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simikaur

@simikaur

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Posted: 7 years ago

#381

Originally posted by: Frey
Please please please dont end it so soon. You asked for last wishes so here are mine: I want a really intense emotional scene between both of them and hen one with Veer too. I want to see lots of really intense romantic moments as they try to gather their heads around their new found love. But please for fairness' sake, we saw a lot of emotional moments leading to Chandini and Advays breakdowns so just give us the other side as well in the same frequency. Pretty please! I'm s invested in this story now that I dont want it to end.

i second that too 😊

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2filmy

@2filmy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#382

i am sad that the story is ending
but am happy with it

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mahin

@mahin123

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Posted: 7 years ago

#383

my. Internet was down so couldn't read the updates earlier. now I have read the last 3 part in one go. I am so addicted to this story. Dear Ashley plz keep writing . even after this beautiful story finish plz write another one on adni that my request to you plz. waiting for the update dear

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2filmy

@2filmy

Trailblazer

Posted: 7 years ago

#384

i wish u would write more stories on them

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AshtaVasus

@AshtaVasus

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#385

Almost 40 chapters of pain filled heart rending emotions spilled all over and you want to end it in good note within 2or 3 chapters ???

Chandni cheated him by drugging him. Chandni used his mobile and sent a message to Swathi which resulted in her suicide attempt.

Chandni used his body.

But Advay used Not Only just her body, but also her mind, her self respect, her reputation in society, her respect as Malkin amongst servants in her own household, he had spread rumours about her in his Friends circle in Delhi, he even made her a beggar by closing her account / credit cards, he shook her very foundation by calling her an Orphan / a charity project, he even made her feel like a wh**e by throwing money on the bed and leaving her after his desires are fulfilled... he made her feel like an outsider in her own house. He had not stood by her when she needed him the most, especially when he was blackmailing her in the name of Family on one side and separating her from Veer and Ayi and Atyaji on the other side. He even did not allow her to stand on her own legs by telling her not to go to Academy.

He had got all her doors closed to live a decent respectful life of a wife - even if it was filled with Love, but at least some respect in the eyes of the family and society. As Ayi puts it, he has destroyed her entire 18 years foundation in just 3 years. The World, as she knew it, has crashed down completely and he is not allowing her any option to do anything on her own in her own life. He is dictating her life with his terms.

Sure, Love is unconditional. Chandni loves him way too much to forgive him. But, Saying a sorry or I love you but dint feel like telling you, just doesn't quite cut it - especially after she had gone to the mouth of Death and back.

And the reasons he is giving is again so manipulative - Suddenly calling her as Family, telling he is giving her "permission to make mistakes as she is a Raizada, its ok to take Rights of each other within Family ... If it was ok to take rights on each other, then he should not have been angry on his wife trying to seduce him in - I mean, its most of a advice to his own self than to Chandni..

He is using his tricks that he used to do when she was angry as a child.

Again, he is treating her from the angle of an angry child, and not as a woman whom he has hurt.

They had got their childhood feelings / Love / closeness reinstated after their talks today.

He has accepted that he is addicted to her now and looking at her as a woman.

But he had not proved his Love for her as a Man, yet.

He has not reinstated the Trust in their relationship.

He has not reinstated the Respect that she lost in Delhi - among the servants in the house, or in the society.

Chandni is still under psychiatric treatment and her broken wings are not mended yet. If she gives in to his love now, he will again control her - in terms of which man she can talk or work with, which place she can work, what she can do and cant do, etc. He suddenly pampers her with access to everything she used to have - without any guarantee that he will make a U turn the next time he is angry with her. The reason he is giving is nit convincing enough. The trust is missing here.

She needs time to process it. She cant go by his mere words this time. I hope she does not Give in easily but she is already started it, considering you wanna close the story fast. May be, re-entry of Swati or Karan could bind their Love as actual Man and Woman ?!

Having invested in a FF of some 80 chapters for the first time, I am pretty pissed off with the way Chandni has fallen into the pit so fast. May be, my expectations were different about her... In my opinion, The story needs time in showing the :-

Healing of Hearts on both ends,

Recognising each other as Man and Woman (not just as childhood siblings or friends),

Recognising the love between each other beyond just physical intimacy attraction and satisfaction,

Building trust As Husband and Wife and not relying too much on others in the Family to shape their life,

A lot of open talks and transparency in relationship...

BESIDES...

Both taking the reins together and teaching a lesson to Swati and Aditi together...

