A Summer's Day l ArHi Drabble

Posted: 8 years ago
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Viridescent hues surrounded her. Myriad shades of emerald as far as the eye could see. Vast carpets of grass calling out to be tread on. Rustling leaves whispering invitingly to come peek behind to catch a glimpse of the whites and pinks of the cherry blossom they cloaked.


Dappled sunlight played hide n seek through the canopy of winter's once gnarled branches now preening in their new foliage. A gentle breeze wafted by intermittently, lazily, teasing her dupatta to billow out, before rushing back to her. Whipping up errant strands of her hair, cloaking the world from her hazel eyes. Tresses which rejoiced in the freedom of being away from the one who never failed to overpower them, determinedly tucking them back.


She made her way to her favourite oak tree heedless of all the beckoning beauty of the others along the way. Loyal to a fault, as always. Uncaring of the dust she sank down against its inviting trunk. Wishing it would fold her in its arms and let her sleep. For evermore.


Unwillingly, high pitched shrieks and giggles made their way to her. Deeper remonstrating voices accompanying them. Tinged with indulgence. The sounds of tiny feet rushing, the thuds of bouncing balls, the thwack of willow, the accompanying gleeful screams, all swirled around her.


Yet, inside of her, an oppressive silence reigned. All consuming. Drowning. Leaving her a mere shadow of the chirpy, vibrant person who had personified her name. Aeons back.


She stared, hypnotised, at a woodpecker relentlessly going about its business. Drumming rhythmically. Unceasingly. Its goal the insects lying hidden in the silver birch. Food for its young ones. Its babies.


Babies.


My baby.


Why my baby, Devi Maiya?


~ Ruchi


Note:

I wrote this based on a prompt given on a Leisure Writing thread created by the talented Annikaa. Do have a read of the many other lovely One Shots there.The words to be incorporated were Tree, Silence and Hypnotise. So, this is what came to mind. As ever, ArHi are never far!

Link to the Leisure Writing Thread: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/4837082

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Expect the unexpected is the takeaway from this magnificent piece... In just a few words, you have made the reader feel an array of emotions, visual painting it in front of us. I walked alongside her on a summer day with the sun beckoning to only stop to find the lingering cloud above. Following her on the journey of life. Beautiful, beautiful beautiful... can I be selfish and ask for more?
Love you hamesha,
Jigs ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Very beautiful piece Ruchi
You made us feel Khushi's pain for her loss (I guess she lost the baby) through this drabble. Loved the way you described the nature.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Less is more...
And you have proven it time and again.
This was brilliant Ruchi...Gosh!
In a mere few words, you said it all, you conveyed it all, and you made me feel too many things which a thousands words would fail to...just in mere few words...

Why don't you write more??


Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: sudhareddy

Very beautiful piece Ruchi

You made us feel Khushi's pain for her loss (I guess she lost the baby) through this drabble. Loved the way you described the nature.


Thank you Sudha :)

Yes, she did ...
Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: -MIMOSA-

Less is more...

And you have proven it time and again.
This was brilliant Ruchi...Gosh!
In a mere few words, you said it all, you conveyed it all, and you made me feel too many things which a thousands words would fail to...just in mere few words...

Why don't you write more??



Thank you so much for never failing to encourage me <3

@bold: Kyunki, Less is more ;)


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Khushi lost her chirpiness along with her baby...beautiful piece written in a subtle and simple fashion...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Your words have painted a picture so iridescent and vivid that I feel bereft at not being able to walk into the scene and finding out the story behind the picture. To think that you strung this together with random words is so wonderful. Dare I hope there is a continuation?
~Sandya
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome ruchi 👏
Another brilliant piece of writing from you..
Though it is very short, it was crisp and made me feel all the emotions kushi is going through...
Beautiful 👍🏼
Posted: 8 years ago
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Thank you!


Thank you!


Thank you!


Thank you!


Thank you!


Originally posted by: Janu75

Khushi lost her chirpiness along with her baby...beautiful piece written in a subtle and simple fashion...


Thank you so much for your kind words!

Originally posted by: pravallika

Awesome ruchi 👏

Another brilliant piece of writing from you..
Though it is very short, it was crisp and made me feel all the emotions kushi is going through...
Beautiful 👍🏼


Thank you! You are always too kind 😳

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