arshi ff: without you... #2, chapters 14 - 27 **completed**

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janu

@Janu75

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Posted: 11 years ago

#311

Thanks for pm.

Its nice to read ASR puling khushi's leg without anyone else noticing.A flustered khushi is always a treat to watch and you depicted the dining scene to utmost perfection.

And a jealous khushi 😉

They are on honeymoon aha! rubbing hands in glee.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#312

Originally posted by: sskaug25
Wow a beautiful update. loved it. Loved the runway problem. Loved how they runaway from the family for a week. Thank you for the pm. It was a wonderful update. waiting for next one.

thanks so much, sskaug,

i am glad you really enjoyed it. 😳

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#313

Originally posted by: rati123
Simply loved this update with the naughty ASR who does not leave any opportunity at riling up Khushi.

thanks for the update.

hi rati,

thank you for reading and enjoying yourself. asr was in quite a mood this chapter. 😆

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#314

Originally posted by: libranangel
I hit the like button even before I read it coz I knew there was possibly no way I wouldn't.
Yes you made us wait! but yes! this was worth it

and thank you very much for your kind words...like the characters that they life and make you write in a particular way...so also this story took root in my heart and mind and made me make this!

glad you liked it!!! :)

haww, and what if it were a real wimp of an update. 😆 thanks so much, libranangel. glad the wait was not a complete waste.

that line in pink has me sort of thrilled. thanks you so much.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#315

Originally posted by: janu6669
Thanks for pm.

Its nice to read ASR puling khushi's leg without anyone else noticing.A flustered khushi is always a treat to watch and you depicted the dining scene to utmost perfection.

And a jealous khushi 😉
They are on honeymoon aha! rubbing hands in glee.

hi janu,

glad to note your glee 😆.

honeymoon. feels good to think about that.

thansk so much for reading and your comment.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#316

Originally posted by: rulama
Interesting!

hi rulama,

thanks. 😳

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Atyay

@Atyay

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Posted: 11 years ago

#317

Nice update! 😊

thank you for the PM.

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DurgaS

@DurgaS

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Posted: 11 years ago

#318

Beautiful edit at the top. Nice naughty chapter.

So Nancy was the doctor's wife. A lonely man whose wife was worried about him if she left. That tells me hers wasn't a sudden death. Must have been an illness which she suffered in for many years before passing away. A painful tale for Dr. Verma.

Loved the thought process of Payal, taking us back to those initial chapters. She must be ever so grateful to the doctor for bringing back her little sister's life, which was Arnavji. Loved her concern for Di too. And Mami being herself inquiring into the family details of the doctor.

So, Khushi heard the beauty and the beast story from her Babuji. Interesting. Didn't get the part about babuji loving the dal? Is Payal thinking about her father or Akash's father? Little confused.

Liked the whole running away story. The scene at the fashion show with the model, I was thinking about something similar for my next OS. Will see if I can alter that. If not, then I will let you know. 😊

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#319

Originally posted by: Atyay

Nice update! 😊

thank you for the PM.

hi atyay,

thanks for reading. happy to pm. i try and pm all who had read the previous chapter. 😳

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#320

Originally posted by: DurgaS
Beautiful edit at the top. Nice naughty chapter.

So Nancy was the doctor's wife. A lonely man whose wife was worried about him if she left. That tells me hers wasn't a sudden death. Must have been an illness which she suffered in for many years before passing away. A painful tale for Dr. Verma.

Loved the thought process of Payal, taking us back to those initial chapters. She must be ever so grateful to the doctor for bringing back her little sister's life, which was Arnavji. Loved her concern for Di too. And Mami being herself inquiring into the family details of the doctor.

So, Khushi heard the beauty and the beast story from her Babuji. Interesting. Didn't get the part about babuji loving the dal? Is Payal thinking about her father or Akash's father? Little confused.

Liked the whole running away story. The scene at the fashion show with the model, I was thinking about something similar for my next OS. Will see if I can alter that. If not, then I will let you know. 😊

hi durga,

i know, such a lovely edit by libranangel 😳.

please do not change your story. given the basic framework of hour characters there's bound to be overlap in our tales, just write yours the way you saw it.

thanks for liking the details of the chapter. doctor verma is a guy with his own past. in reality, is tehre anyone without a moving tale of one sort or the other? i used to think as a kid that some things happen only in stories, but no they happen to us then make it to narratives. all stories ever told are like a collective biography of the humans.

if i take the basic broad chapters of my life itself, we could write a solid tv soap he he.

that was babu ji who loves that u.p. wali urad dal with lots of ghee in it (my friend would say that her father said, this dal should be made more runny only with ghee, not water, coincidentally uncle is a doctor 😳). payal is thinking of her father, how much he loves that, perhaps missing him a bit and plying the guest she is very grateful to with more of it... just one of those things.

writing fiction is supremely challenging, especially if you haven't done it before and on the days that your imagination refuses to move, uff. but there is a thrill to it i must say, especially if something falls into place. these days me in a very dry spell... had to push myself like a maniac top get this chapter out.

thanks for liking it and feeling things.