Veer learning a lesson from parents - as a Father and a Senior person in the family now, he has to know that he listens to both sides of the story in the family - he has to learn that settling the Family Feud is more important than taking sides with a family member.

BUT ITS YOUR STORY Ashley, and your personal life timelines guide and steer the path of your story. So, if you feel that the story has reached its pinnacle of closure, May be you are right. So, let the readers view or wish list not hamper with your thought process and creativity.

Edited by rajatshweta - 7 years ago

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.Ashleydevlin.

@.Ashleydevlin.

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Posted: 7 years ago

#386

Originally posted by: rajatshweta

Almost 40 chapters of pain filled heart rending emotions spilled all over and you want to end it in good note within 2or 3 chapters ???

Chandni cheated him by drugging him. Chandni used his mobile and sent a message to Swathi which resulted in her suicide attempt.

Chandni used his body.
But Advay used Not Only just her body, but also her mind, her self respect, her reputation in society, her respect as Malkin amongst servants in her own household, he had spread rumours about her in his Friends circle in Delhi, he even made her a beggar by closing her account / credit cards, he shook her very foundation by calling her an Orphan / a charity project, he even made her feel like a wh**e by throwing money on the bed and leaving her after his desires are fulfilled... he made her feel like an outsider in her own house. He had not stood by her when she needed him the most, especially when he was blackmailing her in the name of Family on one side and separating her from Veer and Ayi and Atyaji on the other side. He even did not allow her to stand on her own legs by telling her not to go to Academy.

He had got all her doors closed to live a decent respectful life of a wife - even if it was filled with Love, but at least some respect in the eyes of the family and society. As Ayi puts it, he has destroyed her entire 18 years foundation in just 3 years. The World, as she knew it, has crashed down completely and he is not allowing her any option to do anything on her own in her own life. He is dictating her life with his terms.

Sure, Love is unconditional. Chandni loves him way too much to forgive him. But, Saying a sorry or I love you but dint feel like telling you, just doesn't quite cut it - especially after she had gone to the mouth of Death and back.
And the reasons he is giving is again so manipulative - Suddenly calling her as Family, telling he is giving her "permission to make mistakes as she is a Raizada, its ok to take Rights of each other within Family ... If it was ok to take rights on each other, then he should not have been angry on his wife trying to seduce him in - I mean, its most of a advice to his own self than to Chandni..
He is using his tricks that he used to do when she was angry as a child.
Again, he is treating her from the angle of an angry child, and not as a woman whom he has hurt.

They had got their childhood feelings / Love / closeness reinstated after their talks today.
He has accepted that he is addicted to her now and looking at her as a woman.

But he had not proved his Love for her as a Man, yet.
He has not reinstated the Trust in their relationship.
He has not reinstated the Respect that she lost in Delhi - among the servants in the house, or in the society.
Chandni is still under psychiatric treatment and her broken wings are not mended yet. If she gives in to his love now, he will again control her - in terms of which man she can talk or work with, which place she can work, what she can do and cant do, etc. He suddenly pampers her with access to everything she used to have - without any guarantee that he will make a U turn the next time he is angry with her. The reason he is giving is nit convincing enough. The trust is missing here.
She needs time to process it. She cant go by his mere words this time. I hope she does not Give in easily but she is already started it, considering you wanna close the story fast. May be, re-entry of Swati or Karan could bind their Love as actual Man and Woman ?!

Having invested in a FF of some 80 chapters for the first time, I am pretty pissed off with the way Chandni has fallen into the pit so fast. May be, my expectations were different about her... In my opinion, The story needs time in showing the :-
Healing of Hearts on both ends,
Recognising each other as Man and Woman (not just as childhood siblings or friends),
Recognising the love between each other beyond just physical intimacy attraction and satisfaction,
Building trust As Husband and Wife and not relying too much on others in the Family to shape their life,
A lot of open talks and transparency in relationship...
BESIDES...
Both taking the reins together and teaching a lesson to Swati and Aditi together...
Veer learning a lesson from parents - as a Father and a Senior person in the family now, he has to know that he listens to both sides of the story in the family - he has to learn that settling the Family Feud is more important than taking sides with a family member.

BUT ITS YOUR STORY Ashley, and your personal life timelines guide and steer the path of your story. So, if you feel that the story has reached its pinnacle of closure, May be you are right. So, let the readers view or wish list not hamper with your thought process and creativity.

hmm you got some valid points. let me think if there is anything more which can be done.For me, i have already thought different scenarios and for me they are living their happily ever after but I can write some more until we reach that point. Then, the story will become more like a daily episode , them living together and sorting things as they arose because it needs time. may be I can take a leap. what do you think?

