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Posted: 10 years ago
#11
Hey Pavan, got to read your story now.
I liked it a lot. Very much like the first one. To the point and honest. A straightforward visualisation of how Nachiket could have approached the issue.

I enjoyed it immensely. Please do keep on writing more. 😃 Will be waiting.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Part 2:

Next Morning

Dimpy comes to Neils room and informs him that she is very happy that the misunderstandings between Neira is cleared,
she says sorry for giving him the wrong information as far as Raginis marriage status is concerned without checking the facts
properly and somewhere down the line she feels responsible for this whole mess of Roka and Engagement as she know very well
that he proposed to Nivedita only because he thought that Ragini moved on in her life.she also informs him that its actually
Nivedita who invited Suhaani to India without consulting him or Pam,she also tells him that Pam knew this about Suhaani when
Nishis Phere was going on and she didnt cared to inform him about Suhaani.She tells him that she dont want him to get married
to nivedita,Neil is shocked.

Neil goes to Ranbirs room :

Tumhare bhai aur behen is waqt tumhaari maa Ragini ki ghar mein hai aur wo kuch din wahi rahenge.kyuki wo dono apni maa ki saath
waqt bitana chahte hai.Tum waha jao ya na jao,marzi tumhari hai.main tumhe kisi baat ki liye force nahin karunga.kyuki aaj tak
maine baccho per koi bhi apna nirnay nahin thopa hai.Lekin lekin mere ek baat dhyaan se suno tum,Aaj ki baad kabhi mujhe
pata chala ki tumne apni maa ki saath koi battameeze ki ya fir uska apmaan kiya to yaad rakhna ranbir,mujhse bura koi
nahin hoga.Aaj ki baat is ghar se koi bhi ragini ki ghar jaaker uski insult karega to main bardaash nahin karunga.

saying that he leaves.

Inside his cabin at hospital :

Nivedita itni bhi seedhi aurat nahin hai,jitna main samajh raha tha,usne Suhaani ko India kyu bulaya aur yeh sab kuch jaanker bhi
Pam ne mujhse itni badi baat kyun chupayi?Roka se pehle Pam ne aagam ko kyun kamre mein lock kar diya?Main jaanta hu ki Pam Ragini ko pasand nahin karti,lekin Suhaani aur aagam to uske bhi bacche hai,usne unhe pala hai aur wo dono use mom keh kar bulate
hai,phir ek maa apne bacho ki saath aise kaise kar sakti hai?Yeh sab sunkar mujhe yakeen nahin ho raha hai.Maine hamesha
Pam per aankh mood kar vishvaas kiya.

Kisi ko dosh dene se kya faida?sach to yeh hai ki sab meri galathi hai.Lekin ab main apni sari galtiyo ko sudharunga.

Nachiket calls Aagam and tells him to inform his mom to meet him at the same place where they met yesterday at 5pm

Next scene:

Ragini,yeh tumhara badappan hai ki tumne sara dosh apne per le liya,kyuki sach to yeh hai ki main kahi na kahi tumse jyada
zimmedar hu,hamare divorce ki liye.Mana ki tumne mujhpe shak kiya,per maine kabhi yeh koshish nahin ki usse clear karne ki,
us waqt maine tumhe aur hamare baccho se jyada apni dosti koimportance diya per us waqt mujhe iska ehsaas nahin hua
ki maine kya galathi ki.

Hamare divorce ki baad jab main US chala gaya,tab mujhe yeh ehsaas hua ki main kitna gair zimmedar pati tha.Main tumhara doshi
hu.maine tumse beintihaa pyaar kiya aur hamari shaadi ki waqt 7 vachan bhi pade,per main unne poora nahin kar paya,us din se main apne aap ko kabhi maaf nahin kar paya hu.Sach to yeh hai ki maine tumhe zindagi ki beech raaste mein chod diya.Maine zindagi bhar
tumhe khushiya dene ka wada kiya tha ,lekin tumhe hamesha mujhse gham hi mile.15 saalo se tum bachoo ki maa,baap banker
unki parvarish ki,tumhare uper to nani aur maa ki bhi zimmedari thi.maine tumhe in 15 saalo mein gam ki alava kuch bhi nahin diya.
Tumne bahut dukh jhele hai in 15 saalo mein aur inka zimmedar sirf main hu.Main tumhara beeta hua kal nahin lauta sakta lekin
aaj tumse vada karta hu ki is baar main apni poori zimmedari nibhaunga.Tumhare daman mein wo saari khushiya bharunga jiski tum
haqdaar ho.ab main kisi ko bhi meri zindagi ki faisle nahin lene doonga.meri zindagi ki faisle ab main hi loonga.mujhe is waqt
bus itna pata hai ki ab meri wajah se kabhi tumhari aankon mein aasoon nahin aayenge.ho sake to in 15 saalo mein jaane anjaane meri wajah se tumhe jo takleef pahuchi hai uski liye apne Nachiket ko maaf kar dena.Main yeh bhi jaanta hu ki ek maafi kafi nahin
hai wo sare dukh,dard,takleef ki per main yeh bhi jaanta hu ki meri Ragini mujhe ek mauka zaroor degi.

