arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#181

^^^ rashmi,

you are not only an addict, you are a sweet one. please keep saying such things so that it goes straight to my head 🤗. hope you did have fun though... and really, season two, i don't mind some usual serial drama given to us the ipk way, unusual and serious dhak dhak causing.

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.Brooke.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#182

Nice update indi di.

Action part was very interesting.

So he slipped into coma.

Looking forward for the next part.

Thanks for the pm.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#183

hi lizzie,

thanks for reading and enjoying... yes... he's been hit by a bus, he is struggling to get back but sometimes you just can't. hope to update soon... the story is pestering me... he is really restless, i tell you. 😆

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Sharmila

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Posted: 12 years ago

#184

Indi 🤗 absolutely wonderful chapter...loved it 😃...I remember telling you that you can be a great writer ...and you have done it 👍🏼

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#185

^^^ sharmila,

thank you, i love it when a reader really enjoys. can't tell you how scary it is to write fiction. how do these guys do it. you are too wonderful to say what you do. i am grateful, thrilled to be called a writer... maybe some day... who knows, at fifty two anything is possible... what say.

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RebeccaDaphne

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Posted: 12 years ago

#186

Absolutely loved this chapter...so poor Arnavs in a coma, but she can hear him!

Nice to see Nani's love and care for him, I wanted to see this side more in the serial but they never really explored it, so it's so nice to read it!

Beautiful description of their meeting, him rescuing her and his authority and assertiveness with a feeling of protectiveness over her, plus the way he is angry but softly caring towards her is so ASR, I felt I was watching it as I read it. Please update soon, am really enjoying this story, especially the flashbacks, loved the way he said "tum" when they bumped into each other...very ASR! 👏

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supriya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#187

Indi 😲 why would you send him into a Coma 😭...its painful to already see Khushi nd now this...its hurtful 😭

the maturity in your writin is Amazing ⭐️❤️ i love how you hav phrased every sentence ❤️

Khushi bein a strength to her family...nd especially Nani...really touchin...especially the way Nani says " he is a refeclection me" - loved tht bit 😊

"all she heard was, "shut up, khushi," and a stubble brushed against her cheek." - i feel bad!!!!

comin to the past...

aw you started it of wher you stopped last time 🤗 thanks 😃
m glad i was hopin he comes to knw wat those nasty ppl were upto...but i din knw tht they would catch her again...its good tht he saved his damsel from their clutches 👏👏

"her eyes were dark and scared, water droplets on her lashes, sunlight glancing off them. he felt anger heat his ears. how could she." - ⭐️

the feelin of this line says it all...he feels so protective nd possessive towards her 😳

the temple scene was the best...he just showed up of the blue...nd disappeared like a cloud driven by the wind ⭐️👏 her need to justify right up then nd thr at his accusation...very nice...she couldn let him think of her tht way!!!!

wanting more...hope you update in the weekend 😳

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#188

Originally posted by: RebeccaDaphne
Absolutely loved this chapter...so poor Arnavs in a coma, but she can hear him!
Nice to see Nani's love and care for him, I wanted to see this side more in the serial but they never really explored it, so it's so nice to read it!
Beautiful description of their meeting, him rescuing her and his authority and assertiveness with a feeling of protectiveness over her, plus the way he is angry but softly caring towards her is so ASR, I felt I was watching it as I read it. Please update soon, am really enjoying this story, especially the flashbacks, loved the way he said "tum" when they bumped into each other...very ASR! 👏

rebecca, 🤗,

thank you so much. you make me feel so good. yeah i am trying to not lose him or her in the middle iof my flight of fancy... awww he is so asr, isn't he. and really i always feel nani loves him madly, just that anjali needs so much caring for... how gentle and loving and maternal nani was in that "tum mama hone wale ho" scene... you are right, there should have a been a bit more of this, especially during kidnap. i will update soon, i feel like knowing more too. 😳 loved your note.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#189

Originally posted by: supriya.arshi
Indi 😲 why would you send him into a Coma 😭...its painful to already see Khushi nd now this...its hurtful 😭

the maturity in your writin is Amazing ⭐️❤️ i love how you hav phrased every sentence ❤️

Khushi bein a strength to her family...nd especially Nani...really touchin...especially the way Nani says " he is a refeclection me" - loved tht bit 😊

"all she heard was, "shut up, khushi," and a stubble brushed against her cheek." - i feel bad!!!!
comin to the past...
aw you started it of wher you stopped last time 🤗 thanks 😃
m glad i was hopin he comes to knw wat those nasty ppl were upto...but i din knw tht they would catch her again...its good tht he saved his damsel from their clutches 👏👏

"her eyes were dark and scared, water droplets on her lashes, sunlight glancing off them. he felt anger heat his ears. how could she." - ⭐️

the feelin of this line says it all...he feels so protective nd possessive towards her 😳

the temple scene was the best...he just showed up of the blue...nd disappeared like a cloud driven by the wind ⭐️👏 her need to justify right up then nd thr at his accusation...very nice...she couldn let him think of her tht way!!!!

wanting more...hope you update in the weekend 😳

hi supriya, 🤗

sorry to make you sad. i am so glad though that you liked the writing... and the nani khushi thing. okay, i may have conveyed it poorly, but the second girl in the goons' clutches is not khushi, just a random girl.. another victim.

when he reads the ad, he catches on what was happening in that room, and he goes to settle it once and for all... i had a feeling his excess anger also had something to do with him seeing khushi in that state and finally understanding why.

wanting more? okay, baby... let me get my old imagination crackin'.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#190

Indi,

I am in tears and my heart is aching. Our poor Arnavji and poor Kushi. I can feel the whole family's heartache. Get up Arnav I kept saying to myself. I love the flashback to how they met and when Nani cried I cried.

I love your story and I want him well soon! Kushi needs him, they all need him, I need him to be well. Coma, a time of resting and nothing to disturb your thoughts. His well needed rest and her hearing his thoughts superb, even in a comatose state he thinks of Kushi.

Thank you.👏