Sensations- part 10 PG 10 updtd 31 december - Page 5

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Posted: 7 years ago
#41
Nish I just read this story in one go
First of all Great that this couple now have a story of their own ...
Secondly you are writing very well .., I am not a regular viewers of the show but have watched it enough to know you have been true to the characters
Very well defined characters and events
I liked part 4 the best
Awesome and I hope to read more
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Posted: 7 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: tibs09

Nish I just read this story in one go
First of all Great that this couple now have a story of their own ...
Secondly you are writing very well .., I am not a regular viewers of the show but have watched it enough to know you have been true to the characters
Very well defined characters and events
I liked part 4 the best
Awesome and I hope to read more


Glad to read such a detailed description😆
" you've been very true to characters" - I don't know if you will repeat those words after next part😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
#43
Part 6
Adhi paced in his room worried.
Wasn't Sharad's idea awfully straight forward!?
" Aapne bulaya!"
As her voice struck his ear drums, he looked up and swallowed the lump in his throat.
" Ha...vo kuch kaam tha"
" Kahiye".
" Ha..voh..." Adhi stammered and paced around the room and closed the door.
Her nerves were on edge.
Two days since the Big fat Realization.
Two days of sleeplessness nights and endless dreaming.
And here he was shutting the door!! Devi shrieked internally.
Her mind was on overdrive.
How would it feel like to be held in those strong biceps!
He cleared his throat to catch her attention.
She looked up at him, worried.
He was awfully nervous.
What did he want her to do!!!
Adhi took in a deep breath and opened his arms wide.
Devi looked at him confused.
"Come here", he signalled.
Devi continued to look at him.
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Come here.
Where!!
She looked at his widespread arms.
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" There!!!!!!!!!!!!" She shouted finally processing the meaning of his words.

And Adhi shook his head in disbelief closing his eyes.
He saw it coming. She was going to insult him.
" I was right... You like me so much that you look for ways to touch me", she smirked.
" But sorry! I am not bound to obey you and I don't feel like obeying you", she announced.
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However Suddenly his entire system rattled with continuous waves of currents.
And he felt the warmth seeping into his heart.
He opened his eyes and looked down.
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She was there.
In his arms.
Hugging him.
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He went limp in her embrace.
" Do you want to hug her?"
Sharad's words echoed in his brain and he looked down.
Eyes closed.
Ears on his heart.
Hands around his waist.
Plastered close to him.

Devi was shocked at his demand.
She wanted to deny but she badly wanted to accept.
It could've been his way to humiliate her.
But who cared.
She was in love.
Her First Love.
And she was going to Live every moment of it.
And thus she gathered her courage and stepped towards him.
Into his arms.
It was a bliss. The rhythmic beating of his heart, the feel of his tensed muscles.
His warmth was...
Suddenly she found herself pressed deeply into him, engulfed by his warmth completely.
She could feel his strong arms around her, his breath on her neck
It gave her goosebumps.
He was hugging her.
He hadn't insulted her.
And thus she closed her eyes and snuggled closer.

Adhi wanted this hug to go on forever.
He didn't want to pull away.
He wanted her even more close where he could feel her.
And thus he pulled her even more closer.
They basked in each other's warmth unaware of two pair of eyes that were keeping a watch on them.
They separated after full 10 minutes.
He looked at her.
She had lowered her eyes.
He felt a bit brave realizing that Devi mocking him for seeking proximity with her was just a stupid dream of his and that she had allowed him to come close.
She looked quite cute blushing like that!
He wanted to kiss her.
On cheek of course.
He lowered his head sideways towards her cheek when she turned her head up suddenly.
And their lips stopped mm apart.
Both jumped back.
Shocked at the turn of events.
Both waited with abated breath for the other to speak but thick silence hung in the air.
" Do you like me?" She asked out of the blue.

How was it??😆



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Posted: 7 years ago
#44
Nish, loved your take on RajVi's dynamics.. Its indeed unique and fresh..
Where we usually see male protagonists who are egotists and do nothing about their attraction.. just keep fighting it and insulting the female.. here adiraj has made a nice move.. he put his pride on his line when he opened his arms out for an embrace..
And the best was Devi's response.. you again avoided the cliched response which you cleverly incorporated as a hallucination of Adiraj.. 👏

What next is the question.. barriers are breaking down slowly and am loving it 😊
Edited by Santiago24 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#46

reserved the spot to comment, baba.. i will comment in detail later.. wanted to be the first to comment 😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Santiago24


reserved the spot to comment, baba.. i will comment in detail later.. wanted to be the first to comment 😆

😲
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Posted: 7 years ago
#48
Oh nooo...bas ittu sa yi tha. ..😭abhi abhi mein RajVi dreamland mein thi bas story katam hogayi. ..😭 it's an awesome update dear ...loved it...thank u so much. ...plz update soon and make it lengthy plzzz. ..
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Posted: 7 years ago
#49

Originally posted by: vinlora

Oh nooo...bas ittu sa yi tha. ..😭abhi abhi mein RajVi dreamland mein thi bas story katam hogayi. ..😭 it's an awesome update dear ...loved it...thank u so much. ...plz update soon and make it lengthy plzzz. ..


Ill work on that😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
#50

Originally posted by: Santiago24

Nish, loved your take on RajVi's dynamics.. Its indeed unique and fresh..

Where we usually see male protagonists who are egotists and do nothing about their attraction.. just keep fighting it and insulting the female.. here adiraj has made a nice move.. he put his pride on his line when he opened his arms out for an embrace..
And the best was Devi's response.. you again avoided the cliched response which you cleverly incorporated as a hallucination of Adiraj.. 👏

What next is the question.. barriers are breaking down slowly and am loving it 😊


It makes me extremely glad to read such a detailed response😛
Afterall who don't love to be praised😆
Attitude & all are most welcome to the serial😉, but I like the ISHQ wala cute Love😳

Bdw ur res and unres were😕
😆

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