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mahin

@mahin123

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+ 5

Posted: 7 years ago

#387

plz give us some happy ending. the world is already a very sad place , so many bad things happening everyday everywhere.

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AshtaVasus

@AshtaVasus

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#388

Even I want a Happily Ever After for AdNi.

Love has always been there between the two. The issue is... Chandni had always loved Advay as a Man. She has always seen him as her Husband.

But with Advay - He desires the body of Chandni. But he loves her as Tiny. There's a difference. He does not attempt to understand her feelings as a woman. There's too much control and Nil respect for her decisions. While he feels that his freedom of thoughts and action is restricted in front of his father, he subjects the same torture to Chandni. She wants a Husband, not a Father figure. She already has Arnav for that. And Advay needs to understand that.

Both of them living together now, again, having daily fights like a Daily soap would be too much go take. It would take a lot of time then for both to understand each other. It wont be enjoyable and a huge headache for Ayi, Baba and Veer...

Baba has understood that his actions had made Advay take psychiatric help and now Chandni is also on the same state. Ayi definitely wants both AdNi to be happy. AdNi is not definitely ready for a divorce. So, definitely Divorce is not gonna happen.

A Leap is what I had in mind when I wrote about Chandni going to Dubai for a year or two with Megha yesterday. But your update of the latest chapter, where Advay says that he will go with her as part of the Dowry even if she remarries - means he is gonna tail her wherever she goes... made me think of a few scenarios myself.

A gap. A time space is what they both need to clear their head. He needs to analyse his actions, their impact on her, the repercussions it has on her mind and health, his love for her as a woman and not as a desirous body or as his adorable Tiny.

Chandni has never stayed away from her family. She needs time away from him to clear the medicine side effects of her operation, her health improvement, a clear understanding of shaping her career path with guidance from Baba and the outside world exposure with different people making her mature enough to understand a grown up mature adult like Advay better.

So, my immediate choice based on what you have already projected in your story was... Scenario 1 - Chandni was born to a Professor Yash, raised by Prof Arnav and trained by Prof Advay. She comes from a family of well educated A Rank holders. She cant be an average student. So, I am assuming that Advay is surprised to find a room in the basement full of Trophies, Cups and Awards in the name of Chandni. He comes to know from Arnav that she is a child prodigy - a born genius with a lot of patents to her credit - that Arnav and Uncle Vanayak has been silently registering it in her name and managing everything all these years - that she has huge funds of her own...

That should make Advay realise that all his Mech. Engg Games that he was bringing her was a child's play for her, but she had always wanted him to be close to her (just like failing driving classes and making Advay take her to college), so she had been getting average marks to make Advay sit with her and teach her ...

That should tell Advay about her undying love for him, that she is not a pauper, that she had actually been a shining chink of armour on Raizada Family and not a charity project.

That should make him look at Chandni with a lot of respect and as a woman too...

Scenario 2 - Chandni has been learning to cook from Ayi ... Ayi is watching Masterchef Australia and asks Chandni to apply for it.

That gives time for Chandni to be away from Advay physically, in a diff country, locked up for 3 months away from family as per the T&C of Masterchef Contest, and its a wonderful opportunity for Chandni to learn something new and gain confidence too.

Advay meantime misses her, realises his Love for her, reads her diaries and realises his mistakes and regrets his actions...

She gets the Runner Up Award with a huge ransom award money. With money and guidance from Masterchef, she succeeds in set up a chain of Food Joint with Ayi Recipes ...

She returns to India with her own Name (not an orphan raised by Raizada und not under their shadow), her own Fame, own work, own Money and no dependency on Raizada family. When she comes back, the Masterchef Winner proposes her and that gets Advay to win back his Lady Love.

Scenario 3. - Arnav comes to know that Chandni has been teaching in Delhi. He guides her to offer Online Coaching Classes from Home. He also guides her in Event Management projects of Raizada Institute. Ayi takes her to all the programmes where she is a Chief Guest. Chandni with her vast knowledge of Fashion sense, designs and fashions all the elite community ladies wardrobes in Mumbai and other major cities - with help from Ayi and Megha Di's friends and clients. Chandni gains outside world exposure, work experience, maturity, training to take up the Raizada Institute in future...

Personally, apart from the Fashion Design idea, I am not in favour of Scenario 3 myself - coz it makes Chandni depend on the entire family to stand up on her legs.

Scenario 1 is without a Leap and Scenario 2 is with a Leap.

Edited by rajatshweta - 7 years ago