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Posted: 18 years ago
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Haath chute hai ...
Aaj apnon se..

Bhikarne laga hai
Gharonda apna..

Khwaab toot ke
Behne lage hai..
Aason mein apne..

Jahan kabhi payaa tha..
Khud ko...
Wahin khoya hai
Aaj wajood apna...

-Sareeta

- Jus some random lines for Shiv and Gauri on their divorce and their state of mind.

The lines jus flowed into my mind...impromptu while at work , and thought the lines were apt for Gauri and Shiv...

Pardon any incorrect usage of hindi words and kindly let me know... so that I may correct them..😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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omg thts a very thoughtful poem.... DAM!! u can write some interesting stuff... i wish i could do tht.. i can hardly finish up my one page essay....hahaahah.. u Rock... keep it up... it really suits the current situation of shiv-gauri....soooooo sweet of u to come up with this fabulous poem... πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘
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Posted: 18 years ago
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This one is for you Neetz!!! Hope you like it!! Ahem... Remember your request??!!! πŸ˜‰
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Posted: 18 years ago
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today itself i was thinking its been a long time not read any thought of yours.. 😊

it seems my wish came true and the lines you have penned down are just perfect for sg...


'Bhikarne laga hai
Gharonda apna"..

yeah truely said gauri asking for divorce and shiv destroying everything in their room which was their world made with love...

"Jahan kabhi payaa tha..
Khud ko...
Wahin khoya hai
Aaj wajood apna"..

that reminds me shiv saying "gauri nahin hein tho shiv bhi nahin"...shivgauri one soul and now gauri going from his life he feels lost and incomplete...

sareeta well -written and it feels nice to read such a baeutiful thought which suits the actual situation of sg ..

it touches the heart and these for you... πŸ‘ πŸ‘

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: 3 angels

today itself i was thinking its been a long time not read any thought of yours.. 😊

it seems my wish came true and the lines you have penned down are just perfect for sg...


'Bhikarne laga hai
Gharonda apna"..

yeah truely said gauri asking for divorce and shiv destroying everything in their room which was their world made with love...

"Jahan kabhi payaa tha..
Khud ko...
Wahin khoya hai
Aaj wajood apna"..

that reminds me shiv saying "gauri nahin hein tho shiv bhi nahin"...shivgauri one soul and now gauri going from his life he feels lost and incomplete...

sareeta well -written and it feels nice to read such a baeutiful thought which suits the actual situation of sg ..

it touches the heart and these for you... πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Thank you sooooo very much khyaatee! Its really very humbling to know that ones post were awaited and people looked forward to it and you say it was your wish! BLess my soul, I am really humbled!

Let you on a secret here now... I didnt pen these lines for SG. I jus wrote them down impromptu as the lines flowed into my head, while working on a program at work and I jus penned them on a scrap of paper...

Itwas on my way home, while reading the lines again I realized , they would possibly be apt for SG situatuon and decided to post them here!😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: khushi4eva

omg thts a very thoughtful poem.... DAM!! u can write some interesting stuff... i wish i could do tht.. i can hardly finish up my one page essay....hahaahah.. u Rock... keep it up... it really suits the current situation of shiv-gauri....soooooo sweet of u to come up with this fabulous poem... πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Awww, bless my soul, thank you soooooooo much for the kind words!!! Well its been almost 2 months since I wrote something on this form and for SG... I did write a couple earlier , but with the sad tale , hardly bothered and couldnt identify with the story or characters...

But these lines were impromptu and were originally never intended for SG. I jus penned them as they came to mind and later realized they might suit SG and well posted them here!

THank you so much for enjoying the post! 😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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di after reading wour wonderful poems, i am always left speechless, and the same has happened this time...

this is all i can type... πŸ‘

really nice di...you write tooooooo well

luv metoubearscrazy 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: metoubearscrazy

di after reading wour wonderful poems, i am always left speechless, and the same has happened this time...

this is all i can type... πŸ‘

really nice di...you write tooooooo well

luv metoubearscrazy 😊

Awww, bless my soul, metou, that is very kind of you to say so! ANd you all leave me speechless with all the kind words that you shower me with when I pen anything at all... now taht is being really kind , arent you all!! thank you soooooooo much!!!

THank you and glad you enjoyed it so much!! 😊

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: sareeta

Haath chute hai ...
Aaj apnon se..

Bhikarne laga hai
Gharonda apna..

Khwaab toot ke
Behne lage hai..
Aason mein apne..

Jahan kabhi payaa tha..
Khud ko...
Wahin khoya hai
Aaj wajood apna...

-Sareeta

- Jus some random lines for Shiv and Gauri on their divorce and their state of mind.

The lines jus flowed into my mind...impromptu while at work , and thought the lines were apt for Gauri and Shiv...

Pardon any incorrect usage of hindi words and kindly let me know... so that I may correct them..😊

Pardon me, but I cannot seem to come up with words to express my appreciation of your wonderful works!

My dearest Di, thank you for finally obliging us with your magic...

Very beautifully captured, and apt in regards to the current track of KAA. I especially liked the last stanza about losing one's "wajood"... Very poignant.πŸ‘πŸ‘

Flawless as always... Please do write more often... I am a dear fan!

Cheers,

dc

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: sareeta

Haath chute hai ...
Aaj apnon se..

Bhikarne laga hai
Gharonda apna..

Khwaab toot ke
Behne lage hai..
Aason mein apne..

Jahan kabhi payaa tha..
Khud ko...
Wahin khoya hai
Aaj wajood apna...

-Sareeta

- Jus some random lines for Shiv and Gauri on their divorce and their state of mind.

The lines jus flowed into my mind...impromptu while at work , and thought the lines were apt for Gauri and Shiv...

Pardon any incorrect usage of hindi words and kindly let me know... so that I may correct them..😊

Sorry didn't reply earlier..but that was fantastic! πŸ‘πŸ˜ƒ

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