Cavya: Cabir + Navya or Harshya : Harshad + Navya : OS updated @pg 4 - Page 3

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Posted: 10 years ago
#21
Hey! First I'm sorry for reading and commenting so late. I wanted to read it before but got caught up in work.
So my X-ray comments huh...:P
okay firstly thank you. Dhruv and Nandini married😃 and are going to have babies😆
And I also wonder what happened with Manik.

Your story is mysterious and i like mystery ok let me rephrase that i LOVE mystery. 😃

I really want to know who is who but i know i will have to wait for the story to unfold. Painful, but will be worth it😊

I don't mean to hurt you but i want to give little suggestion that don't hold the mystery for too long. u know it might get confusing between Guy1 guy2. But do what you please.

Do P.M me😊

ps- I updated my story too and i also want a x-ray comment😛.
No seriously, it's the longest chapter I have written so far.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#22
Thnx for commenting... Yeah it will get clear in next weeks update last one as it is one shot... I just want to write on this couple and idea clicked so try my luck...


Ummm i m not goanna hold the mysterytoo long as it is one shot but to wait as it is fruitful... Or say in cabir's way a tabhaahi has to be done in a proper way... Lolzzz



Thnks for liking as it is one shot i am not goanna explain what happen to maanik think he is like woo bin of boys over flower having no girl at this point...😃😃😃

Lets see what tabaahi is goanna happen in next update...


Yeah i will read yours and give a full to x-ray on it...






Originally posted by: anaddictof_KY2

Hey! First I'm sorry for reading and commenting so late. I wanted to read it before but got caught up in work.

So my X-ray comments huh...:P
okay firstly thank you. Dhruv and Nandini married😃 and are going to have babies😆
And I also wonder what happened with Manik.

Your story is mysterious and i like mystery ok let me rephrase that i LOVE mystery. 😃

I really want to know who is who but i know i will have to wait for the story to unfold. Painful, but will be worth it😊

I don't mean to hurt you but i want to give little suggestion that don't hold the mystery for too long. u know it might get confusing between Guy1 guy2. But do what you please.

Do P.M me😊

ps- I updated my story too and i also want a x-ray comment😛.
No seriously, it's the longest chapter I have written so far.

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Posted: 10 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: dhruvika1991


Sorry i cant be dude i want the detailed havent you read that part...😭😭😭


Sorry yaar, I was short on time, but I wanted to keep a comment. Here is a detailed comment for you 😆

What a story! 👏
The turmoil Navya went through was so believable, and I loved that you had her ask Nandu about what love feels like.
Love that Nandu and Dhruv are together, and are expecting Little Nandu or Little Dhruv 😳
Then I read the Cabir-Mukti part, and I was so sure that it was Cabir who she's getting married to.
THEN I read the Harshad part...and I was like...who? what? where? when?
I'm so confused. But I'm excited. I like the way you made us think it was one person, when it could actually be the other person.
This is for sure a romantic mystery.
For your first attempt this was really good, and I'm excited to read more. You should definitely post more stories :)

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thnx i think.my story is really full of lot of mystery


And happy got my big vaala comment thnx for commenting again...😆😆😆

I always think i should write when i know i can completw the work of this let's see what tabaaho cabir or harsha will make even navya too as she is also so uncertain about her feeling


Originally posted by: -MyMy-


Sorry yaar, I was short on time, but I wanted to keep a comment. Here is a detailed comment for you 😆

What a story! 👏
The turmoil Navya went through was so believable, and I loved that you had her ask Nandu about what love feels like.
Love that Nandu and Dhruv are together, and are expecting Little Nandu or Little Dhruv 😳
Then I read the Cabir-Mukti part, and I was so sure that it was Cabir who she's getting married to.
THEN I read the Harshad part...and I was like...who? what? where? when?
I'm so confused. But I'm excited. I like the way you made us think it was one person, when it could actually be the other person.
This is for sure a romantic mystery.
For your first attempt this was really good, and I'm excited to read more. You should definitely post more stories :)

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Part-2

[Scene Shift]

Nandini- Navya! Maine kuch pucha tumse? Do you love him or not?

Navya- Don't know. I always want him to be my soulmate but i don't know why i am not happy. I don't know yaar Nandu. It's been years but i haven't forgotten anything. I don't know.

Nandini- What have you not forgotten Navya?

Navya- Him Nandini, the one who made me realize who i am? Please help me

Nandini- There is one solution to it. Close your eyes and the person you see tell his name i will tell you what you are feeling.

{Navya closes her eyes. She saw a guy who was seeing her and laughing and making fun he was saying something and his face is blurred then suddenly his face and voice is getting clearer and she saw his face the moment she saw his face he says, "Madhubala" and smiles and laughs}

Navya (Dreamily)- Cabir

Nandini- Cabir.

{Navya got shocked and opens her eyes and look at Nandini with surprise}

Navya (Surprisingly)- Cabir! can't be possible. Nandu, It's not possible at all.

Nandini- Now, i get it why your eyes speak in a volume whenever we talk about Cabir.

Navya (Her eyes got filled)- Nandu! this can't be true naa...

Nandini (put her hand on her cheeks)- Navya! accept you love him.

