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Posted: 19 years ago
ohh wow it is a great fanfic praina ji
it is very well written 👏
please continue soon praina ji 😃
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Posted: 19 years ago
thx...4 letting us know...cant wait to read next part...
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Posted: 19 years ago
Wow!!! those were excellent parts!!! pls continue soon!!!
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Posted: 19 years ago
AWESOME

PLZZZZZZZZ CONT SOOOOOOOON 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
RECAP: Boys vs. Girls in Volleyball game and the girls end up winning. Gor;s seem dancing to the song "Hum ladkhiyan Nahi". Bani is holding on to Jai for her dear life saying she doesn't know how to swim. We see Sahil and Rano dancing to the song "Agar Main Kahon". We then see Sahil and Rano spot a drowning Bani and Rano says "Sahil!Didi!"

Back on the shore where Sahil and Rano are standing

Rano: Sahil! Kuch karo! (Rona has a worried look on her face with a mix of fear too)

Sahil: (getting ready to go out and save Bani) Mausi! Dadi! Idhar aao!

(We see Mausi and Dadi come running)

Both Mausi and Dadi: Kya hua! (Looking at Sahil)
Sahil: (looking apprehensive) Bani Mami! Dekho! (Points towards where Bnai is seen bobbing up and down while he is running towards the water)

Dadi: Haye Rabba Bill ki kariye hon?
Mausi: (Looks realy scared)

(Everyone is shouting to Jia to turn around and help Bani, but he is too far to hear them and too occupied teaching our dear Pia to swim. We then see Sameer wading around in the water and noticing Sahil and then Bani's arm and realizing what is happening. Sameer swims up to Sahil and says...)

Sameer: Sahil! Tum jaakey Jai aur Sabh ko kaho ke voh ambulance ko bulayein main Bani ko lekey aatha hoon (he says this while swimming faster than Sahil towards where Bani was seen. We also see Sahil tell Jai what is going on and Jai runs towards shore.)

Back to where Sameer is helping with Bani we see Sameer say...

Sameer: (notices Bani isn't there anymore) Bani! Bani (turning around to see her anywhere, but he doesn't so he dives underwater, but still cannot find Bani. He dives down again and finds an unconcious Bani and wraps his arm around her waist and pulls her to the surface).

Sameer: (tapping Bani's blue faced cheeks) Bani! Bani! (He then swims as fast as he can holding on to Bani real tight towards the shore. When he gets to the shore he finds the whole family waiting and the emergency crew too.He lays Bani on the strecher and...)

Emergency Crew Person: Chalo! Hospital jaana parega! Inki lungs main Bahut pahni chala gaya hai! Chalo!

We see Jai Run up to the Emergency Technician and say

Jai: Kya meri biwi teek hai?!

Emergency Tech: Abhi sawalon ka wakth nahi hai Mr. Walia! Aapko joh bhi poochna hai Hospital main pooch lena! (while running towards the ambulance)

Jai is seen standing and watching the amublance drive away w/everyone around him talking and he just keep staring at where the ambulance used to be.

At the hospital... everyone is sitting,quite and worried except Jigyasa and Ranveer.

Jiggy to Ranveer: Sabh jaisey matham mananey baith gayee hain (whispering)! Yeh Bani madam toh koi zada hee mahan ban gayi hain humari poori family ke liye!

Ranveer: Ma, yeh ladkhi toh kuch zada hi gul mil gayi hai! Kuch toh karna parega (whispering)!

Jigyasa: Tum fikar maath karo Ranveer beta, agar humari kismat acchi hui, toh humara kaam voh upar vala hi kardeyga.

(both Ranveer and Jigyasa are smiling)


We then see a worried Jai sitting in between Sameer and a crying Rano.

Jai: (saying in his head) Bhagwan Bani ko teek kardena, please!

(Jai then sees a sobbing Rano and he pust his arm around her and says...)

Jai: Rano (she looks up at him w/ tears running down her cheeks) I promise, kuch nahi hoga tumari Bani didi ko. (wipes away her tears on her cheeks). Now, ronah bandh and be a strong girl! (smiles at Rna and she smiles back at him teary eyed). Thats a girl!

A hour and a half later we see a doctor come up to the family and he says...

doctor: Mr. Walia (Jai stands up) Aapki biwi ab saans le rahi hain, lekin unki lungs main paani bahut chala gaya hai. Agar aglay aadhey ghantey main hum yeh paani nikal paye, toh aapki biwi safe hai.

Jai: Agar nahi.

Doctor: Phir main aapko koi gurantee nahi dey saktha.

(Everyone looks so suprised and scared. While Jai's eyes well up wiht fear and anger for his wife).

To be cont'd
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Posted: 19 years ago
👏 👏 👏
aww hope bani gets well 😳
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Posted: 19 years ago
i hope she gets better soooon....
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Posted: 19 years ago
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I hope nothing will happen bani
plz continue soon
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Posted: 19 years ago
hey ur ff's great carry on ur doing a GOOD JOB
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: Nishas24

HMP, I feel like It wAS my idea.....turned better

Hey everyone I'd just like to say thank you for all of your support of my fanfic, as for stealing someones ideas I apologize if it seems like that to anyone, but please be at least considerate and polite and PM me instead of posting it in my fanfic. It upset b/c I think this comment is making me sound like I'm stealing from you, I haven't stolen anything from anyone and as for turning your idea better I don't know, I just have been writing this fanfic. I haven't read anyones except SaReGaMaPa fans b/c she is awsome. So next time before you post in my fanfic, plz be considerate of the time I put writing into them and if you have a problem PM me. As for everyone whose given me their support and patience you guys are awsome. I am always late and inconsistent, but I go to college too. I was also debating on whether to go on with my fanfic or no, but I am. I love you all!

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