7 months later.. LAST PART..PLZ READ! - Page 22

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Posted: 19 years ago
👏 👏 awsome update
please do continue soon
thanx 😳
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: gudia8712

aawwwwww viddi didi it is so so so so good didi i can't believe how great you are writting didi 👏
didi way too good didi ek dum terrific didi and it is so very interesting didi 👏
please please please continue soon didi
love ya didi,
aap ki gudia 😃




Awwww so sweet of you gudiya... i'm glad you are enjoying it... and i will continue soon... and my depressing scenes between Jai and Bani are nothing compared to your romantic scenes between them 😆. Thanks for reading hun and i will continue soon...

luv ya

Viddi didi
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Posted: 19 years ago
sorry for the delay... here is the next part... and thanks again for reading i hope you enjoy this part..

Part 11

Jai to himself: Why… why is that when I feel that the most happy time of my life is about to come… something goes wrong… I thought I loved Roshini and Pia… but God you thought me that that wasn't love.. BUT Bani… its different… I can't live without her… Her slap today proved that I will become successful and get whatever I want in the business world, but the love that I so desire for, will never enter my life

Jai is so lost in his thought that he has no idea where he is going on the deserted street.

Back at the hospital the rest of the family have come in to see bani and the new child..

Masi: Bani abh tum kasi ho?

Bani: Me tikh hu masi. Masi where is Mr.Walia?

Masi looked towards the floor and in a low voice responded to Bani's question

Masi: Bani he left without saying anything. We tired to stop him but he was so lost in his thoughts that he did not listen and left.

Bani was so angry at herself for slapping Mr. Walia. She didn't want to, but she did to make Roshini and Ranvijay believe that she still had hatred for Mr.Walia. But now after knowing the truth how could she hate him. The only feeling she had for him was love and more then anything she respected him a lot more than before.

Bani to herself: I have to find Mr. Walia.

Bani: Masi I have to find Mr. Walia there is something really important that I need to tell him!

Masi: you can't even to think to leave with your condition. You need to rest. You just had a premature delivery.

Bani: Masi I HAVE TO! I feel just fine, please Masi, let me go to him

Masi felt the hurt Bani was feeling through her words. Though she wanted Bani to rest she couldn't stop Bani and Jai's love from meeting.

Masi: Tikh hai Bani, Jao. I'll look after the baby

Bani got dressed and took off to find the man she loved. She had to tell him before it was too late. Before he got to angry at Bani for what she did..

Bani searched for quite a while. Rano and other members requested to let them accompany her in search for Mr. Walia but Bani refused and said this is between my husband and me and left. But now that she was by herself she was afraid. She made it to the deserted street and suddenly felt a tear from the sky.

She continued her search even through the rain when finally she spotted a figure near the ocean sitting on a big rock starring out towards the ocean. Her heart jumped a beat when she saw that it was Jai. She could recognize him from any angle.

She walked towards him and placed her hands on his shoulder. Jai felt the presence of someone and closed his eyes immediately knowing that it was Bani. He didn't need to see her face to know that it was her. Her one touch let him know of her presence.

Bani: Mr. Walia… please Mr. Walia talk to me

Jai was confused. Why should he continue to pursue Bani if she hated him so much

Jai: Bani… what is left for me to say. I've tried my best to bring you back to me but I'm not that strong to take the pain of someone that I love with all my heart hating me. Bani there is nothing left. I'm tired Bani.. .i'm tired

Bani couldn't believe the mess she had created. She had hurt the person she loved to the extent that he has now chosen to given up on their love. What had she done?

Bani was crying a lot now. The rain continued to poor. Bani and Jai were now soaked and the ocean hitting the shore could be heard.

Bani now went and sat beside Mr. Walia ready to tell him what she felt about him…..


well here you are.. I HOPE YOU ENJOYED AND DIDN'T FIND IT BORING. I'm not sure if i should continue so let me know.. i'm feeling that the story is loosing its touch.. i don't know ... let me know though... alrighty talk to you all later

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Posted: 19 years ago
AAHHH u stopped at the good part!!!!!!!

bani tell him u love him!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 19 years ago
that was a nice part vaidahi 👏 👏
i hope jai listens to bani.
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Posted: 19 years ago
thanks guys i'm glad you enjoyed it... and Jaanu (may i call you that) i luv your fanfics.. they are amazing
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Posted: 19 years ago
Oh! please don't stop
ITs beautiful
Please continue
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: msrk

Oh! please don't stop
ITs beautiful
Please continue



aww thanks.. i'll try... 😳😳 just got to get some good ideas to keep you all hooked😆😉
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Posted: 19 years ago
nicely written part Vaid..
But do't you think that the immediate reaction of Jai should have been -" tum yahaan kya kar rahi ho bani.. abhi abhi tumari delivary huyi hai.. Are you mad..you are in a very fragile state... why have you come out of the hospital bed. And then bani could continue with rest of the part... This is what I think a husband and a newly become father's immediate reaction should be, no matter how hurt he was...This is just an observation.. I always enjoys your writting..keep up the good work.
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: whitepearl

nicely written part Vaid..
But do't you think that the immediate reaction of Jai should have been -" tum yahaan kya kar rahi ho bani.. abhi abhi tumari delivary huyi hai.. Are you mad..you are in a very fragile state... why have you come out of the hospital bed. And then bani could continue with rest of the part... This is what I think a husband and a newly become father's immediate reaction should be, no matter how hurt he was...This is just an observation.. I always enjoys your writting..keep up the good work.



I AM SOO GLAD THAT YOU MADE A SUGGESTION. i always look for them.. i seriously was thinking about Jai saying that but i wanted him to come across as so lost in himself and his feeling about Bani that everything else was lost.. but thanks for your suggestion😉😊😊

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