AKDHA FF: 'No Name To My Desire' THRD 3- Chap 12 (Part 3)

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Gudiyalovesguru

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Posted: 11 years ago

#41

excellent update yaar...
intresting part...
continue soon...
wanna read more...

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Pallavi

@Pals2411

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Posted: 11 years ago

#42

To tell you this chapter was awesome, is actually understating it😳...So I am not using any adjectives here😳...Honestly PP, I was a bit scared (for Jo) and nervous on how you are going to handle this JaJo mulakat...And I must tell you have tackled it brilliantly, while wording it remarkably well👏👏...

Jallu's longing, his desire, his restlessness, his anxiety, his eagerness could be clearly felt👏...Jallu surprised me for once...We know his obsessive/possessive, crazy streak for Jodha and how much he loves/desires her😳...His chain of thoughts in the first half (before his actual meeting with her) was simply superb😳...His mind was trying to tell him a lot of things, which were conflicting yet rational...On the one hand he knew he won't be able to control his feelings when he sees Jo after such a long time, at the same time he also started weighing the cons if he did not control himself...He knew he had to go slow...Again his practical dimag is back to thinking ki why she is meeting him all of a sudden after so many years...In short, this teda/monster Jalal was thinking, trying hard to suppress his feelings because he knew that this time one wrong move and he will lose Jo forever (And he will never take a chance like that)⭐️

When Jodha entered and she was facing his back and then he ordered the security to lock the door and then when his smirk returned, for a second I was like ab kya'.....but what he saw after that, how he felt after that and how he acted after that was remarkable, very controlled for a man like him😊 and the reaction that Jo was giving was exactly what I thought😃...She despises him the way, he desires her...The feelings for each other are extreme and hence the reactions towards each other are diametrically opposite and strong😃...

Jo told him everything about Rico's kidnap and Jallu's reaction was his natural self, angry wala barging on his lady love😡...But after that, after seeing Jo's terrible state, her eyes, he felt the pain and withdrew😊...

I loved the line 'When emotions speak louder, words take a back seat'...Says it all😊

When Jo told him about Rico's kidnap, deliberately withholding Jalal's name as the father, I was like it is futile now Jo but I could very well understand her attempt in doing so😭...But the best dialogue of this chapter was undoubtedly when he calmly disclosed something, that she was hiding so preciously.. 'world's never a safe place for Jalaluddin Mohammad's son. You should have been much more careful with him.'⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️...Wonderful PP👏...The timing was perfect😳

After the above, I saw Jalal trying to figure it out all in a composed manner...When Abdul came his reaction on Jodha was like SHOCK LAGA, SHOCK LAGA' but Jallu-Abdul convo made absolute sense😊...Jodha hearing it all and questioning Jalal was natural,...because she never thought that they had been caught...not only caught but also her truth (about Rico) had got revealed😭...AFTER THAT IT WAS JALLU BACK TO WHAT HE WAS/WANTED TO DO, BUT RESTRAINED TILL THAT POINT...STILL HE WAS CAREFUL😳...I loved it😳, the line 'Ab kare bhi to kya kare Jaan' still rings in my ear... but still I didn't like...But I loved it😉

Now who is the kidnapper??????? Naturally someone who knows the truth (not only about Rico but also about the violent abuse) and someone who needs money?????? ...By the way, I want to know more about the man that hugged Jodha, her BF I think, during flashback (he is one more suspect on my list now)😕...Adham/Shariff still on my list😕...

DEKH KITNA BADA REVIEW LIKHA😳...AB LAG RAHA HAI KYU LIKHA...YEH SAB TO TUJKO BHI PATA HAI🤢🥱

CHANGE THE PRECAP PP😡...KAISI CHUTTI😡 ...BAHUT HO GAYI CHUTTI TERI😡

Edited by Pals2411 - 11 years ago

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Chin2_n

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Posted: 11 years ago

#43

Awesome update as usual👏⭐️

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Sush

@Forthislifeonly

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Posted: 11 years ago

#44

OFFO.thank god PP atlast you have updated my dear...I was just eagerly waiting for it😃😃...Love you.awsome chapter as usual👏👏.but issbar update jaldi dena .samjhi...😡😡

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anshita priyadarshni

@marshi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#45

Awesome i like this jalal as i always wanted to see a possesive one and loved the chapter theres a request plz show that joodha is near to his best friend a boy and due to him jallu gets jealous and pm me when u update

