os: kuch Ankahe ehsas... updated chapter 4 pg 4

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Posted: 11 years ago
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hellooo guyz new here nd writing my first os here have written many but here i m newbie so pls bear with me guyz...!!!!
so my story will start from benazir track..
aankhae ehsas...!!!
after englufing the poison jodha fell straight into jalla's arms and with half conciousness she said shensha humne apna patni dharam nibhaya hai ab hum benishchint hoke apni aankhein hamesha ke liye band kar sakte hai... agar devi maa ne hume afsar diya toh hum dubara apki patni banke apko woh sab dena chahenge jo hum is janam mein chahte hue bhi nhi de pae... and with that she closes her eyes and faint in his strong manly arms...
there was a standstill for jalla.. It seems like someone has stabbed him straight into his heart... everyone else there start shouting for jodhaand then jalla came into reality from his wrost nightmare of losing jodha and realise that his life was in his arms uncouncious.. he immidiately took his jodha in his strong arms and ran into her chamber shouting hard for hakima sahiba...
meanmile hamida bano gives order toh atgah sahab hum chahte ki benazir toh kaid kar lia jae or is muamle mein is badzaat ko baad mein saza mukarar ki jaegi...
in jodha's chamber...
jalla was sitting next to jodha holding her hand not ready to leave her for any second and asking continuosly toh hakim sahiba about her condition... when seeing her tensed about jodha' health his curosity gained and he said hakim sahiba hum kab se apse jodha begum ki halat mein puch rhe hai.. ap kuch btati kyo nhi hai... ka hua hai hamari jodha ko woh thk toh ho jaengi na.. hakim sahiba kuch kijiye par hume hamari jodha ekdum sahi salamat chahiye... after watching jalla so angry she said hukum hum apni tarah se puri koshish karenge haar illaz par hume bhahut dukh ke sath btana pad rha hai ki and she stops in middle jalla asks again full tensed for his wife for his life ki ki kya hakima sahiba kahiya na ap kuch kehti kyo nhi hai kyo baar baar shant ho jati hai... hum apko kuch nhi kahenge hum jodha begum ke bare mein janne ka haq hai kahie hakim sahiba and collecting all her courage she said muaff kijiye shensha par benazir ka vish bhahut zehrilla tha or yeh jodha begum ke pure badan mein failta ja rha hai... hume sari nuskhe apna lie hai jisse zeher or na felle lekin jodha begum ke upar iska koi asar hota nhi dikh rha... hum muaff kar die shensah.. ab allah hi kuch kar sakte hai...
with these words from hakim sahiba all his life come upside down he felt like his conscience was leaving him slowly...
he burst out into tears in front of haki sahiba in folded his hands by telling her kuch bhi kijiye hakim sahiba lekin jodha ko bacha lijiye hum apni wagah se inki zindagi ko kuch nhi hone de sakte agar inhe kuch ho gaya toh hum khud ko kabhi muaff nhi kar paenge... till den hamida bano comes and seeeing her son like this she ran too him nd hugged him nd console him by saying jallal shant ho jaiye kuch nhi hoga jodha begum ko.. alla kabhi ache logo ke sath bura nhi karte pr jodha begum toh pak hai inhe kuch nhi hoga...
with that he comfort little bit but want to see her jodha fit and fine as soon...
he leave her hand and kissed on her forhead and said jodha begum agar humne kabhi bhi allah ki sache man se ibadat ki hogi toh ap ekdum thk ho jaengi jab tak hum lautenge...
and with that he left her chamber...
hamida bano orders the guard jalla ki halat abhi sahi nhi hai toh ap unke peeche peeche jaiye or unka dhayan rakhiye...
on the other side maham anga was celebrating her victory and praying that jwill odha die soon...
Precap - jalla without his slippers climbing 1000 stairs of devi maa's temple for well being of his wife his life..!!
plss comment guyz all your suggestions are welcome...
and if u dont like it i will delete it..
so should i update?

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chapter-2 pg1
chapter-3 pg3
chapter-4 pg4
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Posted: 11 years ago
#2

Originally posted by: rima4ever

wonderful start

please continue


thanxx dear...
but i think no one else here liked it...
so thinking of closing it...
but thanxx a ton dear..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sunshine17


thanxx dear...
but i think no one else here liked it...
so thinking of closing it...
but thanxx a ton dear..

