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RizArshi

@RizArshi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#991

As much as I loved your update I am not having good feelings about it. I found this chapter very mysterious. I had the feeling that what we can see is not what is actually happening while reading it. I am very worried as to what Arnav has planned. Both of them know about Shyam and both are hiding it from each other. Hiding things never did good to them. And then came Lavanya. No matter how much she trusted her friend there was a tinge of jealousy and insecurity. I felt Lavanya is here with a mission and not a good one. Glad that Arnav could recognize that flicker of emotion in Khushi's eyes and acted immediately. But then again Arnav's question to Khushi didn't help me with my negative feelings. Arnav wanting to feel free and him recalling the gun shots again and again made me all worried. The loaded gun in Arnav's hand just made it worse for me. I desperately hope Arnav doesn't do any stupidity in his rage that may result in their separation this time never to reunite. Most of the past events also were of Khushi's painful memories. The suspense is at its peak now. I can't handle any more of it. You have to have to update ASAP and give me some peace of mind. I know I can't sleep tonight Very well written chapter. It successfully increased my blood pressure 😳 Thanks for the PM :)

Edited:

I forgot to congratulate you on turning pink. Congratulations Indi Di. Amio Bengali (Farha apu told me 😳)

Edited by RizArshi - 11 years ago

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Cynthia Abruzzo DeSiena

@cinthiann1758

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Posted: 11 years ago

#992

indi my dear friend just love the story. the haunting of asr the sound of those gunshots, truly haunting. shyam is the bad man here too and love the flashback of their meeting and the dori. love the bike ride and the night that followed and your encouraging of helmet wearing while riding a bike very responsible! it is nice to see La here too!

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javeria

@Javeria3991

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Posted: 11 years ago

#993

Superb update👏

Read the previous update as well.

Even though Arnav has came out from coma recently but still he is adamant to go office not caring that everyone is worried about his health. But he want to show that he is normal, acting like a typical ASR, little brother of his Di and naughty yet loving husband. Actually he want to hunt Shyam down for thinking killing Khushi, his love.

Lavanyah is such a good friend of Khushi, coma of arnav has effected Khushi as well and only Lavanyah wants to know Khushi's state and how she felt then and now.

The ending of this update was shocking. Arnav loaded his revolver. Is he himself planning to end Shyam , if that's so then he has completely lost his mind. Give Shyam a deserving end but not from the hand of Arnav.

Plz update soon

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Love.life2

@Love.life2

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Posted: 11 years ago

#994

Thnx for d pm

Its a beautiful updt.

Also its 21st sept farn house consummation scene anni

Bt u showed fb bt this is nt wht hppnd on the show so r u modifyin the scenes.

When did Arnav pull the dori on his poolside.

Lavanya is bck.

Khushi knws snake is after Arnav n she's doin nothn abt it.

Why dint she tell him bt still he hs taken a gun.

Pls dnt make Arnav go away for killin tht snake.

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Devilways

@Devilways

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Posted: 11 years ago

#995

OMG!!!

i do not like the gun! i do not..

it was such a mixed update.. her feelings.. his feelings.. crap!

please dont let him do something stupid

great update. cant wait for the next one.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#996

Originally posted by: RizArshi
As much as I loved your update I am not having good feelings about it. I found this chapter very mysterious. I had the feeling that what we can see is not what is actually happening while reading it. I am very worried as to what Arnav has planned. Both of them know about Shyam and both are hiding it from each other. Hiding things never did good to them. And then came Lavanya. No matter how much she trusted her friend there was a tinge of jealousy and insecurity. I felt Lavanya is here with a mission and not a good one. Glad that Arnav could recognize that flicker of emotion in Khushi's eyes and acted immediately. But then again Arnav's question to Khushi didn't help me with my negative feelings. Arnav wanting to feel free and him recalling the gun shots again and again made me all worried. The loaded gun in Arnav's hand just made it worse for me. I desperately hope Arnav doesn't do any stupidity in his rage that may result in their separation this time never to reunite. Most of the past events also were of Khushi's painful memories. The suspense is at its peak now. I can't handle any more of it. You have to have to update ASAP and give me some peace of mind. I know I can't sleep tonight Very well written chapter. It successfully increased my blood pressure 😳 Thanks for the PM :)

Edited:

I forgot to congratulate you on turning pink. Congratulations Indi Di. Amio Bengali (Farha apu told me 😳)

rizarshi,

ami jani tumi, nishu_shorna (nishat?) ar farha khoob bondhu ar shobai bangali... it's lovely to meet bangalis from everywhere and i feel thrilled to see you reading without you.

thank you for your congratulations on the pink thing 😳.

about the story... to me this is the story of asr and khushi as i know them, half the time i just leave things as they are and let the inspiration, the thoughts, the next thing come to me. for 12 chapters, it unerringly has. usually the right suggestions have popped up and we've go down a path. i know what the broad story is, and trust me, it is a happy one, one where more is found than is lost. i believe, yes rather strongly too, in the power of an emotion that is being forgotten over money these days... the power of real love.

so i know that will triumph.

but this time my thoughts took me straight to that gun he loaded.

in more than 14 years he has not been able to tackle that nightmare in his head... yes, marrying khuhsi has made it better, but the bad feelings cling to him in shadows. and when there's threat to his love, they come and crowd him... he must do something about it.

