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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#891

Originally posted by: spvd
Part 16
Very nice...
Both are hurting...
Jalal is so rude...
Surya is hurt seeing Jodha has fallen for Jalal...
Cont soon...

Thanks Deepa😃

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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#892

Originally posted by: Senapatichandri

bhavi didi...log kehte hai ke love me passion hona zaroori hai...ek idea du... let jodha feel that passion of jalal's love...us gadhi ko kuch samajh to aaye... 😡bt didi ek baat pata nhi chali...jalal ko hate karne ka koi to valid reason hoga jodha ke paas woh to nahi dia aapne...😕

Don't worry I have big valid reason😕

bt i must tell this jalal is beyond my imagination... when ever i read his talks his inner voice i feel lost... kaise karti ho itne passionate ek charector create...???

Aww... How sweet... My characters are usually intense...

mujhe to aise passionate person sirf dreams me milte hai...😆 is jalal ke feeling se mujhe isse pyaar ho gaya hai... a b kya kare... man hi man me khayali phulav akati hu...👏

heheh... U have only seen oneside of Jalal... so wait for other side... then I will ask you😆

BTW didi Is it hate or love ka kya hua... bechara mirza ko to ek kiss bhi raas nahi aaye usme... really waiting for thats story update...update both of this soon...

Sure I will update that one too... but I am in RKG mood...😛

bt yaa registan ka gulab is my fav of all time beside sammy's HIs First love...aap to meri story padhti hi nahi...😭 comment bhi nahi deti ek bhi😭

Aree... I will sure read your story... lately I have got busy... I will soon read it and comment.😛

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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#893

Originally posted by: kartikaJA
awesome update
totally love it
waiting for your other story also
please update soon

Thanks😃

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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#894

Originally posted by: Kalgi22
Bhavi 🤗

My dear Chellam😃🤗

Another wonderful progressive chapter.. totally loved it. ❤️

Thank U for lovely comment...😃

I was really enjoyed reading Jalal's inner fights. I was madly expect this from him since long time.

Really... I was worried thinking readers will think I am dragging story.

But poor him! 😭 next poor is Abdul!! I was laughing hard when Jalal repeatedly emphasizing 'my dear friend' 😆 But Abdul's untold love and Jalal's twisted stunt is totally unexpected. 😉 Proposing in one day??😲.. oh no one week!! 🤣

Yap...both of them kept silence... but when Ur loved one is in pain ...it's hard to keep silence... Jalal will not leave them alone..😆

What guard addressed Jodha as Kunwari??!! 😡 Hope no one hears it. 😲 Again Surya as 'Jodha' 😲😲 But thanks to spy's confusion. 😆

Jodha and Radha sounds little similar

Again another shock? So Jodha is the one stole decree??😲😲 OMG!😲 So Surya also have a mission to help Jodha. Interesting.

Yappp... He is here to help her... but poor man doesn't know the whole story...why she agreed to this dangerous mission.

Oh Pinaz begum too there??😛 Their debates in front of all? 😕 But Surya understood both of their pain. Hmm Actually Pinaz help him realize Jalal's love for Radha. What will happen next? Finger crossed!!

Radha has blended deep down his veins... nothing will help him anymore...

Wonderful Chapter dear really have a nice read. Thank you! 😳

Thank U my dear😛

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1. I am really curious to know your reaction to Jodha's first betrayal ... I mean her achievement of stealing Farman. - I was really shocked and admired her will power beside her love for Jalal.
I am glad ... 😃
2. Do U think Jalal will let Radha go at this point? - I don't think so that too after Pinaz miserable failure 😳
3. Why Radha came to his chamber? Is it an another betrayal? - Nope because she understood his pain - I think
Yap... She needs answer to his blames..
4. Are U watching Chandra Nandini??? - Not yet
😃 Yet... so soon U will start... by the way Jalal looked too hot

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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#895

Originally posted by: Monucute
Bhavu di🤗
I'm here again..😃
Update kar do _/\_ Pleassseee 😆

Update😲😆 I started writing... so far 1500 words

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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#896

Originally posted by: amitaprasad
love u bhavi...love u..u rocked ...there are lot of wow moments..
Aww Amita love u my dear

i loved the way u have described his inner turmoil,his helplessness to do nothing,his fear for his empty life he would have to lead without radha,almost reached at the verge of breaking point..its pathetic to see a mighty king so feeble,u have excelled here to portray such touching delicate issue extraordinarlly.

