AkDha OS: ~You Won~ (Based on promo)

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Hey Guys! As I am new to this forum & IF as well. I don't know much about One shots but after watching the new promo, I got some views regarding it so I thought to write an OS. Please feel free to correct me if I am wrong & I am ready for both appreciation & criticism. Okay! I am going to write in English, Urdu & Hindi, all the dialogues will be in urdu & hindi & I will mention the meanings of hard words. 😊



OS: ~YOU WON~

The night was more dark & scary like it was never before. Everything was quite & calm but seems like this was the calm before the storm. Jalal in his room was all thinking about Jodha, he got flashback of his first meeting with Jodha & the sword scene in Amer, the court scene & all the insult of him by Jodha.
Jalal: Unki itni juraat (courage), humare Shahenshah-e-Hindustan, hamari Saltanat (empire) ko neeche dekhane ki koshish ki? Hai kon woh, ek choti si riyasat (State) ki mamuli si rajkumari. (after saying this he drinks more & more)

On the other hand Jodha in her room was lying on her bed, trying to sleep but she can't. She thought what if Jalal comes in her room? But then she remembers Ruqaiya's words & took a sigh of relief.
Jodha: Lagta he hum bekaar me chinta (worry) karahe hen. Aaj ki raat koi khatra nhi he. She got flashback what her mother said to her to full fill every duty of Aadarsh (dutiful) wife & don't let your parents & yourself down.
Jodha: Maasa humein apki kahi hui har ek baat yaad he or hum apse waada karte hen hum apna dharm (duty) nibhaenge, par sirf dharm. Unke liye hamare dil ne naa o kabhi pyar hosakta he na hi hamdardi or na hi kuch or! Agar yehi hamari kismat (Destiny) hai to yehi sahi.

Jalal with his aggressive look, stand & walk towards Jodha's room with glass of wine in his hand. Finally he reaches there, open the curtains & entered in the room. He threw the glass of wine so harshly that its echo was unbearable. Jodha looked back all in shock, she was hesitated & puts on her ghungat. Jalal in anger moving towards her & she was moving back with alot of hesitation, she could not bear him for a while. Jalal holds her hand with his tight grip, she was feeling the pain. The look of pain was clearly visible on her face but she was trying to hide & was trying to free her hand but his grip was so tight that she can't do anything except waiting him to free. A wild evil smirk cover his face, seeing that fear in her eyes. He freed her hand come closer & remove the ghungat & said:
Jalal: Aap janti hain, aap hamari jeet ka tohfa hain. Aapke badle mein humne apke walid (father) ko Amer dia he.
Jodha is unknown what is going to happen with her. All in shock she was just listening to him & wondering what he is upto do with her. He holds her hand & push her tight against the wall blocking her way. He gets close to her holding her hand against the wall, breaking her bangles, he did'nt realized stream of blood was flowing from her wrist. She can't bear that pain but she has to. Jalal put his finger up to move her hair behind her ear but she moved with all anger.

Jalal: Shauhar (husband) hai hum tumhare, haq hai hamara tumpe or hum tumhare sath kuch bhi karsakte hen, kuch bhi. (with evil smirk on his face & Jodha's eyes full of fear)

TO BE CONTINUED!
Please leave your comments & let me know your views, so I'll continue 😊
Edited by anayakhan10 - 11 years ago

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Welcome to the forum n do continue 😳 Awesome
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Lovely. Please continue. ❤️
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amazing...please continue soon 😳
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Welcome to da forum. Lovely os.do Continue
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its amazing do continue...i think im in love with the haq wali line...
and i was reading this while listening to ishq hain woh ehsaas...


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awesome yaar..cntinue and pm me plz
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Welcome to the forum.
Awesome.
Cont soon
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dat was ausummm...hey write soon...

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Thankyou so much guys for giving positive feedback & glad that you all appreciated my work.
I will post next part by tonight or tomorrow & will pm you guys! Do read & comment. 😊

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