Originally posted by: aditee
PART 10-B
Jai walked by the bay windows with his afternoon cuppa making a face at the molten bitterness"No sugar! What was I thinking!" he swears.........., watching the sunlight glisten on the waves........ his thots drift to nite before........... his tantrum............his tantrums were always brief he compliemnted himself, coz his attention was soon taken over by other challenging ideas his overworked mind constantly came up with!
Awww my poor baby no sugar, don't worry jaan I am very sweet you can use me as your sugar, this was
A very nicely described, I had imagined a strong, big, built man (a lot like my avi) standing by the balcony with his coffee, looking lost ( I so wanted to join in)
He enjoyed jolting people out of their complacency dropping verbal bombshells. And he did it last nite much to his own embarrassment! And since she had moved in again, thsi was the first time she had given him an opportunity to express that volatile temprament. He thrived on confrontations,
Haye those Verbal bomb shells (aditee you shock me sometimes by writing these dialogues they are so manly and witty I have a hard time believing you wrote those) Honestly we all thrive on those confrontations, (if you know what I mean😉
full forceful and frank was his operational style.
What a style yaar 😉
He was an expressive man alright, he could not hide his emotions............. but there were pieces of his personality that came out in full force only with Bani. She tended to bring out the worst and best too (twitching lips into a smile at the kiss last nite). Many times his wife didnt make it easy for him to have a civilized conversation with her.
I love that physical expressiveness, I cracked up on the civilized conversations part you made bani sound like an animal 😆 but I loved it
Bani he thought on the other hand, was mostly in her calm collected emotional shell, letting it out in full force ONLY for him. Her deepest emotions of anger, passion or hate always was for his viewing pleasure only, it was a private screening:-) A smug smile took over hsi face, when he realized that she was being a complete honest Bani only with him, and with no one else. Her cool serenity always slipped when he was around!
Walked back to his desk and decides to check with Ms Singh abt Bani's passport................
Checks, its done, will be delivered today.
Picks up the phone dials Bani's number.
JW:Bani its me (authoritatively)
B: Aap hello nahi keh sakte kabhi? (annoyed he jolted her from her work reverie)
JW (smiles) Hello Mrs Walia how are you?
B: I refuse to answer.
JW: Bani stop arguing for everything (exasperated)
B: (short) Kya kaam tha, main busy hoon Mr W.
JW: Me too Mrs Walia, mujhe Darjeeling ke slides chahiye.
B: Mera ek naam hai, dont call me THAT.
JW What do u prefer (taunting demanding)
B:I will e-mail those, jab aap phone rakh doge to
JW: That wud be too easy
B: Mr W I am busy mujhe saara kaam finsih karke concert mein jaana hai
JW Tickets mil gaye? Do u need help? (mock? sincereity)
B: NO THANKS! Diya's husband works for the bank that is sponsoring it, woh la rahe hain
JW Main try karoon?
B: Aap kisko jaante hain, aap to music fan bhi nahi hai (taunting)
JW Ouch!
B: Plz main e-mail kar doon slides phir (sweet, pleading, flirting)
JW I like the please but not with THIS sentence (husky)
B: Mr W pl...... Main phone rakh rahi hoon
JW: Be here at 5. The third party guy has some questions.
B: Sorry main nahi aa sakti, I will send some one with teh answers
JW 5 at my office
JW:Oh bTW, Mrs Walia........... thanks for not wearing one of ur 99 clips today!
Click!
Bani picks up the scissors on her desk and goes for her hair......... and throws it down in disgust...... How did he see her when she left for work , she thot he had left earlier?
This scene was so good yaar, I love it when he calls her Mrs. Walia I wish I could answer him kaho mere Mr. Sexy Walia, well bani likes it too, gosh I have been wondering about that name a lot lately JAI WALIA it sounds so powerful and hot, I need to find a Walia yaar just for his name and shaadi ke baad I will only refer to him as MR. WALIA, bechare clips yaar tumhari FF pad ke I have stopped wearing my clips only and only because JW does not like them, (what have you done to me aditee
Its 5.30, a sulky Bani walks into JW's office and slams the door shut behind her, dressed in a turqoise , black and silver flowy gypsy skirt, tied at the waist and a black sleeveless blouse with a generous neckline front and back....... hair tied back with a borrowed clip, left hand encased in turqoise and black bangles........ silver hoops in her ears.............
She had obviously changed for the concert...............
