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Alright..time to comment...
aha, first of all, I have only read first 6 chapters so far! Read all of them in one go. ( I am gonna read rest of the chapters too,..but I was just too exited to comment..so yeah, impatient me)..Your story is beautiful. I love how you focus on all the characters and how your story sounds very realistic. That realistic part is what actually drives people into the story( I believe). I like how you have portrayed Manik' s character specifically. The way yu have shown his actual feelings+ his nature..and of course, love Cabir's dialogs..!...I am so in love with your story..Also, I wanna congratulate for the fact that u have been able to introduce almost all of the characters from KYY, and you have done justice to all of them. As a writer, I know how hard it is to fit everyone in and show their uniqueness while portraying such intense love story of Manan. In my own writings, I have to plan so much to make sure that other characters add to the plot and are not there just for the sake of it. But trust me, even after doing all that, I do end up missing some characters.So, definitely kudos for your hard work. This is definitely something that I need to learn from you as a writer.And, now..lets talk about Manan...I love how you have portrayed their bond..from introduction in the mall to college, everything is just in right place..Since I have only read first 6 chapters, I will comment more on Manan once I have read the rest :) .Now, Dhruni I like how you have portrayed their friendship. AlsO, its pretty smart how you have kept Dhruv's feelings ( if there are any) a secret for now( THIS IS ALL BASED ON FIRST 6 CHAPTERS..IF YOU TALKED ABOUT THEM IN OTHER CHAPTERS, JUST IGNORE THIS) ..I think he will come as a surprise soon, that will add a lot to your story. One more thing to learn from you :)Now, some suggestions. I , myself, am not that great of a writer. But, as a friend( please consider me one), I really wanna tell you what I feel can make your story even better, you can ignore this stuff if it doesnt sounds ok to u, I am just very impatient, so i gotta say it..I think you should talk more about Nandini's POV and emotions, because I feel that Nandini is a character who has lots and lots to offer as a emotional person, so knwoing her exact feelings will help readers to engage more in the story. That is really the only suggestion, ( you can ignore it :) if you have already talked about her feelings a lot in rest of the chapters, again I am basing it all on first 6).So yeah,,,love your story...Thanks a lot for taking so much time out of ur schedule, to update it regularly...Best wishes for ur future+ life... God bless u...Much love <3(And I will read the rest of the chapters soon...and will defintiely comment :) )
Thanks alot dear off course I consider u as my friend n thanks lot for UR suggestions... It really means alot n ya thr is alot more which is u folded pls read the rest chapters n do comment UR views n il take UR suggestion to consideration n vl pakka work on Nandu PoV... N it really means alot n ya I read UR ff too n I do comment thr... So pls keep UR blessings on me this way n do shower with UR positive n negative comments it means alot to me... Thanks for dis best comment dear...
Love you alot sweet friend
Pravallika aka PraNi
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