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basket_101

@basket_101

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

Hey guys!

It's Hinal!

I've posted one OS on Manik before, but other than that, I've been almost a silent member on this forum.

I wrote this the other day, when I was feeling particularly low. And just thought to share it here because I feel it goes with Cabir's character. He appears to be doing fine, but I feel like it is all just a facade. I want Fab 5 to really support him through this. Hoping for the best from the show. Anyway, about the drabble...

*Warning, it is a bit depressing. So read at your own risk 😆

Here it goes:

Maybe

Do you ever feel so alone, that even talking to someone makes you feel hollow? I do.

Everyday, every moment. It's as if I'm non-existent. As if everyone else in the world matters, but me. Feeling left out even with family and friends around you.

These feelings weren't new. Nor were they unusual. I lived my life with these feelings, these emotions; all bottled up in me.

It's just a matter of time before I reach the extent of my tolerance. Just a matter of time before I lose myself in the depths of misery.

These feelings are eating me alive. Starting from my heart, heading to every corner of my body. I feel tormented, eternally frustrated.

Nothing gave me true joy. It was all pretentious.

This world is pretentious.

Maybe I don't belong here. Maybe I should just give up. That would be easier than suffocating everyday with these throttled up emotions choking my every breath.

In the end, no one cares. No one really does. It's all on you.

Maybe I'm not ready to live in such a selfish world.

Maybe this is it.

Maybe this is my last moment now.

Maybe this will be my last goodbye.

Maybe, just maybe.

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The End

So how was it?

I hope it wasn't overly dramatic. Literally was at one of my lowest then, but writing it out is a good outlet.

Anyway, don't forget to let me know how you found it!

Comments/criticism always accepted! 😳

Lots of love,

Hinal 🤗

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Kshithi

@Muggle_Diaries

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

Choti,

This touched my heart...

Just fell in love with your writing all over again.

For such a short drabble, it spoke so much of Cabir.

His loneliness, his anger, his pain, all wrapped up inside his soul, inside a mask.

This mask does not let him open up to others. This mask lets him show the fun side, the happy side of him, hiding away his inner turmoil.

I just loved this line...

In the end, no one cares. No one really does. It's all on you.

This is just brilliant... I loved it..

Actually I am unable to express how much I liked your story...

Lots of love...🤗

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Medha.S

@Medha.S

Rocker

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Posted: 10 years ago

I love this piece. I loved the way you write, this is very elegant and refined.

But can I be truthful? Just a personal opinion -If I had not known that this was dedicated to Cabir, I would have thought this was about Mukti.

Cabir is my baby, I loved him even when he was not that lovable. I see him struggling and in so much pain, I could it was all a mask even before he showed that yes, I do wear a mask of coolness and funny even when I am competently shattered on the inside.

But Cabir is that one guy among all of them, who has infinite hope and the beautiful skill of compartmentalizing.

I just couldn't connect with this with respect to the character even though this piece is beauty.

I just felt like giving my honest opinion.

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basket_101

@basket_101

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

Hey Di :D

Originally posted by: Muggle_Diaries
Choti,
This touched my heart...
Just fell in love with your writing all over again.
Awwwh, thank you soo much :$ You always find a way to make me blush with your compliments 😳

For such a short drabble, it spoke so much of Cabir.

His loneliness, his anger, his pain, all wrapped up inside his soul, inside a mask.

This mask does not let him open up to others. This mask lets him show the fun side, the happy side of him, hiding away his inner turmoil.

I just loved this line...

In the end, no one cares. No one really does. It's all on you.

This is just brilliant... I loved it..
Actually I am unable to express how much I liked your story...
Awwwh, thank you so so so so so so much! Seriously!!
It's such a huge thing to hear such a comment from you!!
Glad you enjoyed it!!

Lots of love...🤗
MD

Loots of looove <3
🤗

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basket_101

@basket_101

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Medha.S
I love this piece. I loved the way you write, this is very elegant and refined.
But can I be truthful? Just a personal opinion -If I had not known that this was dedicated to Cabir, I would have thought this was about Mukti.
Cabir is my baby, I loved him even when he was not that lovable. I see him struggling and in so much pain, I could it was all a mask even before he showed that yes, I do wear a mask of coolness and funny even when I am competently shattered on the inside.
But Cabir is that one guy among all of them, who has infinite hope and the beautiful skill of compartmentalizing.

