The riddle of death... (end) - Page 28

Originally posted by: lashy

Loved the way the events have unfolded in this part... pace was good and the names are beginning to gain faces...

Now moving on to the next one!

Thank you so much for your valuable feedback Di! 🤗

Originally posted by: lashy

Originally posted by: shailusri1983

So Stuti finally read your chapter two. You have given several clues and pointers. One, the Surya missing scenario. Two, Jodha having had a teenage crush on Surya and moved on from it and Surya still clinging on to that attachment.

DI! 🤗 🤗 So you got the clues! 😉

Three, was the argument between Bharmal and Surya regarding Jodha and Jalal? Had Bharmal actually promised Jodha in marriage to Surya in return for several shady dealings which he did for her sake burying his own guilty conscience? Hence these strong accusations against Bharmal by Surya about destroying his life.

Wow... 😃 I am in love with your process of deduction. 😆

Four, Jodha hiding several vital clues and details she knows in order to shield somebody. Equally surprising was Radhika's attempt to stall the investigation process by protesting when Jalal inquires a few things from Shivani. It looks as though both Jodha and Radhika know something they want to hide from everyone including Jalal who was almost like a member of the family given his relationship with Jodha.

Ummm... Okay, let's see. 😉

Five, Jodha's attitude, touchiness, and hesitance in discussing her past in the haveli point to several hidden skeletons in the cupboard. A few last questions: Where is Jodha's mother? She was completely missing from the scene. Does she have anything to do with Bharmal's death? Is that the reason why Jodha and Radhika are reluctant to cooperate with the investigation? What do they know and what do they want to hide from the others?

Jodha's mother will be coming. And all the other members will be shown one by one too. About her hand in the murder... Okay, let's see. 😛

A very intriguing chapter. You have got the hang of thrillers perfectly in this chapter. I loved it. Bring it on Stuti.

Loved reading your comment so much DI!!!😃😃🤗

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

Actually I thought this way, that she didn't hide from Jalal, rather she didn't bother to tell anything about Surya to Jalal... And after this murder fiasco, and Jalal's suspicion is in him, and moreover she can feel that Jalal has already guessed the whole thing, she felt a bit confused, hesitant and awkward to tell that at that very moment.

It looked somehow odd, I know, but if Jalal knew about this from first maybe the drama quotient would have reduced... I thought so while writing. 😛

Ok now I get it... she didn't even think it was a big enough thing to tell him about it... so, she wasn't being dishonest in having hidden it...

Even if you add one line explaining this, it'll become clearer 🤗

Yes, I could feel that when I read that line second time. The sentence is sounding extremely rude and smug type... 😔 It's completely my fault to place that here... 😔

I will try to rectify this in future. 😛

Why future? You can still do it now... nothing wrong... there might be (in future) newer readers coming in, who'll read it na.. for their benefit... 🤗

Maybe Surya was handsome in teen. Now... 😆

True! 🤣 Ab pyaar ne TB patient banaa diyaa

Not at all Di! 🤗 🤗 I am rather so happy that you read so carefully and pointed out my mistakes... I did not want Jodha's character to be completely flawless, but there are some points which are entirely my fault as a writer... Thank you so much for pointing those out so that I can improve. 😳 Also, I am in learning phase so honest feedback is very important. 😃

Fault as writer? Na... we all make faults and (I'm still learning that) we can't all please everyone.. but you're only in college still - yet the plotlines you come up with are 👏

If I could write like you when I was in college tab tho

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

interesting point! Didn't strike me... 😲

Originally posted by: lashy

In any criminal case, everyone is a suspect until evidence gathered rules them out. Radika seemed to be defensive and even stammered while replying. There must be something that she is not revealing. Shivani's statement incriminates Surya further.

The search in Surya's room has led to the discovery of love poems to Jodha. Surya had been harbouring more than friendly feelings towards Jodha and it must have come as a shock to him to see Jodha introducing Jalal as her fiance.

The green-eyed monster has got the better of Jalal and he is clearly upset by this discovery. Despite Jodha's insistence that it was a childhood crush, Jalal walked off in a huff. How is Jodha going to pacify him?

Originally posted by: roseraja1915

In any criminal case, everyone is a suspect until evidence gathered rules them out. Radika seemed to be defensive and even stammered while replying. There must be something that she is not revealing. Shivani's statement incriminates Surya further.

The search in Surya's room has led to the discovery of love poems to Jodha. Surya had been harbouring more than friendly feelings towards Jodha and it must have come as a shock to him to see Jodha introducing Jalal as her fiance.

The green-eyed monster has got the better of Jalal and he is clearly upset by this discovery. Despite Jodha's insistence that it was a childhood crush, Jalal walked off in a huff. How is Jodha going to pacify him?

Another super update, Stuti. Must say I am actually enjoying this murder story. Gives my brain a chance to get a good workout , trying to solve the case. Fantastic job!