I tried to control myself not to make him weak... but when he is alone...no matter how much U strong... person break down. I am glad U enjoyed it.😳

abdul's crush on reva is a news wow...chhupa rustum..

Yes... it is... actually about four chapters back I thought about it... and wanted to began their love story... but so much happened in past chapters I didn't get enough space for them... same for Rahim... for last two chapters I want to add Rahim and Radha scene but not room for it...

tansen 's recital and the gazal is so soothing,and the drama which happened between our love birds was so intriguing...answer to ur

I am glad U enjoyed my fav part of the chapter.😳

query-1 )-i loved this betreyer radha who did not forget about her mission and appreciate it that she has choosen her beloved land over her love...

I am so so happy to hear that... I was worried how readers will take it... but most of them are fine.😛

query-2)...i really do not know what is cooking in my writer mind it is she who will decide whether she let her go or not..

hehhe

query-3)...i think she has come to either reconcile or confront about his accusations of infidelity on her..curiously waiting for their confrontation ...they are always my favourite scene

Yap... somewhat both U got it.

.query-4)...definetly a big NO initially i have watched 2nd episode...but it is not appears as real as jodha akber,yerterday i watched for five minutes and seeing helana,adham,actress of kumkum bhagya...i want to beat my head seeing this big mess...helana's get up is too irritating...

I am watching but it's not same... Only part I am enjoy is Rajat... by the way today episode was awesome... Rajat looked so hot😳

congratulations for new business may it flourish in many folds...

Thank U so much

sorry for late comment..it is not my fault...the shit connection is responsible for it...i am trying my best from the day of update..and hey dear..i was not able to tap like button..please try to update asap...

Thank U for lovely comment... Don't say sorry for late comment because lately I am late always in everything 😆... Don't worry ... I am having same issue sometime... Many time like button doesn't work. But I really appreciate your comment and encouraging words.

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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#897

Originally posted by: swetiii
was reading the chappi again...
u know ur crazy readers do that again & again till u give a new chapter
and am no different..
coming to the point..

How sweet my dear... U read it again...me blushing😳

I realised that I missed out ur last questions in my comment...

1.. we all know she is revenging on Jalal for something which he never intended to do.. I think so
haha
I feel sad for her betrayal
they both are hurting themselves

Hmm... betrayal is always painful... but her motive is way bigger than this betrayal.

2... even if Jalal let her go.. Jo won't leave 🤣
haina

You guessed it... as always😃 Sometime I feel U read my mind😆

3... my tiny brain can only think of one reason..
to make new stories.. 🤣
she will act like a cry baby that because of him Surya called off the proposal
something like he established her characterless so Surya abandoned her..
Hehe
am I even close to what u have thought 😳

Nooo... She wont do that😆😆 Waise not a bad idea.

4.. yes & no..
I like watching rajat's scenes
but I don't like Nandini
she does overacting
😆

I am glad U watching it for Rajat... me too... I feel Nandini is too childish...

No offence taken
maybe I just don't like her now coz we r habituated of seeing him romancing with Jo
so this is natural reaction towards the lead actress
maybe
I sound too idiotic
Hehe

I am comparing as well... it will take too long to see them as a couple... we are die hard fans of JA😳

and yeah
waiting for ur next update
till then.. sayonara
will silently cherish these chapters till then

LOVE U SWEET HEART AND THANK u SO MUCH FOR LOVELY COMMENTS

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shahbhavini

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Posted: 8 years ago

#898

Originally posted by: lashy
Whether it was the boom of the kettledrum or the shifting of the hourglass... whether it was the lattice window through which Jalal views the supposed pair chatting, or Tansen's practise hour... the setting was beautifully laid... for what has to be your best chapter so far.

Shraddha ... either your comment... analysis or your chapters... U always bring joy in my life... thank U for such a beautiful comment...

After reading your comment I felt happy. best chapter so far😳 I am so glad.