please don't get a bad feeling. if you and i have have trusted asr khushi for so long, despite snake, mu, production house, filthy politics, show shut down, 10 months of no work by one actor and a failed serial by another, surely there's more to them that can be shaken by one gun and a story writer who listens to her instincts.

the thing to believe in is, despite all the uncanny undercurrents of the chapter, the farmhouse night came into it... without the writer's planning it. on the anniversary of that episode. interesting, na? in this same story, rabba ve came in first also on the anniversary of the first rabba ve. makes me think.

i know i sound a bit crazy. but trust these two characters, they will see us safely and well out of this messy feeling.

plus, if a tale doesn't heighten us in many ways, what's the point?

i don't think lavanya is there for any bad reason, but i thought she should be here to see asr. he would do the same for her.

yes, khushi feels things which she knows she need not, but there's a whole world of difference between knowing and actually feeling it.

somewhere else, even he was not thrilled about nk hugging khushi... that little thing of "mine" is so exciting in a relationship i feel.

have i really bored you now.

don't worry... as they say in hindi serials, sab kuch theek ho jayga.

Edited by indi52 - 11 years ago

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#997

Originally posted by: Devilways
OMG!!!
i do not like the gun! i do not..
it was such a mixed update.. her feelings.. his feelings.. crap!
please dont let him do something stupid
:)
great update. cant wait for the next one.

devilways, hi

that gun has everyone worried. sorry. had to be there.

par hume vishwaas hai..😆

i hope to hold on to that great update at the end of your comment and go to 14 to resolve the crisis. it is a difficult point, i won't lie... but you know, this is asr and khushi... thery have survived many things...

see you soon.

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indi52

@indi52

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#998

Originally posted by: renee.bee
Thnx for d pm
Its a beautiful updt.
Also its 21st sept farn house consummation scene anni
Bt u showed fb bt this is nt wht hppnd on the show so r u modifyin the scenes.
When did Arnav pull the dori on his poolside.
Lavanya is bck.
Khushi knws snake is after Arnav n she's doin nothn abt it.
Why dint she tell him bt still he hs taken a gun.
Pls dnt make Arnav go away for killin tht snake.

hi renee,

great to read you enjoyed the update.

yes, the story in the past is like what we saw on tv, there are inflection points and happenings which are similar, yet a little different. there first love making was a liberation thing for him and he went seeking an openness... in my thinking 😳.

when did arnav pull the dori on the poolside... on the evening of akash and payal's engagement party... i have highlighted two sections in purple... they connect. she dresses for the engagement in the first one. he snaps her dori in the second.

lavanya has come to see asr... i hope this will take us to interesting things in a happy sort of way.

khushi and anjali didn't tell asr about the phone call. protective instinct? they both know how asr will fly into a rage. he's just out of a terrible coma. it's wring to hide things... yet asr, khushi, anjali, all keep quiet and try to protect those they love. life is like that i guess.

i am happy to note, no one till now has said, let asr go kill shyam.

that is the power of asr's characterisation.

one of the reasons i write about him and his lover.

don't worry, he won't do anything he oughtn't. he is a man of the deepest conscience. we've seen that often.

i hope by next chapter this angst will be resolved.

thanks 😳.

Edited by indi52 - 11 years ago

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indi52

@indi52

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#999

Originally posted by: Javeria3991
Superb update👏
Read the previous update as well.
Even though Arnav has came out from coma recently but still he is adamant to go office not caring that everyone is worried about his health. But he want to show that he is normal, acting like a typical ASR, little brother of his Di and naughty yet loving husband. Actually he want to hunt Shyam down for thinking killing Khushi, his love.
Lavanyah is such a good friend of Khushi, coma of arnav has effected Khushi as well and only Lavanyah wants to know Khushi's state and how she felt then and now.
The ending of this update was shocking. Arnav loaded his revolver. Is he himself planning to end Shyam , if that's so then he has completely lost his mind. Give Shyam a deserving end but not from the hand of Arnav.
Plz update soon

thank you so much, javeria,

i have tried to stay as true tio the characters as i felt and saw them, in this story. so yes, asr needs to go to work... he's recovered from the coma almost a month now, he can't just lie around and do nothing any more.

he does want to solve this shyam problem. you noticed how la was concerned abouy khushi? lovely... that';s the thin, the relationships here are precious, not clear cut good, bad, etc., la is a part of asr and khushi's experience... i wanted her to come and see him. that was all. she turned out to be sensitive to khushi's needs... see how she pushes them to go out... she knows both asr and khushi quite well. i loved that. (okay okay i know i wrote it, but sometimes, the character surprises you and prompts lines...)

sorry for the shocking ending. following a trail... hoping to come to a good resolution soon.

i am happy that no one can see him killing shyam.

that's asr. powerful character. don't worry...

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indi52

@indi52

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+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#1000

Originally posted by: cinthiann1758
indi my dear friend just love the story. the haunting of asr the sound of those gunshots, truly haunting. shyam is the bad man here too and love the flashback of their meeting and the dori. love the bike ride and the night that followed and your encouraging of helmet wearing while riding a bike very responsible! it is nice to see La here too!

hi cynthia,

thanks so much. love the bike ride? awww, i can almost see them. so glad you are happy to see la. i like her too.