I just couldn't connect with this with respect to the character even though this piece is beauty.
I just felt like giving my honest opinion.

Hey Medha!!

Firstly, thank you for the compliment! I'm glad you liked the piece.

Now coming to the characterization.

I suppose I see your point, but my p.o.v for this drabble has to do mainly with the fact that Cabir's sexuality is accepted by his friends, yet none of them have approached him about it directly.

He went through a heart break with Raghav Sir, but no one is thinking about that.

Manik was depressed when Nandini said they can't be together, then it's safe to assume even Cabir must be feeling that way. But Manik has Cabir. Who can Cabir share his feelings with?

Plus the situation with his mother is also at stake.

Which is why I could only visualize his character for this drabble.

Although I'm glad you told me this!

It's always nice to hear honest opinion :)

Just a matter of differing opinions I guess.

Thank you for the comment though!
Appreciate it 😳

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arshiandsarun

@arshiandsarun

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

Hey Hinal 😊

This is beautiful ❤️ you have very well described Cabir's pain and his loneliness.
Keep writing :)

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maankigeet4ever

@maankigeet4ever

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

This was deep...so much said with such few words. Cabir is my favourite because there is so much more to him that shows on surface..he seems laid back and cool but he is so perspective about everything.

You captured the essence of his character beautifully..nicely done

-Reya <3

P.S. writing is a amazing outlet...definitely helps me get through any mood. hope your low eventually met a all-time high :)

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arathim

@arathim

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: basket_101
Hey guys!
It's Hinal!
I've posted one OS on Manik before, but other than that, I've been almost a silent member on this forum.
I wrote this the other day, when I was feeling particularly low. And just thought to share it here because I feel it goes with Cabir's character. He appears to be doing fine, but I feel like it is all just a facade. I want Fab 5 to really support him through this. Hoping for the best from the show. Anyway, about the drabble...
*Warning, it is a bit depressing. So read at your own risk 😆

Here it goes:

Maybe

Do you ever feel so alone, that even talking to someone makes you feel hollow? I do.

Everyday, every moment. It's as if I'm non-existent. As if everyone else in the world matters, but me. Feeling left out even with family and friends around you.

These feelings weren't new. Nor were they unusual. I lived my life with these feelings, these emotions; all bottled up in me.

It's just a matter of time before I reach the extent of my tolerance. Just a matter of time before I lose myself in the depths of misery.

These feelings are eating me alive. Starting from my heart, heading to every corner of my body. I feel tormented, eternally frustrated.

Nothing gave me true joy. It was all pretentious.

This world is pretentious.

Maybe I don't belong here. Maybe I should just give up. That would be easier than suffocating everyday with these throttled up emotions choking my every breath.

In the end, no one cares. No one really does. It's all on you.

Maybe I'm not ready to live in such a selfish world.

Maybe this is it.

Maybe this is my last moment now.

Maybe this will be my last goodbye.

Maybe, just maybe.

---
The End
So how was it?
I hope it wasn't overly dramatic. Literally was at one of my lowest then, but writing it out is a good outlet.
Anyway, don't forget to let me know how you found it!
Comments/criticism always accepted! 😳
Lots of love,
Hinal 🤗

That was very Good Hinal...!!! All the Best...!!! Keep Writing...!!!

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It's Sunayana :) Stella's my nickname

@Stella_8D

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

As usual, I don't know what to say. It's like I enter a totally different world when I read something as good as this and I know it sounds extremely cheesy. Whoever says that these days? :P I like cheesy stuff though.

But coming back to the point, I really love this and I know I've said this before but I'll keep saying it again and again that you're a lovely writer. I haven't read anything except your drabbles but I'm sure when you write something, it's going to be so good that it's going to get published.

I really don't know how you're so good at expressing emotions because it's definitely one of the hardest parts of writing something. To understand the character and write their feelings is so tough but you make it seem so easy. I love that there's a flow to everything you write.

Most of the times we forget that Cabir too is going through such a difficult phase of his life and it's amazing that you were able to express his emotions so well.

I honestly don't know what else to say! I loved it a lot <3

Love,

Stella