid dese ff n if noh well styll let me noe if it suckz lol

love the idea of the ff.....u should continue with it...would love to read it

thats a great idea.. but the ideas isn't all its about if have to make the story interesting and make sure it flows so the readers stays glued to it and not get bored.

nways its a graet idea and you should go for it.

seems like a great idea. do write it. would love to read it.

Anam

Character Analysis:

Jai Walia: He is 22 years old and the oldest son to Uday Walia. He is very actibe and the partying type. He hates anything to do with work school or anything to do with where he actually has to do something. He is a very rich spoilt brat and wants everything his way. He is very short tempered but from heart he is the sweetest.

Ranvir Walia: The second oldest son to Uday Walia and is the responsible son. He is 21 and at such a young age has started to work for his father.

Sahil Walia: The youngest son to Uday and Krishna. He is 19 and is best friends with Bani.

Jigyasa and Aditya Bali: Jigyasa is Uday's and Krishna's daughter. She is 25 and married to Aditya Bali, Uday's cousin son.

Uday and Krishna Walia: Parents of four kids. Are proud of all except are worried a little for Jai. The are really rich due to their hotel business.

Nishikant and Kiran Dixit: Parents of three daughters. Nishikant is really rich because he owns his own chains of restaurants.

Pia Dixit: Oldest daughter. She is 21 years old and love partying and fashion. Her soft spot is her little sister Bani. Very spoilt and is very rude because she thinks she is the best.

Bani Dixit: Middle child. She is 19 years old. She is very quiet and caring. She loves her family and can do anything for them. She has had a secret crush on Jai Walia since she can remember. The only person who knows about this is her best friend Sahil. Se is not as preety but her personality makes everyone love her.

Rano Dixit: She is 18 years old and is only in love with her books. She loves her sisters alot but doesn't show anyone. She is very anti-social.

nice characters..so write you first part now...

this is great intro...please do write the ff and the 1st pt soon

I will call this ff: lovesick
Part One:

It was a sunny afternoon in Mumbai. The weather was on its peak. It was such a fine weather. The wind blowing lightly. Everything looked so calm. It was a perfect weather for the picnic.

The Walia's and Dixit's had planned it for so long and at last the day was here. After so long, Kiran and Krishna had got their families together to spend time with each other and enjoy.

The sun was shining through a large window. The room lit up. The room was light blue. In the middle you see a queen sized bed and behind it was a large portrait of a man. A very handsome man around 22. He was wearing a white t-shirt with black jeans. You could tell he was very well built and muscular.

Suddenly you hear a thud from the bathroom and the door opens. The handsome man in the portrait walked out and only in a towel wrapped around him. The face clears and you see none other the one and only Jai Walia.

Jai Walia: Shit mum had to arrange the picnic today. I want to sleep. Oh hell where's my black leather jacket.
He looks all around looking for his jacket, throwing things everywhere.

Krishna: You looking for this?

Jai: Thanks mum

Krishna: Hurry down. Everyone's waiting down even Kiran and Nishikant bhai are here with everyone. Now please come down. Five minutes max...understood!

Krishna slams the door and leaves. Jai gets ready and comes running down the stairs suddenly bumping into someone. Jai grabs on to the person and you see long black hair covering her face. Suddenly she gets out of his arms . You see dark brown eyes with long lashes staring back at Jai.

Jai: Bani can't you see where your going....... Oh and where's Pia? She looked hot yesterday's party.

Bani: (a bit slowly) Sorrry....umm...she'z downstairs...umm... do u noe where Sahil is?

Sahil: Yo Bunz..lets go...i've been looking for u for so long...

Jai goes down while Bani hesitates and looks at Sahil. Sahil could tell she was upset and he knew the reason but who could explain to Bani to forget her crush on Jai and move on...

nice start!!! 👏


cant wait for next part

plz cont soon!

Great start.
liked it.
looking forward to the next part.
like the concept
plz cont. soon