He si on hsi phone, seees her enter, and draws a breath
JW" Can I call u back?"
JW's eyes doesnt leave her one minute, his eyes run over her in smoldering male appraisal , his gaze meant to disturb and arouse B."He does not have xray vision" B thot "He cudnt possibly knwo what I am feeling I shud have changed AFTER my meeting with him"
I had a hard time picturing Bani in a skirt and a blouse like that, in the end I gave up and thought of a really hot girl and JW smirking oh heck I even tried picturing my self 😆 😉
His knowing smile indicated he knew what she was thinking.
She stood there the door behind her, watching his slow progress toward her............ why does he always make me feel like a prey she wondered..........
If only Bani knew how lucky she was, I would do anything to be hunted by JW😆
JW bends down relaeses the laptop bag from her dead fingers and places it on the couch by the side................ still eyes not laeving her
JW: You are late! (accusing)
JW: Hmmmmmmm but ............My very own gypsy wife! Just what the mail order company promised (husky)
B: Darjeeling ka meeting kahan hai
JW Right here! (same tone!)
Reaches behind her and pulls of her clip and throws it away
JW: Tum mujhe itna tease kyon karti ho Baneee?
B: I dont do anything to u (shuts her eyes)
She can feel his breath on her face........ "Why cant he not wear that goddamn cologne one day for a change she wonders
JW:Tumne woh clip is liye pehna kyon ki maine tumhe kaha ki mat pehno (challenges)
B: NOOO! Maine is liye pehna kyon ki is skirt ke saath match kar raha hai (defiant)
JW Oh! the skirt! Mujhe inventory lena hai apne mail order wife ka.
B: GO AWAY! (Shoves him in the process exposong her mid riff from the short top)
JW chooses the exact moment to place his left hand on her waist
B feels like some one poured hot boiling water all over her.............
JW sucks hsi breath again hoarsely at her response.........
B:(pushes the errant hand away) Bataye kya kaam hai, abhi Diya se koi phone nahi aaya, I can do what ever u want (nastily)
JW (innocently) u can?
This started the best part of the FF which ah-hem ah-hem I have read several times now, I love the way he teases her about her outfit even takes advantage of her showing skin and touches her, I am glad he didn't get mad at her for wearing such an exposing outfit now all we need is some rain and a dripping wet Bani 😆
B: Shut up kahan hai Mr Shah?(very JW like)
JW: Tickets nahi mile?
B (almost in tears) nahi
JW: I have a couple, tumhe chahiye
B is all excited for one second and then realizes that her hubby always has a cach for everything
B, Nahi koi baat nahi, abhi Diya ka phone aata hoga.........
As if on cue, her cell phone rings.............
Diya is a bigger fan, Bani thinks there can be no one like herself but.............
D: Bani Dev is trying pata nahi, tkts ka scene mushkil lag raha hai
B's hrt breaks..... tries not to show
D Bani are u there?
B hiding tears haan bolo
D: I dont knwo Bani the show is just two hrs away and it doenst look good.........
B OK I hope he keeps trying (bends down to flick a tear away)
D devastated (I wanted to GO Bani tum itna lightly le rahi ho?
B:I am sorry, I will call u back
JW: kaun tha
B (sulking) Diya
JW Lets finish our meeting and u can go, great she got the tkts (mocking)
B: she didnt (starts to cry and angrily stops herself)
JW Oh she didnt?
B: NOOOOOOOO!
JW Oh u can have mine
B Mujhe aapse koi favor nahi chahiye Mr W
JW Favor nahi Bani I want u to have it (quasi-sincere:-)
B Sach mein? (her face lights up)
He has walked back to the couch, and is sitting down, she sees two shiny glossy tkt folder like thing with all the sponsor names on it. Walks there herself.........
MUST BE THE TICKETS! She is over joyed
bechari I really felt bad for her after reading this part I knew he would never leave her off the hook like that, but could never think of your kind of sweet punishment 😈
B: Oh Thanks Mr walia, I am soooooo happy (she squeals)
JW slowly picks up the tickets and places it in his shirt pocket
JW: Not so fast Bani.............
B 's face pales
B: Kya matlab
JW U get the tkts, u look at the " your cute guy" (does an affected quote unquote in the air) aur main?
