Cavya: Cabir + Navya or Harshya : Harshad + Navya : OS updated @pg 4 - Page 5

Originally posted by: -MyMy-

HARSHAD 😡

Cabir & Navya

I loved this update!

I love the way you wrote out the emotions, it was just great!

Ugh Harshad annoys me!

Cabir & Navya are totally meant to be!

I'm excited for the next update! Eeeps!

Originally posted by: gujjupari

I adore the way you have portrayed Navya's feelings about Cabir! So poignant, so pure😳

It was brilliant that part! Me loved it!

And even Cabir's part was so brilliantly penned down! The way he said that "Madhubala bolte bolte..." Sorry I don't remember the exact words as I read it in the morning and it's like 10:40pm here now!

Harshad was such an arrogant little prick! I hope he gets a good punch in his face Partner! His reasoning to marry Navya was so cheap and self-absorbed!

The precap seems so interesting! biting my nails already! Update soon!

And keep on writing😉... i want to see more stories on KY2 forum by you😃

Originally posted by: dewcute

res😛

unres😆

I am the first

my predictions got right😛,i predicted who is cabir and who is harshad in the 1 st update itself😛

i want a happy ending😳

after this amazing update,i am eager to read the next update...:-)

so,update soon😳

jiya😛

Originally posted by: dhruvika1991

next time lets see and its sucha low response in my story so cant think after it...

Originally posted by: gujjupari

Oh My Gawd gurl! Nooo! Don't stop writing because of this! Write because you want to re! And since this forum has just started out, it will take time to pick up pace😃

Originally posted by: dewcute

Originally posted by: BeyondWords

Reserved

Originally posted by: BeyondWords

Time to review! 😆 (Part One But 😆)

Where do I start from? The Dilemma which Navya is going through is really well developed.

But what made me laugh was Nandini Dhruv Marrying! I ship them but not as husband-wife, so I really fell off reading little Nandu and Little Dhruv! 🤣

Then comes Nandini madam's words of Gyaan! 😆 She has had that experience like Navya? Aha? On a serious note, I like how Nandu is trying to eplain Navya how eveything is under control! :)

Moving on Cabir and Mukti, well portrayed friendship, though it was obvious that the boy is Cabir, you still made it quite smooth and fluid, which I liked.

Now Harshad Alya. Well I really adore their bond. In fact I always wanted a big B for me!

So all in all I liked it much! Though I would like to give you some tiny suggestions which would enhance the work more...But before that I would like you to proof read your work each time you post, that is one thing which I hate to do, but that is the the most important bit in writing!

Keep Going...Keep Writing!

I am surprised that I managed to read a story! It has been quite sometime that I read! I usually am a One Shot Reader! :)

Regards

Iptisha!