RAVIKA OS (CONFESSION) new update pg 8(consumation) - Page 4

One more thing
If u have some other written poems on some other unrelated topics from this or some other written work then plz do share here or just pm me. I really want to read ur writings more n more. I hv become such a big fan of ur work.
Plz do continue os soon...

Originally posted by: lalli36

Its MARVELLOUS
Bang On.. 👏
First of all I just want to applaude for ur imagination and then for ur depiction and description. Like really the way u describe each and every situation their expressions n everything, its simply superb.
Vry well done gal. Plz do keep writing more.
One thing I hv noticed dat Ravika parts are specially in detail describing each n every move wid expresions n all while other parts are cut short like ravi meeting his dad devika's interaction wid her family members ect. This really is a smart move. Motto is clear thats only to focus on RaVika thats what we as a reader want. Claps for this.
The actual beauty of d whole os was the so passionate yet simple POETRY. Like u summerised kalash story so far in such small words that to wid bang on rhymes.(m actually a rhyming poem lover) so keep up for dat.
Riya u actually made me ur fan.. 👏
I must confess I joined this forum as a member just to rply on this particular post and to applaude u for so awesome work u r doing.
Plzzz do continue soon. This os is much better than present episodes which are just unnecesaary dragged ones.
😭
One more request, I no m being much demanding, if just u could include more poems that wil b like icing on d cake.
Waiting impatiently for update... 😛

Thnk u so much dear.. this is biggest compliment for me.. really blessed to hear dis.. haapy to kno u r liking n njoying my writting.. promise to continue d same..yeah i too love to write rhyming poems..
I always focus much on writing ravika parts.. coz we all r ravika fans so just strive to give u ppl more abt them..thats it
Thnx for ur feedback..

Originally posted by: lalli36

One more thing
If u have some other written poems on some other unrelated topics from this or some other written work then plz do share here or just pm me. I really want to read ur writings more n more. I hv become such a big fan of ur work.
Plz do continue os soon...

Thnk u dear.. u made my day..really happy wid ur comment.. yeah i hv a huge collection of personal written poems..writting gives me pleasure nd happiness so i go on and on..i dnt think sharing here will b good.. i'l pm u some of my best poems..

This page is worth reading. in some parts there was no physical intimacy still there was romance. as they say LOVE IS IN D AIR. U created dat magic this thing is easy to feel while watching actors playing their character but really tough to create while reading since then readers need to visualise it. reading this i could actually visualise every bits of it. so for dat u deserve a well done pat on ur back...


Do keep sharing more. this is really vry intresting...


PS- plz upload next part soon
We all are waiting eagerly

Originally posted by: 09raju

This page is worth reading. in some parts there was no physical intimacy still there was romance. as they say LOVE IS IN D AIR. U created dat magic this thing is easy to feel while watching actors playing their character but really tough to create while reading since then readers need to visualise it. reading this i could actually visualise every bits of it. so for dat u deserve a well done pat on ur back...


Do keep sharing more. this is really vry intresting...


PS- plz upload next part soon
We all are waiting eagerly

Thnk u dear..keep reading and njoying.. wil upload further parts vry soon..

Hey everyone.. first of all apologies for being late in uploading esp to those who were waiting eagerly..so lets continue..

Next morning..

Ravi is awake vry early in morning and Is all set to bring devika back..he is vry excited clening room wearing devika's fav shirt smiling non stop and missing her immensly..
In lounge ravi is having breakfast..sakshi watches ravi who is eating vry fast and is surprised at d same..
Sakshi: jiju aap itni jaldi kaise tayar hogae or itni jaldi me nashta q krre ho? Kahi jana h kya?
R: haa vo devika ko lene jana h
S: ooo..to ye baat h.. di se dur ni rha jara aapse..par ghar pe to abi koi utha b ni hoga..
R: par devika to uth gai hogi..
Sakshi is surprised and happy at d same time..she grabs d chace and teases ravi a lot..
R: ab tu jaa mujhe late mat kar..devika mera wait krri hogi.. (smiles remembering her)

There devika is ready vry early sitting in lounge n impatiently staring towards door..chachi comes and asks her for tea..she says she had it one hr ago..chachi is amused and enquires as to frm how long she is siting here n y staring door..she replies dat ravi is about to come to pick her up..chachi xplains her dat its too early it wil take some time for him to come..chachi understands her feeling n teases her..