saying this,they both hug each other.

ab main tumse Nivedita ki saath engagement tod kar aane ki baad hi milunga.Tum apne Nachiket ka intezaar karna.





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Posted: 10 years ago
#13
Nice update Pavan.
Great to see Nachiket being proactive in taking situations in his hand. And trying to solve them.

Next we await his breaking off the engagement with Champakali.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#14
Well written Pavan!
Really refreshing to see an intelligent Nachiket ;)
Keep writing :D
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Posted: 10 years ago
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And how did I miss this! Very good Pavan. Both the parts were just amazing. Especially loved the dialogues written by you. And I love this Nachiket! Kudos! Thank you:)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#16
OMG ! THANK U ! THANK U ! THANK U ! PAVAN... u r a life saver 🤗
I so luv dis update and Intelligent Nachiket 😳 felt like dancing while reading his convo wid Ragini

Much awaited apology ... thanks for giving our Nachiket some sensible dialogues... Beautiful 👏

I so want EKTA n NB to read and learn dat dis cud have been much better rather THE BEST continuation of d serial after Revelations... I so hate d senseless horrible version dey show on screen 😡

Only PK and RR are the saving grace dat I still follow it 😳

THUMBS UP MAN 👍🏼 Kudos
Edited by NeiRaFreak - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#17
Updating Next Part in few hours.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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part 3

Neil reaches to Raginis house to meet his kids

Aagam aur Suhaani,jaise ho tum dono?

We are fine dad and really enjoying our stay here with mom,thanks a lot.

Aise mat kaho,main jaanta hu ki bachpan se tumdono apni maa ki pyaar ki liye taraste rahe,sach to yeh hai ki sirf maa ka hi nahin balki mere pyaar ki liye bhi,
maine hamesha yehi samjha ki main ek pita ka farz nibha raha hu tumlogo ki zaroorate poori karke jo paisoo se kharedda jata hai,Mujhe laga ki tumlog khush ho,main kabhi yehsamajh nahin paaya ki tum logo ko un zaroorato ki saath saath apne pita ki pyaar ki bhi zaroorat hai.Sach to yeh hai ki Ragini se alag hone ki baad maine poori duniya se apna naata tod liya aur main darta tha kisi se bhi emotinally attach hone se,per meri soach bahut galath thi.Mujhe iska ehsaas tab hua jab main Nishi ki shaadi mein aaya aur sach to yeh hai ki mujhe ehsaas hua ki maine kitni nainsaafi ki apne baccho ki saath.Yeh to tum dono ki achhai hai ki kabhi bhi tum dono ne mujhse koi shikayat nahin ki.Lekin bas,ab nahin.ab main apni saari galatoyo ko sudhaarunga.Ab main pita ka her wo farz nibhaunga,aur jis pyaar se tum dono itne saal vanchit rahe,tumhe doonga.

Aaj mere aur Ragini ki beech ki saari misunderstandings clear hui hai to uska sara shrey tum dono ka hai.Mujhe ehsaas ho chuka hai ki tum dono kya chahte ho.ab main wohi karunga jis mein tum dono ki khushi ho.Main ghar jaa raha hu,apni engagement Nivedita ki saat todne ki liye.Min wapas aaunga good news ki saath.apna khayal rakhna.I love you both.

Hearing this,both come running towards him and hug him.All three are very emotional at this moment.
Ragini who was inside Nishis room heard the whole conversation and she has tears in her eyes too.


Neil reaches to karans house.Karan,Dimpy,RK,Pam,FL 2 were sitting and discussing about the engagement ceremony which is shedule to happen day after tomorrow.


Mujhe tum sab se ek saath baat karni hai,let me start with Nivedita.

