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Posted: 9 years ago
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I wont say m new here.. but i never introduced myself formally or never interacted with anyone sooo first i should apologize for being silent member.

m huge fan of writers here they write such a wonderful pieces of fiction and others too who kept all the memories of show alive by posting about our JODHA JALAL

now i'll stop my crap blabber and here is my tiny attempt to write something . It may be really bad but thats my first sooo just fingers crossed


He knows...


She was growing impatient with each passing minute

Pick up the phone... what is he doing?

"Hello!"

Hush!!! Finally...

"Hey!! What you were doing that it took so long to pick up the call?"

"Sorry baba ... I was sleeping "

"Huh? You were sleeping?"

"Yes why?"

Her face fell hearing his response... but then suddenly anger took over her gloom

"Bye then and sorry that I DISTURBED" she said while hanging up

"Hey wait but why you called" he asked confused at her tone

"Nothing" she didn't wait for him to respond and hung up

tring... tring...tring...

Who's calling at this time?

"Hello"

"Why you sound so upset did you guys fought again??"

"uhmmm... I felt so" "okay then come over for dinner as its already 9"

"Will be waiting"

.

.

.

Ting tong...

"Come beta"

"maaa!! Who is it?"

"you... what are you doing here?"

That moment he regretted his mistake how can he be so forgetful

FLASHBACK

After sooo many days I had such a nice sleep now I should go for some fresh air and meet my buddies he thought to himself

"Hi abdul"he said

"Hi buddy finally you got the time to meet me" abdul said to jalal

"Nothing like that yaar its just last few days were very hectic coz of the new project our firm bagged and it may bring me a promotion" he said while crossing his fingers

"That's great" said abdul and patted jalal's shoulder

"Hey jalal" a voice came from behind causing jalal to turn back

"ohhh... Hi maan"

"But jalal what are you doing here" maan asked confused

"What do you mean" jalal asked him with frown on his face

"I mean you should have been with jodha right"

"What are talking about maan"

"Huh you don't know that jodha had came in the evening"

"WHAT??"

"Yup she had came here I met her... she said you both are going out and she was waiting for you to pick up the phone" maan explained

When he finished saying they heard a little noise and turned their heads into the direction where abdul was standing and saw him snickering seeing him maan too chuckled at jalal's mortified expression

After coming out of his daze situation became clear to him that's why jodha called me and he replayed their conversation in his mind

Abdul shook him out of his thoughts and said "now u have to make it upto her"

"Uh-oh" maan added "now what?" Jalal groaned

"don't know what you guys had planned but that must be something special since she was all dressed up little bit traditional you know... and swear she looked gorgeous" jalal shot him an angry glare and maan surrendered lifting his hands up in the air

abdul laughed at their conversation

You are in big trouble jalal he thought to himself bidding bye to both his friends he went back to think about a plan to woo his girl...

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey nice update
Looking forward for this
Update asap
Well wats the title of your story
Continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Congrats for your first story dear!! 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was nice. Pls continue.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thank u sooo much this means alot
I love your stories @sharmactty nly complain is u dont update them
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice chappy
Title is nice
Poor jalal
Jo is furious
Update soon buddy
Pm me
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Posted: 9 years ago
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welcum to d forum... 😃 and congo on ur 1st ff... 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Welcome to the Forum buddy...😃

Hope you have fun interacting with others here...😃


And congratulations on your first work! ⭐️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Congrats for ur first ff
Nice chapter 😃
Continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow so sweet..
Ja forgot about their date..
He has to do something big to woo her..
Update soon

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