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Tabassum

@Arieltabi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#46

Pri first congrats for the new thread. 🥳 😊 . And I love the banner. Especially RT's pic. That's one of my fav and the perfect choice for this character. He is looking devilishly handsome.and his eyes r dark and intense.
It was a mindblowing update Pri. I love it.
Honestly I was little scared thinking what will Jalal do with Jo after meeting her. But love the first few paras. "My life is returning back" love this line. And he truly loves Jo. He tried to control himself inspite of his longing. And its really hard for him.
When both of them were in the same room even I could feel the tension. And Pri u r a brilliant writer. U made me relate to both Jo and Ja's emotions. Jalal loves her a lot. Can't see her in pain. He wants to touch her, love her. And I can completely understand Jo's disgust. Its not easy to forgive the man who forced u. But hope someday Jo understands Jalal's love for her. And Jalal realize his mistake and understand how much pain he has caused her.
Jo was so naive. Even seeing Ja's reaction she didn't get it. I guess she didn't even wanted to think about this that's why didn't get Ja's reactions.
Love the outbrust. When Ja said "Ab kare bhi to kya kare Jaan" I was like ye nahi sudhrega 😆 . Honestly me chahti bhi nahi ki ye SUDHRE 😆. But that line was sexy 😉 😆 . I love all the lines about Mughals especially the one, "Mere liye mera Beta utna hi Jaroori hai jitna Uski Ma" .
I was praying that all of this is Ja's plan. But now I m scared knowing its not. Now Rico is in danger and Jalal's reputation is too. Yes I know Jalal did this horrible mistake but I want this to be between Ja and Jo. Jo can punish him for this but this should be only between them.
But who is the Kiddnapper. Who knows not only about rico but also about that night other than Ja, Jo, Abdul and Ammijan. Is it Adham, Sarif, or Jo's old bf.
And Precap ka kya matlab? What chutti? U have already enjoyed chutti. Updating after two weeks. I don't care I want update in one week.
Btw u r reading about THE NIGHT for a long time. When will we know about the details of that NIGHT ???????

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sara

@SARA4444

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#47

👏di amazing update👏

loved it a loot 😃

rico ko waapas lao

precap? chutti? you are updating next in 1 week k? 😆

update soon 😆

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surabhi chandgothia

@chandgothia

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#48

Its amazing...u r an amzing writer...plz write more and soon...i love ur story...

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#49

Awww 😳

Four and a half year...without her. Long days...longer nights...and a never ending wait. Jalal didn't want to get back to THIS life of his. He didn't want to return to a life of endless 'longing'. He wanted to taste the pleasure, even a commoner is blessed with. And for that he needed HIS Jodha in his life. Jalal knew his one mere mistake will turn his long wait to ashes. And he surely didn't want that. 'I can't afford it this time...I can't afford to loose her again. I can't afford to live my life without her anymore...I...I must control my feelings...I must be...very...careful with her this time.' Jalal was trying hard to get hold over his inner turmoil to make things easier for both of them. He knew he had to do this...any how...that too very soon.

I loved the lines below - the way you've worded them... very well-worded and touch on the right nerve.. 😳

There they were. Under the same roof. Breathing in same air. Alone in a suit. Two life...two set of thoughts...two set of feelings...but one destination - they both needed to talk to each other. They both needed to tell each other what they were carrying in their hearts. The only difference was...one relishing the proximity of his beloved...another detesting the presence of the man she curses every moment of her life.

..Speak out damnit!!!' ASR! 😛

He was nearly becoming nice here.. 😉

'Her pain is no less than mine.' it took almost no time for Jalal to realise the truth he was ignorant of. He realised she was in agony of loosing her son as much as he was. It was no less a sting for her. He released Jodha. 'A...am sorry...I was just out of my mind...I promise I won't touch you again.' with this Jalal receded back from Jodha, increasing the gap between them...but all the while he had his eyes on her. 'Ok...now calm down and tell me what exactly happened?'

But something inside her told her mind to omit the first line of the caller.

'Are you looking for Jalaluddin Mohammad's son?'

It was nothing but a desperate attempt of Jodha to keep her son away from that devil's clutch. She thought this omission by her will keep Jalal away from the TRUTH. Only if she could have known...how far he has already gone in pursuit of THAT truth!!!

Loved this! ❤️

When emotions speak louder, words take a back seat. Such was the situation with these two souls. For one...hatred was so strong that she couldn't even imagine spending words on him...for another...desire was so intense that he couldn't take risk of staring at her or be in her proximity for long. It was a challenge for Jalal to be in her presence yet not touching her.

I liked these bits about this villain oops hero! 😳

'world's never a safe place for Jalaluddin Mohammad's son. You should have been much more careful with him.'

Jalal rubbed his hand on the prickly stubble that has grown overnight.

Jalal brushed his nose on her earlobe and whispered, 'ab kare bhi toh kya kare jaan...it's a truth even God himself can't alter.'

After this, Jalal goes back to his old tareekas! He disappointed me... 😕

'Jalaluddin...Mohammad. The chairman of IMPERIAL...the kind hearted MUGHAL king...most influential human being on earth...the man of many women's dream...is actually a RAPIST. Kaisa ho agar yeh kal kisi newspaper ka headline ho toh...' kidnappers words raked every inch of Jalal's body, rushing a fire through his veins. He yelled at the top of his voice, 'you bast**d'.

This is really intriguing.. let's see who it is who knows so much about them.. 😲

Lovely chapter PP.. really really on the edge-of-your-seat types!

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hemakeerti

@hemakeerti

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Posted: 11 years ago

#50

Pri.. kya likha hai tune dear.. god.. you swept me out of my foot.. my heart is still racing fast, even after 10 minutes since I read the chapter. Agar meri haal ye hain, tho jalal and jodha ka kya ho sakta.. their hearts would have raced at supersonic speed.. I loved the way Jodha tried to hide the secret of Rico from HIM, but loved more the way he revealed that he knew the truth..

So the kidnapper is not just interested in money, but more focused on defaming him. Kaun hain ye? Adham again? Chalo, whoever it is Jalal and Abdul will kick him out of blue. I'm least bothered about the kidnapper. I'm more curious in reading how tera theda Jalal is going to cajole Jo, make her fall for him once and forever.

Will be waiting eagerly for next update..