Tumnne kisse poochkar,Meri beti Suhaani ko India bulaya tha?Kisne tumhe yeh haq diya?Tumne mujhse ya Pam se poochna zaroori nahin samjha?Agar us din
us kidnaper ki wajah se Suhaani ko kuch bhi ho jata,to uska zimmedar kaun hota?Tum Suhaani ka photo lekar Ragini ki table pe rakhne ki peeche tumhara kya motive tha?Wo to acha hua ki wo photo RK ki haat lag gaya aur usne mujhe de diya,phir mainne cctv cameras se pata lagay ki wo tum thi,jisne yeh harkat ki hai.In sabhi harkato se tum kya haasil karna chahti thi?

Aur tum Pam,mujhe itna gussa Nivedita per nahin aa raha hai jitna tumpe aa raha hai.apani poori zindagi mein maine kisi pe sabse jyada bharosa kiya hai to wo tum ho.Maine khud se bhi jyada tum pe yakeen kiya.Lekin aaj mujhe aisa lag raha hi ki shayad main tumhe jaanta hi nahin hu,tum kya ho main samajh nahin paaya hu.

Tum jaanti thi ki Nivedita ne Suhaani ko India bulaya tha,phir bhi tumne mujhe itni badi baat batana zaroori nahin samjha.Main jaanta hu ki Nishi ki phero ki waqt hi tumhe yeh baat pata tha.2 dino tak main Suhaani ko lekar itna tensed tha per tum tab bhi chup rahi.Main yeh bhi jaanta hu ki tumhe Nishi ki sangeet ki waqt ki pata chal gaya tha ki Ragini aur Dr.aman ki shaadi nahin hui aur isiliye tumne mere Engagement ki announcement kar di.Jab tumhe yeh pata chala ki SUHAANI ragni ki ghar pe hai,wo baat bhi tum ne mujhse chupayi.Yakeen nahin hota ki tumne Aaagm ko kamre mein band kar diya,taki mera aur Nivedita ka roka ho jaye.

Main samajh sakta hu ki tum Ragini se nafrat karti ho,lekin Suhaani aur Aagam to tumhare apne bacche hai,Wo dono tumhare izzat karte hai aur tumhe apni maa samjahte hai aur tumne inke saat yeh kiya.tumhari nafrat Ragini se hai,bachho se nahin.Tum apne khud ki baccho se aise kaise kar payi?

Tum dono ne milkar mujhe bahut dukh pahuchaya hai.Tum dono jaante the ki Shilpa ka accident Ranbir ne kiya hai,phir bhi sach chupaya mujhse aur maine Ragini ko galtah samjha,kyuki mujhe laga ki tum mujhse jhoot nahin bol sakte Pam.Wajah jo kuch bhi ho,per jo kuch bhi hua sab galath hua.Chahe wo,Ranbir ka incident ho,ya Suhaani ka.

Lekin in sab mein sabse badi galati meri hai.Aaj tak jo bhi galatiyaa mujhse hui,un sabko main ab sudharunga.Main yeh engagement tod raha hu,isliye nahin ki meri aur ragini ki MUs clear ho gayi hai,balki isliye ki main samjh gaya hu ki mere bache kya chahte hai.Maine aaj tak unki liye kuch bhi nahin kiya per ab karunga.

Main nahin jaanta ki main aur Ragini phir se ek ho paayenge ya nahin.In 15 saalo mein hum dono ek dossre se bahut door jaa chuke hai.Hamare beech ki Mus clear ho chuki hai lekein mujhe uski paas phuchne ki liye kai kadam badane honge aur main aaj se hi uski shuruat karunga.Pehla kadam main badaunga APNI Ragini ki ore.Main aur Ragini phir se ek ho ya na ho,lekin main kisi aur se rishta nahin jod sakta.Aaj ki baad Nachiket Khanna jiyega apne baccho ki liye,unki khushi ki liye.

Aur yehi mera aakhri faisla hai.Mujhe iske bare mein na koi baat aur karni hai aur na hi mujhe tum dono se koi safai chahiye.

Aaj se Dr.Neil khatam ho gaya hi aur phir se Nachiket khaanna zinda ho gaya hai jo jiyega apne baccho aur apni ragini ki liye.


THE END.

I know its a bit Filmy but i just want to annouce the arrival of Nachiket Khanna for his Apne

Hope you all liked it anf if not,feel free to express so that i can try and improve next time.

Thanks for reading.

Edited by goldstar678 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This Mr. Khanna is so Intelligent Pavan... where did U find him??😉

PLEASE write more n write soon 😳
Edited by NeiRaFreak - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hmmm ... nice update
Edited by Vidya_Bng - 10 years ago

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