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Posted: 7 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: rasikasarisha

Hi Deepa

it is really well narrated 👏
I must say this should be the real plot but it's ok.

Waiting for next update

thank u so much rasikasarisha
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Posted: 7 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: 2filmy

Advay replaced the painful scene of his parents being killed in front of his eyes with this present scene of Chandni crying helplessly and being abandoned by her Mom whom she loved and could do anything for
it was sort of the same situation with the persons reversed
Chandni had lied in her childhood and that one lie had ruined Dev s life forever so he wanted to do the same to her and make her experience how it feels to see one's world crumbling before one's eyes
Chandni and Indrani love was one sided completely
Advay could feel that and now even this bond was broken forever for this marriage
I can fully understand his raging emotions now
for a long time he has burned alone in this fire of revenge and hatred but now he has pulled Chandni too in this hell and he will make sure she suffers equally with him and experiences the same trauma and pain


Originally posted by: 2filmy

Niru tries to console and cheer up Chandni
he is unknowingly right
Chandni really made the right decision to marry Advay
even though she feels it's so wrong decision now
she can't understand Advay at all he is too unpredictable for any one to comprehend
the irony of the situation
she had taken this room as it was Dev s room and she found comfort here and felt his presence
but now that her Dev has returned in a different name and completely opposite personality and took this room she feels disgusted and irritated at him
she wanted Dev to come back and marry him
she wanted to spend the rest of her life with him
that has happened and she is so unaware of it
fate has granted her wish but in a different way
I loved how u portrayed her emotions here
I just wanted to go and give her a tight hug


Originally posted by: 2filmy

I understand her fear when Advay came in the room and locked it
she already suffers from panic attack in closed spaces and she also has problem from strangers
here both are together she is in a closed room with a complete stranger so she was really scared
she warned him to stay away and he taunted her that he isn't PP and he won't do anything now
she was furious when he called her katto gilehri
when she asked him why he married her she got such a vague reply
she was mentally physically emotionally drained that day so she rested for some time
Advay came and saw her and felt she is just a beautiful illusion just like the real Moon
I loved the Chandni dhokha Hai inclusion here


Originally posted by: 2filmy

when he took off the band-aid she hissed
it was like she had felt the pain herself
she used to do this in childhood too
this hasn't changed at all
seeing this he took off another band-aid to scare her
he was just teasing her and having great fun at her expense
now she wanted to dress his wound
she just couldn't sit when he was trying to dress his wounds
she did it with utmost care and concern
Advay was inherently happy seeing her care for him
she was remembering how he had married her and how he was so beaten in the process
for Advay she had changed a lot and she wasn't his childhood friend anymore now
he was happy seeing his sindoor on her forehead


Originally posted by: 2filmy

she was very much bothered by his untidy messy habit
she didn't want to do anything for him after the night
it was very natural as she knew he would mock her again
but she didn't knew it would be very difficult for her to control her OCD for cleanliness
Advay was teasing her again I loved this
he wanted her to go somewhere for a surprise but she hated to go anywhere with him but then he blackmailed her to go with him else he would tell Indrani about the baby
she was so angry and asked him why he was blackmailing her again with the same thing
but as usual he didn't reply her and gave her a choice to make that too soon
so she had to go and in the car she kept thinking how to find a solution so that he can't blackmail her again


thanks for your detailed comment Priya
ur understanding of my writing makes me think i have made right impact on readers which i wanted to create
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: 2filmy

you should have been in the creative team Deepa
you do a far better job than them

ha ha ...i am honored 😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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aww it was all my pleasure
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: deeps_92


ha ha ...i am honored😳


consider writing professionally as a side occupation if it's possible
u will do wonders
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Posted: 7 years ago
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hope you aren't bored with my detailed comments
else I am ready to shorten them
u created the right impact on your reader
I am really hooked to this story
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Deepa, I came here after your post on GOTM thread... because I got the link in your signature...

Have been able to read just the prologue chapter but believe me, you brought back a live show feeling for me... It was as if the show exactly started from the point you have started...and the high emotional drama coming in with the dialogues and the conflict you have built up.

It's simply beautiful... very much looking forward to reading further chapters... do keep posting often on any of the threads so that from your signature, all of us can come on your FF n seek pleasure of reading
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This story promises to take us on AdNi journey in a wonderful way
Please continue soon Deepa
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: LovingAHA2017

Deepa, I came here after your post on GOTM thread... because I got the link in your signature...

Have been able to read just the prologue chapter but believe me, you brought back a live show feeling for me... It was as if the show exactly started from the point you have started...and the high emotional drama coming in with the dialogues and the conflict you have built up.

It's simply beautiful... very much looking forward to reading further chapters... do keep posting often on any of the threads so that from your signature, all of us can come on your FF n seek pleasure of reading

thanks Neha...hopefully u like first and other chapters too

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Posted: 7 years ago
#90

Originally posted by: 2filmy

This story promises to take us on AdNi journey in a wonderful way

Please continue soon Deepa

haan I know...it has been month since i posted...
but work load is heavy for me
I have typed few portions of next chap...will try to post before year ends

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