There sakshi has stopped ravi frm going early he is continously begging her to let him go..sakshi nods in no..but he runs..he reaches his bike and start to kick it when he realises he is in his slippers and forgot to wear shoes..sakshi laughes and again teases him..ravi wear shoes and thinks: dkha devika tumhari 2din ki judai ne mera kya haal kar dia h..tumhare siva mujhe kisi b chiz ka hosh ni h

Devika is moving here n there n is being really mad n impatient..chachi is trying to talk but she is lost in his thoughts and concentrating on door..chachi is actually vry happy seeing devika like this..
Finally ravi comes..devika enlightens and runs towards door (she wanted to hug him) but stops realising all r there..ravi greets everyone..he then expresses his desire to take devika back and ask for their permission..
Chachi: ravi agar devika aaj or ruk jae to..vaise b tum to office chale jaoge or devika akeli hojaegi ghar pe..to abi k lie usko yehi rhne do..sham ko office se jate jate le jana..agar tumhe thk lage to..
Devika is shocked and sad..ravi is disheartened too and all his dreams were shattered in a single moment..
Devika tries to speak dat she wants to go now but ravi interupts saying: chachi devika aapki beti h mujhse jda haq uspe aapka h..jaisa aap chahegi vaisa hi hoga
Devika is appaled hearing dis..and ravi gives fake smile to everyone but deep down he was sad..
Chachi invites him to hav breakfast but he xcuses himself saying he'l b late for office and starts to leave..devika is broken she wanted to talk to him but...she is luking towards him n then towards chachi and has mixed emotions.. suddenly chachi says devika ravi ko bhr tak chod aao.. devika smiles and instantly runs behind him..
Devika comes out of main door and stops running suddenly..she moves back slowly while facing front(ulte paav piche chlti h) and then stops..ravi was standing there and cutely smiling..she has stopped at ghe level ravi was standing(now both are satnding at equal level) then they start walking slowly wid each other matching their steps like walking together..devika is luking downwards while ravi is staring her..ravi moves his finger playfully on devika's bangels..devika is smiling..then ravi holds her hand..devika reciprocates and tightely holds his hand back..ravi is happy..she then luks here and there and covers their entangeled hands wid her saree pallu..ravi understands and is overwhelmingly smiling..

In lobby..
D: tumne mujhe kch bolne q ni dia..chachi ki baat q maani?
R (teasingly): taki ek din or tumhare bina sukoon se kaat saku..akele..
D(irritated): akele q..jao na apni miss luthra k pass vo tumhe company de dengi..akele kaha ho tum..
Ravi smiles pulls her close holding her hand and says: tumhe pata h mujhe ye nayi possesive wali miss kach kach jda pasand aari h..tumhari iss aada pe bht pyaar ata h devika..
She shys away and tries to freed herself from his jold but couldnt..
D: ravi chodo na koi dekhega to kya sochega..
R: jisko jo sochna h vo soche..
D: accha ab tumhe office k lie late ni hora..
R: phle to khud hi apne pass bulati ho fir dur jaane b khud hi bolti ho..chalo thk h jata hu..sham ko ready rhna jaldi aaunga..n tumhare lie ek surprise b h..
He was about to leave when devika stops him..she says: tumhare gaal pe kch laga h. 1 sec saaf karne do..
She leans forwards and quickly kisses him in cheeks and runs..
He is surprised and blushes..he leaves happily..

To be continued vry soon..

Great continuation! 👏
Waiting for the next part with much anticipation ⭐️

I am eagerly waiting for your next Update Riya

Originally posted by: SamreenJ

Great start Riya 👏 👏

Itni beqarai hai donon ko milne ki
Love that

Wahan sakshi yahan chachi tease ker rahi hain

😆 😆 😆

Devika's kiss is just romantic n pure.
Very well written

Please update soon
Want to know surprise kiya hai ?

Thanks dear!!

Thnk u dear..