please do not close it
please continue
i am sure people will love it
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Posted: 11 years ago
#4
continue the story is nice
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Posted: 11 years ago
#5
Thanxx for your support guyz..
So updating next chapter...
Jallal was totally broken by seeing the painfull sight of his wife her condition was getting worse instead of getting better...
Jalla remember all their sweet,bitter and fun moments with each other...
He remembered everthing from the very start...
How he met her in amer and got mesmerised from her beauty her innoence her doe like eyes, rose petals like lips he felt as if he was seeing an angel in front of him...
He felt pain deep inside his heart that how he lust for her,how desprately he wanted her body...
He marry her only to get her body only to lust her...
He didn't know why till now he dont touch her only because she didnt want it...
Then a smile crept on his face as he remember how their relationship change from hate to friendship and then again to hatred and this very thought fade his smile...
He remember how he told jodha that even if she closes her eyes forever he will not enter her chamber...
And all the flashback ends,he only remember her last words agar devi maa ne hume dubara apki patni hoke ka mauka dia toh woh sab apko dena chahenge jo is janam mein nhi de pae...
He know how much she belives in devi maa...
She worship her like a true believer as if she know devi maa's blessings will always remain with her...
He know what he had to do know...
He immediately ran to the temple of devi maa...
The temple of devi maa in agra has great values...
It has said that whoever climb to those 1000 stairs bare foot and pray with pure heart all their wishes come true...
Jallal without thinking again started to climb the stairs with the love he has for jodha that he was never ready to accept...
He was only praying too devi maa that pls save his jodha he will do whatever she want from him but he wanted to see his wife fit and fine soon...
He climb 100 stairs bare foot and started to get swealling but he did not cared...
Atgah sahib was watching all this from far and as guards were going to stop their shenshah from what he was going to do atgah sahib stopped them by saying tehro jane do shenshah ko... Aj ek shauhar apni patni ki salamati ke liye dua magne ja rha hai...
Aj shehshah sirf or sirf ek pati hai...
In jodha's chamber..
Hakim sahiba was shocked by seeing the recovery of jodha so soon..
All her medicines started working on her body it was like an miracle...
On the other side jalla was continuosly climbing the stairs without taking any stop or break,his feets started to bleed due to immense swelling he was feeling so much of pain but was not ready to stop because he know he have to save his wife at any cost...
And finally he reached the temple...
He saw the idiol of devi maa and bend down in front of her by folding his hands...
He breakdown in tears.. He was crying profusely...
He was begging to devi maa to save his jodha and give her back to him...
Finally he speak...
Devi maa hum jante hai humne jodha begum ko bhahut dukh pahochae hai jiski woh haqdar nhi thi...
Humne aj tak unpe vishwas nhi kia or unhone humse nafrat karte hue bhi hamesha hamara sath dia or aj toh unhone apni jaan khatre mein dal di hume bachane ke liye...
Devi maa hum nhi jante hume kya hua hai par ab hum jodha begum ko dhuki ya kisi musibat mein nhi dekh sakte...
Ham.. Hamare dil mein bhahut dard hota hai jab unhe hum dhuki dekhte hai...
Na jane hume kya ho gaya hai...
Then a voice came from his back and the priest if the tempe said
Tumhe prem hua hai beta... Koi bhi insan jab kisi se shiddat se prem karta hai toh usse dhuki ya kisi musibat mein dekhta hai toh usse dard hota hai...
Usse lagta hai jese uske andar koi tufan sa chal rha ho or woh uske chehre pe ek muskan lane ke liye kuch bhi kar sakta hai...
Tum bhi yaha apne pyar ke liye hi aae ho beta apne pyar ko bachane ke liye...
Mera ashirwad tumhare or tumhari patni ke sath hai beta devi maa kare woh jaldi se thk ho jae...
Jalla couldnot believe his ears.. And thought
Kya yeh sach keh rhe hai?
Kya sach mein hume jodha begum se mohabbat ho gai hai?
Kya isliye hum unhe is halat mein nhi dekh sakte...
Then his inner soul told him haa jala tum jodha se mohabbat be panah mohabbat karte ho...
His face lit up and he accept that yes i love jodha i love her more than my life...
He again fold his hand infront of devi maa and said
Maa aj agar tune mujhe yeh vishwas dilaya mujhe yeh bataya hai ki main jodha begum se kitni mohabbat karta hu toh maa mujhe uske sath jeena hai puri zindagi...
Uske bina nhi maa...
Then suddenly a guard appears and told him jaldi chaliye shenshah jodha begum ko hosh aa gaya hai...
Precap - jalla jodha confrontation...
Hope you guys like it...
Will wait for your comments...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow loved it and continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
#7
Wow..
Its really great.
Amazing and fabulous update.
Jodha finally back...
Jalal walks the 1000 stairs of the Devi Maa temple to ask for Jodha's Life.
Jalal in love with Jodha.
Precap is interesting.
Continue sooonish...
Thanks for the pm.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#8
Oh my, this has been written beautifully. Do continue soon. Love all the parts! x 👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
#9

Originally posted by: NikkiReed

Wow loved it and continue soon

Thanq u dear...
Updating the next part in few minutes hope u like it too...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#10
Thanksss a ton dear... :)

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