OS : Jalal's Feelings...

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Hey All,

This is my second OS on current track.
This is purely from Jalal's POV.


Jodha lay on the bed just moments away from dying. Hakim had given up saying its beyond her capacity now to save Jodha.
Jalal sat next to her looking at her without blinking.
He looks up to see all in tears.
Hamida for whom Jodha was more than a daughter now
Salima for whom Jodha was like an own sister
Bakshi Banu whom Jodha had gracefully forgiven
Rukaiya who always wanted to best her
Moti who was with Jodha from many years...

All were looking shattered as the truth was sinking in that Jodha may not survive to see the next day.

Jalal had come back from Dargah begging Allah to save Jodha... He had no more strength left...emotionally he was drained...He just couldnt come to terms with Jodha's condition.

When he could take it no more he asked everyone to leave him alone with Jodha.
He wanted this time only for him...these precious moments with Jodha...


To be continued
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Jalal held Jodha's hand and looked lost. Hope was fading and as Hakim told only a miracle could save Jodha.
Jalal walked towards the Mandir and kneeled in front of Kanhaji, he lighted the aarti ka thaal and remembered how Jodha would do aarti and copied her. He then takes the thali and touches Jodha's forehead giving her the aarti. He silently prays to kanhaji to save his devotee with whom she shared all her joy & sorrow.

He then holds her hand & says

" Aap hamein chodkar nahin jasakthi Jodha Begum...Hum aapke bina jii nahin payenge...aap beshak hosh mein nahin hain par hamein yakeen hain aap tak hamari aawaaz pahunch rahi hain...aapki rooh tak.Aapko hamari khatir waapas aana hoga uss jalal ke liye jo aapke
bina adhura hain "

" Kya app jaanti hain Jodha begum jab pehli baar humne aapko Amer mein dekha tha usi din se hum aapko paana chahte the. Aap hamari zid, hamari junoon ban gayi thi kyunki aap mein kuch khaas tha jo baki koi ladki mein nahin tha. Humne aapse Nikah bhi isiliye kiya tha kyunki hum aapko harana chahte hain..apni haram mein sajana chahte the..lekin dhere dhere sab badalne laga...hum badalne lage...hamara bartav aapke taraf badalne laga. Aap har baar kuch alag kar jaati thi aur hamein hairaan karthi thi. Hamari nafrat, gussa sab kam hota gaya aapki achai dekh kar.Hum chahne lage ki aap hamein samjhe, hamare jazbaat samjhe aur aap hamein samajne bhi lagi thi. Aapki har hunar shataranj bazi ho,talwaar bazi ho ya nishanebaazi ho ya har mushkil ko suljhana ho yeh sab hamein aapke taraf khich raha tha. Hum puri duniya se kehte the ke DIL nahin hain hamare paas par pata nahin kyun aapko dekh kar hamara yeh daava jootha par jaata tha"

"Aapko pata hain jab hamein aapka woh khat mila uss din hamari khushi ka thikana nahin tha. Hamein laga ke aakhir woh din aahi gaya jab aap hamari hojayengi...humse pyaar karne lage gi naaki ghrina...Lekin jab aapne hamein thukraaya apne kareeb aane nahin diya hum bardaash nahin kar paye...woh hamari ghuroor par bahut badi chot thi...woh shehenshah jiski ek jhalak ke liye saari Begume tarasthi thi use aapne dhakka diya. Uss din se hamari yahi koshish rahi ki jitni bezati, jitni takleef hamein hui utni hi aapko ho aur uska zariya hamein Benazir mein mila"

" Humne dekha ki aapko hamari aur Benazir ki nazdeekiya pasand nahin tha isliye humne har baar aapke saamne Benazir ko ahmiyat diya aapko uske saamne nicha dikhana chahte the aapko batana chahte the ki aapki hamare zindagi mein koi ahmiyat nahin hain. Lekin yakeen maniye Jodha Begum yeh sab karke bhi hamein sukoon nahin mil raha tha...aapko nicha dikhake bhi hamein khushi nahin milthi thi.Haalat kuch aise bane ki hamein Benazir se nikaah ke liye haa kehna pada, aapne hamein kitni baar rokne ki koshish kiya par hamari zid ke aage humne aapki baat nahin suni"

"Kal nikah ke samay bhi hamein har taraf aaphi dikhayide rahi thi"

Jalal wipes his tears & presses her hand & says -
" Itna kuch ho jane ke baad, itni bezati,nafrat sehne ki bawazoot aapne ek baar bhi apne baare mein nahin socha aur hamein bachane ke liye haste haste woh zeher pi gayi.Uss insaan ke liye jisne aapko hamesha nicha dikhaya, aapki parwa nahin kiya sirf aapko harana chahtha tha. Aap hamare liye apni jaan par khel gayi. Humne kal hi aapse kaha tha ki hum aapka chehera tak nahin dekhna chahte par sach toh yeh hain ki aapko dekhe bagair hamein chain nahin milta
Jodha Begum. Aaj hamein maloom hua aapki kya jagah hain hamari zindagi mein. Jo Jalaal aaj tak kisi insaan ke saamne nahin jhuka hain woh aaj aapke saamne aapki achayi ke saamne jhukta hain...apni haar qubool karta hain Jodha Begum"

"Aapko jo saza deni hain hume dijiye lekin hamein chodkar mat jayiye hum itni badi saza nahi jhel payenge"

Jalal continues to sit holding her hand when he feels slow movement of her hand. Jalal gets excited - "Aapne hamari baat sunli Jodha Begum. Hamein maloom tha aap hamein itni badi saza nahin denge"

Jodha opens her eyes with great difficulty and is immediately relieved to see him safe & smiles.
Jalal thanks Kanha & Allah for hearing his prayers.
Jodha - Shehenshah

Jalal just stares at her & Jodha reads right through his thoughts and understands how he is regretting for his mistakes.
Jalal lowers his eyes unable to look at her.
Jodha reaches out & holds his hand & he looks up to her.
Jalal could see from her face that she had forgiven him and again she left him speechless.



Edited by mesmeric893 - 11 years ago
SUMESHNI thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Amazing update
Plz continue soon
Plz pm me
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Suppperb update... Loved it a lot.
Prefect portrayal of Jalal's feelings... Pure truth it was... Finally,Jodha is awake and is relieved to see him safe... Lovely OS... If possible,do continue sooonish... Thanks for the pm... :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Superb! Love you for such an amazing piece of writing. 😛
Do continue.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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RES... I WILL UPDATE SOON
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Posted: 11 years ago
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SPEECHLESS !!!!!!!! 👏👏👏👏👏 ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

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