Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF - Page 2

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: saxena_hgt

Killer one chitraji.. man your advay is surely a beast & you have selected perfect montage pic for that.. i m so looking forward to this one.. how u r managing two poles apart advay is beyond me...i think this one is close to promo advay.. i loved how strong murli & advay bond is..

Hi Prachi,
Kaha tha naa, this Advay is killing me, the montage is the guy who gives me the chills and haunts me at night sometimes, HAHA!!! 😆😆
How am i managing poles apart Advay, kya bataoon behen, it is EXHAUSTING ... this Advay drains all my energy and i am lying horizontal on the floor sometimes, by the time i have written a chapter.
Yep this one is close to the one they showed in the promo. I am trying to keep his as raw and rough as possible, hence why i fear he may not go down very well. But it is a risk worth taking the story is simply beautiful IMO


by d way i have few queries, just like that.. why to show a man is dark, he has to have colourful sex life? Can't virgins b dark??


Okay Question Answer time HAHA The part i love the most.

Hmm , no there is no need to show a man is dark with a colourful sex life. Its jsut something i am doing. Tho there are loads of dark characters in literature who have nothin sexual about them. But this story has kink and elements of BDSM etc in it hence why my Advay cannot be a virgin. He is someone who is in touch with his sexuality, He knows what he wants in his bedroom from his women. So it wouldnt go with the character IMO if i make him a virgin and then also show that he had a dark kinky side to him. He cant be exprimenting things with Chandini, his enigma is in the fact that he is uber sexy and he knows a woman's body like the back of his hand.
So no with Advay, this one ... hmm he cant be a virgin IMO.
Secondly also that he is from England, trust me kids here lose virginty at the age of 12-13, girls and boys. So that would look unrealistic again if Advay was a virgin, as there is a lot of peer pressure. Everyone has a BF or a GF and you will frowned upon if you didnt have one.
For me a man being virgin doest matter, for me a Man not having fallen in love with anyone is a greater deeper feeling. The fact that Advay loves Chandini, is what ticks for me , inspite of the nos of girls he had had.
Even in predator wala FF, he had plenty of GF's but more of passing affiars, his heart has always belonged to Chandini and he had only ever wanted to commit himself to her. SO virginity has no prominence in my opinion. If i cud i would even make Chandini a non virgin, but then that wud b agaisnt her nature and agaisnt the fact that she has had a consecrative upbringing,
So unfortunately my Chandini is a virgin 😕, tho i wish i cud have potrayed her as a non virgin 😉


Second i just don't understand when advay has so much power & intelligence, why he take his past on face value & didn't do any digging further? I know its just starting of your story but these questions r solely for discussion purpose..hoping to have a wonderful journey with u once again.. cheers..

Well my story is slightly diff, to the original plot, u will see how.
Yes he has turned up and hasn't done any further digging. But thats who he is , an impulsive arse. There are people in this world who take revenge from children for something that parents did, sick twisted people who do that. Lets just say Advay is one of those people. HE wants revenge full stop...and he doesn't want to justify his actions. Indrani killed his parents, and Chandini was a hand in glove. He lost his family and he wants revenge. thats who he is.
Intelligence and compassion, sympathy empathy etc are completely different things, isn't it. Some intelligent people are so effing sick in their ways,
One of colleagues at work, she is a patel, her Jijaji, he is a top auditor, so smart and intelligent. But the way he treats his wife and his family, YUKK, he is an asshole , a abuser IMO, but his wife too has a high flying career and put up with him for the kids. They are in thier early fifties, now she is filing for divorce, as kids are grown up and she has had enough of him. And this man is like that for no reason.
At least Advay has a reason to hate Chadnini, yet he actually loves her to death and back. He hurts her because she is his, to hurt to torture or to love. But he does that with the Haq he feels or her. He has a fire burning in his heart and he wants revenge and thats all he is willing to consider, baaki sab gaya tel lene according to him. Lets jsut say he is an unreasonable person, and his trauma is the reason he is like this. TBH watching his mother burn in itself would have left him needing mental help, but he had found a way to channel his trauma into becoming successful at life and had worked hard so he can come back and exact revenge.
This is only the beginning, as you said. But let me honest Advay never changes thru the story, he gets darker ...hmm he mellow a bit later... but there is still a lot of time for it. If anything he gets darker by the day 😆
Sometimes he confuses me , even i dont know what he wants at times, at times he seems happy, at times extremely dark, and i am like what do you want mate, jsut stick to one thing. but thats who he is i guess. HE doenst know what he wants from life. So lets just see where the journey takes them 😃 and i am looking forward to this journey with all of u wonderful people by my side🤗




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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Chipper-Treat-

Wow awesome and interesting start loved it so much.
Really captivating.
Continue soon.


Hi thanks sona, glad u liked it. Hope i manage to keep the tempo in the future,

Will continue soon, need to update Predator before that 😆😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hey, thanks for replying. BTW, I've already started reading Predator and trust me, I'm impressed by your writing.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Interesting... I love dark stories... The concept is really intriguing.. pm me when you update please...
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Soju.

Interesting... I love dark stories... The concept is really intriguing.. pm me when you update please...


Yeah sure , thanks a lot

Gosh I am relieved, that you like dark stories, I was worried i wont have anyone appreciating dark FF, thank god there are readers like u who appreciate it , who makes it worth while for me to write.

I have sent u a buddy request, pls accept it so i can PM u in the future
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: gamini2207

Hey, thanks for replying. BTW, I've already started reading Predator and trust me, I'm impressed by your writing.


Hi thanks lovely,

TBH Predator starts in a strange way, it was meant to be a one shot but people egged me on to write, the story starts to flow well from Chapter 4-5 onwards IMO, and thanks a lot for liking my style of writing, ur words do encourage me to write more often and to improve on my style even more so it can increase reader satisfaction.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: ChitraGS


Yeah sure , thanks a lot

Gosh I am relieved, that you like dark stories, I was worried i wont have anyone appreciating dark FF, thank god there are readers like u who appreciate it , who makes it worth while for me to write.

I have sent u a buddy request, pls accept it so i can PM u in the future

trust me there are many... Some people don't want to disclose it may be... I love them but I can't write em... 😭 my Wattpad library includes 80% dark and alpha male stories... I will accept request 😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT WAS PROMISED IN THE PROMO!!!
I AM SOO EXCITED TO READ THIS ONE!!!
Awesome! Amazing!👏
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Chitra so happy that you're writing another FF and I will comment after reading... thanks again
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Posted: 7 years ago
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wow what a disclaimer
I am so intrigued already
I am sure I will love this
and I have no problem with any mature part

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