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Posted: 11 years ago
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Started watching KYY yesterday while simultaneously reading posts and updates here... What can I say ... ❤️
I'm a hard core MaNan shipper!!! 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sparks-galore

Started watching KYY yesterday while simultaneously reading posts and updates here... What can I say ... ❤️

I'm a hard core MaNan shipper!!! 😆


Thats really goog for this fiction! :P 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: BeyondWords


Thats really goog for this fiction! :P 😆

You can bet that I'll be one of the first to read it!!! ❤️
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sparks-galore

You can bet that I'll be one of the first to read it!!! ❤️


I guess This is the first time you are reading my work and trust me, you will need good luck to read through! :D
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Posted: 11 years ago
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"You chose these orange oranges over those expensive chocolates again?How foolish of you! I truly doubt the wiring of your brain. I guess you need to electroplate your metallic brain. Why did you come here to have these sour oranges when she was offering you those Swiss chocolates? I mean, they are worth thousands, but a kilo of oranges doesn't even cost twenty rupees. Moreover she is your best friend. She specially got those for you, and here you are, snatching these fruits from me in the middle of the field."

"What is so unbelievable? If she wasn't my best friend I won't have come. I am not sure about that though. But one thing is definite. I cannot survive without eating oranges, and not any orange and every orange, but the ones you get."

"I don't like sharing my food."

"You don't have a choice. Till you have me around, you have no choice at all"

"You are a silly boy."

"And you are a crybaby"

"I just cried once"

"No! You cry everyday"

"I don't!"

"You do. Now give that peel to me. Give it...Stop running, will you, or else.."

"Else what?"

"Else I will make you cry again"

"You can't"



"Bhau ji kitne kilo santre doon?"

The sudden voice of the fruit-seller broke his string of thoughts.

"Ek kilo de do." He took out his wallet.

"Kya baat hai bhau ji, aapko ko toh santre behad khatte lagte the na? Aaj koi khaas din hai?"

"Its good to have sourness in life sometimes, isn't it?" he gave a twenty rupee note to Ramu and picked up the bag of oranges.

"Bees rupayae? Kya hua bhai, sab theek hai? Yeh saal do hazaar pachhis hai. Yaha bees rupaye mein toh saas lene ke liye hawa tak na miley. Aur aap toh santre le rahe ho, woh bhi ek kilo." asked a concerned Ramu.

"Oh I am so sorry. How much is it for?"

"Wiae toh ek so tees ke hai, par aapk liye Ek so dus" Came Ramu's answer.

Taking out another ninety rupees he was all set to go, when he suddenly asked, "Ramu. Santre bees rupaye ke konse saal mein milte the?"

"Itna yaad nahi hai, bhau ji"

"Yahi kuch do hazaar cheh ke aas paas."









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Edited by BeyondWords - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#36
Res. will comment after dinner (:

Edited

Aww that fight was pretty adorable. I'm guessing it was Manik's flashback?

It was really well written. And I love the whole santra thing. 😆

And the present day was pretty nice. I wonder why Manik was buying the oranges and why he was having that flashback!

Overall, the prologue was very interesting and enjoyable.

Keep writing!

Love,

Kiret <3

P.S. Waiting for Checkmate's update too 😳
Edited by -.serendipity.- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#37
awesome update Tfs for link 👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
#38
Aww that's really very touching yaar... I think that man is Manik... Love the flashback and the present thing ... Thanks for scrap dear ... Keep it up and update soon ... Wanna read more :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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amazingg prologue👏
manik remembering nandu😳
d FB part was cuteee😳
continue soonish⭐️
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thanks 4 d scrap...😊...Iptisha...

just loved d intro, characterisation, n prologue...👍🏼...
must say u really have a flair for writing.....😎..👏..
m definitely following dis story...😃...

- Andy

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