In the Vale of a Myriad Flowers: A FF (On Hold)

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My name is Shailaja. I love writing FFs. I was just stuck by the idea of a contemporary love story. I felt that this tale suits Akdha perfectly. Please let me know if I should continue this one and if any of you would like to read it! Your responses and likes are going to determine if I am going to write this one! So here it goes...

Contents

Prologue: Just below

Chapter One: Page 9

Chapter Two: Page 13


Prologue

1985 in Jammu Kashmir

The beautiful vales of Jammu Kashmir were disrupted by the cries of another beautiful flower born in the vale of a myriad flowers, lakes and shikaras who would surpass the real blossoms in beauty and write a saga of love and life in a valley that was going to be torn apart by hatred and terror.

Before dawn comes the doom! Before light comes the darkness! So before the love came the hatred too!

As the nurse held the innocent and guileless new born who knew not what the future held for her to the hands of Dr. Keshav Pandit and Mainavati Pandit, whom she was effusively congratulating, "Aapki ghar Lakshmi aayi hai! Mubarak ho Doctor Sabib!" (The Lakshmi of your house has come! Congratulations Doctor Sahib!)

The proud and happy father exclaimed as he held her up to the sunlight tearing through the darkness of the night, "Sirf Lakshmi nahin! Maa Durga ki tarah ek Yoddha aayi hai! Har haar ko jeet main badalne vali, har andhere ko roshni seh badalne vali, har narfrat ke deewar ko pyar seh girane vali, mere Jodha aayi hai! IS KA NAM HOGA JODHA PANDIT!" (Not just Lakshmi! A warrior like Maa Durga! One who will transform every defeat into triumph, one who will replace every darkness with light, one who will bring down ever wall of hatred with the power of her love, my Jodha has come! HER NAME WILL BE JODHA PANDIT!)

That was a day of profound and immeasurable happiness.

1990

Then came this day of utter despair too. Five year old Jodha was playing in the backyard of her house when everything suddenly rose up in flames. She heard sounds of a huge mob with sticks, hand-held kerosene lanterns standing in the front yard of the house and talking furiously to each other. She stood petrified and transfixed wherever she was until she was roused by the last words from her dear father and mother, "JODHA RUN! SAVE YOURSELF!"

She began running furiously as hot tears began flooding her face. An insensate rage coursed through her veins at her helplessness and inability to prevent what was happening to her and her loved ones. The last traces of what was once a home went up in flames and ended in ashes! At an age when she wasn't old enough to see what life was, she had understood death. She had witnessed living death before her eyes as she lost everything and everyone so dear to her.

The next morning when she woke up she beheld the kind and compassionate eyes of a Convent Sister tending to her, "Child, you became unconscious on the road! There was nobody around you. So I had to bring you to my convent. What's your name?"

The child in whose heart and soul the iron had entered replied in a metallic and cracking voice, "Jodha!"

The Sister inquired in a soothing voice, "A beautiful name! Do you remember where your home and parents are? I will take you to them!"

"My house is burnt and I have nobody! I am all alone!" said the artless little girl.

The Sister felt a thick lump forming near her throat at the heart breaking confession of the little girl in front of her, "Hush Child! You aren't alone anymore. You are in the house of God! God is with you! You are God's own child! This church is your home from today onwards!"

The innocent child asked, "Which God's child am I? Mine? Yours? Or that of those people who burnt my home and parents?"

So began this story!

PS: My ongoing FF on Chandini:
Written by Destiny and Etched in Blood


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Shinning_Stuti thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Welcome in this forum Shailu Di.😃😳 wow a wonderful title.😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

Welcome in this forum Shailu Di.😃😳 wow a wonderful title.😃

Thank you Stuti! Still not very convinced if I should be writing a new story when I haven't completed my old one on Chandini. But anyways, couldn't resist myself from writing when I got this idea. If readers like this one, I will simultaneously keep writing both!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting 😃
Please update first chappy soon...
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Originally posted by: shailusri1983

Thank you Stuti! Still not very convinced if I should be writing a new story when I haven't completed my old one on Chandini. But anyways, couldn't resist myself from writing when I got this idea. If readers like this one, I will simultaneously keep writing both!



Koi baat nehi di .. if I can continue 4 ff together, you will easily handle 2😆

Yet to read the prologue fully. Will comment after reading. And I have so many chapters pending in ur CN ff too.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Excellent prologue. Pls do continue.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Which God's child am I ?!?!? A simple sentence... but loaded with immeasurable pain and loss..👏

Superb start.
I hope the Nun finds out where the child is from, and if one of the parents are miraculously alive.
Please continue
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Fabulous prologue dear
Loved it
Plzz do continue soon
Nd thxc 4r pm
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Cogra verygood dear good story plz post chappy
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Congrats for new story. Your first story on Akdha??

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