They say separation is a better judge of a person's emotional investment in a relationship than togetherness is - and today, Jalal and Radha - both depicted how much this separation is tearing them apart.

The silence untold love is very painful which make person so restless... that they can loose their all senses... on top...when the situation becomes so difficult they can't even confess... it is too pitiful. Plus here Jalal is helpless... feeble and Jealous... He put stone on his heart and took tough decision to let her go...but more he deny more he pull towards her.

What Radha tells Surya I feel I am stuck and captured in the box where I feel suffocated and can't even breathe despite all I still want to reside in the box forever until my last breath is good for both!

Her situation is much more complicated then Jalal... the question constantly hunting her... how could she fall in love with him... even though she wants him... Love truly makes people too weak.

I could literally feel their vibes - both the push and the pull - during the entire Tansen recital - take a bow for that part Bhavu dear... and all the more so for a subtle argument that turned into a not-so-subtle blameshifting match of words between the two.
There are so many moving phrases in that part... and in the others that stood out to me - that if I was to list them, I'd be re-quoting half your chapter...

Particularly Tansen scene is my fav in the chapter... Jalal wanted pushing her to the limit... knowingly, he can't live without her but he can't stay near her... both confused.

The Abdul-Reva relationship did take me by surprise (since there were no hints of this before)... but everything else just flowed... like a waterfall... one step after another... after another... after another... gently... softly...

This two are silent lovers... they both hidden the feeling not even confess to themselves...but when Reva cried... Abdul was unable to hold himself. Actually I hinted once while Reva and Radha talked... Reva hinted indirectly..love is not for her.. I thought about to make them couple about three or four chapters back but then I didn't find a proper space for them.

Thank U so much... UR words means a lot to me.

Now, the chapter was an emotional one - no doubt. But just because it was emotional, didn't mean we didn't get an insight into their other affairs. In fact, that is what made it more poignant - her having to put up a brave face in front of Suryavadan despite the fact that both he and she know her heart's already betrayed her to elope with the Shehenshah!
His need to carry on with his duties & assignments - with the spies or at the weapons armoury -even though his mind has not had a moment's peace ever since that letter. There was emphasis on their inner turmoil as lovers as there was emphasis on their roles as aristocrats too! You've mastered the balance between all such aspects in this one!

Omg... I am feeling too senti and blushing😭😳... My favorite and the best writer on the forum praised my work... Seriously I feel all my hard work was worth it... Plus surprisingly this chapter I really didn't feel it was difficult... it just came naturally so I am more happy.. there are many scenes I struggle to write but this chapter I have put only little time due to short of time... may be I was too involved in each character. somehow I enjoy writing and reading painful emotions.

Keep it up, and keep it coming 👏⭐️

😳

P.S. I did expect that Radha had stolen the decree, but what I hadn't expected was that she was here to assassinate the Shehenshah... which was a good twist! Of course, it's not going to happen!

Why U think it's not going to happen? U never know...😆

I do have the same questions that Surya has about Jalal recognising her/not recognising her... I am a bit confused about this Mothi connection too.. (and how Adham fits in it!)

Adham came two weeks before to Amer before the war to arrange and plan... when his eyes laid on Moti who was coming out of the temple... and he kidnapped Moti... and...ruin her so Jodha went back to Acharaya for further training so she could fight him...

It will soon clear up... In one or two chapter.

P.P.S. I generally don't write light-hearted emoticon-splashed reviews when something's touched me a lot... so you understand why this review does not read like my usual write ups😉!
I so cheered to read your light hearted emoticon-splashed review.
LOVE U 😳

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harshal

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Posted: 8 years ago

#899

Originally posted by: shahbhavini

Sorry for late response as always😕😆

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zalma_di

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Posted: 8 years ago

#900

Its so beautiful..

I am crying while reading tansen part, even i dont listen to the music. I just feel sad for both of Jalal and Jodha..

In my mind, i know it will be a happy ending ( ps. Please dont betray me with sad ending LOL.. Ha ha) but the way you describe their feeling touch my heart. How you describe mother nature also feel their sadness and desperation..

Update fast Di, and also for it hate or love..

Eager to have your notification asap.. Ha ha