Navya- But how i know when he is not their he helped me and always be my side. his humor side make me happy. he was always there for me in my sorrows. and beside it doesn't matter my feelings doesn't matter at all... He doesn't love me. he thinks me as a black and white Madhubala. i am not perfect for him. Besides he is always with the girls who are much better than me.

Nandini- Navya! Don't forget he is the one who made his black and white madhubala a colorful Kareena Kapoor so that he notices you beside you should tell him and admit to him he would have understand cabir is not a guy who realize his love by himself he has to be made to realize that he loves you Navya. You should tell him.

Navya- Nandu are you in your mind. there is nothing we can do now. IT's too late now. I have to accept.

Nandini- Why? You love cabir

Navya (crying) - Nandu! Can't you see i am getting married now. There is nothing we can do. Cabir will remain in my dreams

{With this Navya burst out in tears and Nandini just hold her}

[Scene Shift]

Mukti- Cabir! What pta nhi???

Cabir- Mukti! What should i say? nahi dekha jaata mujse Navya ko kisi aur ko hot huye. Gussa aata hai yhi sochke ki vo kisi aur ki hone jaa rhi hai... agr isse pyaar kehte hain then i love her. Agr vo uss insaan ko pyaar karti hai toh muje khushi hogi usse uske saath delhte huye. agr usse uss insaan ne zara bhi hurt kiya naa I swear main usse chodunga nhi... Agr isse pyaar krte hai then i love her...

Mukti- Why don't you tell her it's your life dumbo. atleast you should have spoken to her.

Cabir- What should i say? By calling her black and white madhubala i fall for her. When i helped her i started falling for her. But it's no use now she is getting married to someone. and besides she love him not me. Ab bahut der ho chuki hai Mukti. Bas ek kaam karna hai mujhe. Mujhe usse milna hai. Kuch clear krne ke liye.

{He left from there to meet someone to clear something}

[Scene Shift]

Alya- Bhai! I asked do you love her and what is this asking me what i think about this?

Harshad- Alya! you are kid. Don't you wanna grow up.

Alya- What do you mean by this?

Harshad- huh! Do you think Alya that your brother will fall for a girl like Navya. Even if she has stopped being bhenji she still the same old girl for me.

Alya- What? Areyou kidding bhai? This is not joke.

Harshad- Alya! Alya! You are not understanding.

Alya- Why are you doing this bhai?

Harshad- Why i am doing this? Hmmm... Because that Darn Cabir put his nose in my matter. Uss cabir ne uss bhenji ko apni black and white madhubala se hot and happening kareena kappor jo bna diya. Chalo yha tak toh theekh tha... but Cabir ko yeh black and white madhubala pasand bhi aa gyi aur itni pasand aa gyi ki shayad usse pyaar karne lga... Aur ab main fab5 ke kisi member ko khush kaise dekh skta hun... so, here i am getting married to Navya. huh By the way Cabir abhi tak pahuncha nhi na marriage hall mein i guess mujhe aaj yhi rehna padega...

Alya- What do you mean by this Bhai? its about Navya's life

Harshad- Alya! it means agr Cabir Banquet hall pahunchta hai toh main Navya se usike saamne shaadi karunga agr vo nhi aata hai toh main shaadi ke liye jaunga hi nhi... Simple... dono taraf se Taklif Cabir ko hi hogi

Alya- Bhai you can't do this... What about Navya? she truly feel for you bhai

Harshad- Whatever who cares hmm... Lets rest and see Cabir comes there or not...

Alya- But Bhai Please listen...

Harshad- Alya! Stop nagging me and go from here...

{Alya leaves from there. After coming out she got surprised...}




Please do comment and give the X-Report please...

with regards
dhruvika1991
Edited by dhruvika1991 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#26
res😛
unres😆

I am the first

my predictions got right😛,i predicted who is cabir and who is harshad in the 1 st update itself😛

i want a happy ending😳


after this amazing update,i am eager to read the next update...:-)

so,update soon😳

jiya😛

Edited by dewcute - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#27
Yaaay finally you updated.
Navya from black and white Madhubala to hot and happening Kareena Kapoor. Wow😃
Navya loves Cabir and he loves her...eee😃

Stupid Harshad. Now I'm gonna set him on fire😡😛

I just hope Cabir and Navya will end up together
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey Ila...This is not a one shot if it has more than one part...This a Short story rather!

Reserved.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#29

Originally posted by: anaddictof_KY2

Yaaay finally you updated.

Navya from black and white Madhubala to hot and happening Kareena Kapoor. Wow😃
Navya loves Cabir and he loves her...eee😃

Stupid Harshad. Now I'm gonna set him on fire😡😛

I just hope Cabir and Navya will end up together



Thnx yeah you can surely do otherwise i m really bad on doing things... I thought of a little bigger one but really it also means a lot... Yeah harshad is still a stupid lets see what happens next... Beside there is something about cabir someone doesn't notice at all
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: dhruvika1991



Thnx yeah you can surely do otherwise i m really bad on doing things... I thought of a little bigger one but really it also means a lot... Yeah harshad is still a stupid lets see what happens next... Beside there is something about cabir someone doesn't notice at all


Oh come, you are good at this😊

And about Cabir, he is in love with Navya. What can be more imp than this?!?
He helped her out...he loves her...he made her look hot and happening...he loves her...she is getting married but then there is a fact that he loves her. What else?😛

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