B(sincerely) aap bhi chaliye
JW: No ! I dont care for the guy or the group
B: To phir? (scared)
JW: Main soch raha tha, tum mera ek kaam kar do aur tkts le lo
B Haan kya kaam? (she poor thing si thrilled, like a kid all enthu)
JW: I want YOU to kiss me! for a change...... (softly)
B feels like some one slapped her
B (Screams shouts yells altogether) You are a sick man! Mujhe nahi dekhna concert, u are sick....... maine aapke paise liye to aapne mujhe apne ghar pe forcefully rakha hai, abhi mujhe concert dekhna hai to aap mujhse kuch aur...................... I am sorry I know u, I am sorry I married u
JW(amused and aroused by hera nger walks toward her) socho Diya ko kitna bura lagega?
B: She will be FINE! She is married to a great guy, phir kabhi jaayenge
JW (flatly) theek hai fine, ghar jao!
B:(unreasonably angry) Thats why u called me yahan Mr shah hai hi nahi, aapke jaisa horrible man maine zindagi mein nahi dekha
She does not want to go feels for Diya, is torn
She just stands there between his desk and the sofa
JW lets her fight her inner fairies./demons and walks away to hsi desk
B: Just one!
JW Sorry?
B: Just one kiss THATS ALL!
JW Sure I ll take what I can get
Gets up she thinks a lil unsteadily at first and surely walks up to her
B: Aap mujhe kahin aur touch nahi karenge
JW Aur kuch?
B:Main kiss karoongi aap nahi (blushing)
JW(huskily) aur kuch?
B shakes her bent head
JW waits nad waits and waits............
Bani slowly walks up to him and pecks on his cheek.
B steps back "Mere tickets"
JW "Sorry foul!" (husky, hands in pocket, knuckles protruding tightly thru the fabric........ exercising exemplary control
B goes near again and pecks him in the corner of his mouth.
B Mr W plz mere tickets
JW "Foul Mrs Walia (husky) 'that was a polite good bye kiss"
B (husky) FINE!! FINE!!
ahhh, she had to give in, mein bas aane hi waali thi 😡 and my dear Mr. walia you had to ask your wife for a lil pappi are mein hoti na toh binna kuch kahe aapko saari raat pappi, aur jhapphi deti, Gentlewomen's promise😆 😉
B shuts her eyes "Aap apni aankhen band keejiye' Her tautly strung nerves quivered........
He is soooooo good abt follwoing isntructions. She plunges her hands into hsi shimmering hair locking her fingers at teh back of his skull lest she fainted and opens her mouth on his, making an inarticulate sound in her throat which she wud later think of as a protest............ she coaxes and cajoles with her lips, nope...... no luck.......finally......he decides to end her torment and opens his mouth...............and
the rest I leave to all ur vivid imagination 😳 😳 😳
oh boy! you do not wanna know ke maine apni imgination kaisi use ki is part pe, ofcorse the scenario changed every time i read it😆
He cheats, opens his eyes , glittering with fierce triumph,......................... looking down at his wife.......... responds to her unspoken pleas for help................ finding her clinging to him......... as the seconds tick
Shuts his body and mind off with a violent curse and moves his lips away to her soft cheek,. bruising it in the process...........
B hides her face on fire in the V of his shirt...........
JW: (softly) Darshan tumhara wait kar raha hoga neeche, u shud go enjoy the show.
B refuses to move and let go.......
JW(coaxingly) Bani Diya has the tickets she shud be waiting for you to have coffee with ur "cute guy" before the show begins, miss karna chahti ho kya?
B feels like some one just poured a tank full of icy water on her
Pushes him violently shoots mortars "Kya matlab"
JW: Matlab Diya ko tkts pahunchakar maine Convention center tak ride de diya company driver ne, tumhe darshan chhod dega
B:Diya ke paas already the tkts?
honestly even I was shocked like bani when I read diya has the tickets kya baat Diya ko bhi phasa liya, isse kehte hain ek teer do nishane bani ko tickets bhi mil gaye aur JW ko unka chumma bhi, haye mera makhan malayi😳
JW I am afraid yes(mischievously)
She decides to kill him that nite BUT it will have to wait until after her concert 😡 😡 😡
Walks out haughtily
JW calls out "bani apna lipstick zaroor touch up kar lena!Its all over me...." enjoy the show Mrs Walia
DOOR SLAMS!!
awsome yaar awsome I love the way she slams the doors, that is all my dear can do, but after that hot kiss I would never leave, who cares for the concert when you can host your own performance 😉
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