Colors of the Tempest - Advay (Updated Pg, 5) - Page 4

Originally posted by: Shamz94

This was amazing the depth of the character was just woow
Wish they would have showed more of his professional life which would have been such a treat to watch
Please can you write for the rest of the show that's not some random monologue and BGM like bang here take it
I really hope we see something similar to this on the upcoming parts of the show
Waiting more from you

Originally posted by: archana.mh17

Unres':

Sobti deserves something like this. Not stupid monologues & random explanations to the audiences while he looks right at the camera. The latter is especially annoying. The audiences don't need a commentary for every small thing. Kindly stop.

Anyway. Coming back to Incendiary specifically, your write-up sort of helped me believe how Advay could possibly blame a child & want revenge. How can a child do it, that's a valid question only until you are a 3rd party. When you are at the receiving end of what appears to be that child's doing, can you let that go? And as extreme & dark as the discussion sounds, Morris & Advay's talk seems to be just the kind of thing in show Advay's head. And it gave me goosebumps.

The show has so much potential. If they started focusing on characters, by giving a proper insight into their psyche instead of focusing on scenes which lack proper flow, it'll be one hell of a story. They really need to correct those small mistakes before they become a pain in the neck.

I can't believe I wrote that much.

P.S: Can't you write for this show? Really? I mean, I LOVED WHAT YOU HAVE WRITTEN HERE.

Write a thriller for him, yeah, when you do Noodly?😆

Originally posted by: Savera84

Why are you doing Mr India on us?

While I got you here, can I ask you to finish those unfinished stories please?

I haven't read the current story yet. Read couple of replies and I have no doubt in assuming that this must be another master piece as usual.

Cheers...

Welcome back Ria.

Since my complaints on unfinished stories are out of the way, I will concentrate on commenting on your new story.

Very good analyzation on Advay's state of mind. Hope you will analyze Chandni's state of mind too! Or is it very clear from the 11 episodes which were aired already?

I still can't get my head around taking revenge from an 8 year old.

I will explain why...

Dev and Chandni were best friends. Heck they even carved their names on a stone. He was protective of her. He taught her so many things and shared his knowledge with her. He gives her strength. More importantly he knows that she speaks her mind.

So, Dev must have seen some good qualities in Chandni too!

Chandni openly asked him whether his mother is a witch because she saw her flying.

This was before the said mother was burnt to death.

Dev could have said any of the following

1.No you are wrong, she does not fly.

2.Silly girl, my father was carrying my mother/she was jumping on a trampoline and it must have looked like she was flying.

3.She does fly but, keep it as a secret.

4.I do not know, I will find out.

Advay kept talking about Chandni's betrayal for not keeping a secret/for lying. Was he talking about the above incident or the below?

He was running away with his kid brother and asked Chandni to keep it as a secret. She still informed the villagers.

In both instances (telling the priests about Dev's mother's flying abilities or telling the villagers about Dev and Miku's whereabouts) Chandni did not hesitate even for a second.

If Dev is a very good friend, won't she hesitate? It did not look like someone prompted her. Even if she was blackmailed into revealing those half-truths, I did not see any kind of hesitation or fear on her face.

So, before Advay decides a punishment for Chandni, won't any of these memories play in his mind?

You can say something else has happened to make Dev believe that Chandni betrayed him. Let us leave that speculation aside for a second.

Dev's mother was burnt to death in front of Chandni's eyes on the basis of her declaration. Dev and Miku had to run away from their home and town because of her revelation on their whereabouts. Dev was her best friend and she is still waiting for him to come back. So, what does Chandni think about the incidents 16 years ago? Does she remember them? Does she feel guilty? Does she feel sorry for Dev and Miku? Is she waiting for Dev's return, so she can ask for forgiveness?

Chandni's keeps recollecting her trauma during kidnapping.

Wasn't she traumatised when Dev's mother was burning or father was bleeding to death or Dev running away with Miku in front of her?

I still can't hold her responsible for what happened to Dev's family. The adults and priest must have told her not to feel guilty for revealing the truth.

Like I said before, a grownup Advay should understand that Chandni said what she said, but it is the adults with ulterior motives, who actually killed his parents.

Similarly, Chandni said what she said, but shouldn't she remember those incidents and shudder even for a second? For goodness sake, this happened with her best friend Dev!

Hope I am making sense.

Cheers...

Originally posted by: Savera84

Welcome back Ria.

Since my complaints on unfinished stories are out of the way, I will concentrate on commenting on your new story.

Very good analyzation on Advay's state of mind. Hope you will analyze Chandni's state of mind too! Or is it very clear from the 11 episodes which were aired already?

I still can't get my head around taking revenge from an 8 year old.

I will explain why...

Dev and Chandni were best friends. Heck they even carved their names on a stone. He was protective of her. He taught her so many things and shared his knowledge with her. He gives her strength. More importantly he knows that she speaks her mind.

So, Dev must have seen some good qualities in Chandni too!

Chandni openly asked him whether his mother is a witch because she saw her flying.

This was before the said mother was burnt to death.

Dev could have said any of the following

1.No you are wrong, she does not fly.

2.Silly girl, my father was carrying my mother/she was jumping on a trampoline and it must have looked like she was flying.

3.She does fly but, keep it as a secret.

4.I do not know, I will find out.

Advay kept talking about Chandni's betrayal for not keeping a secret/for lying. Was he talking about the above incident or the below?

He was running away with his kid brother and asked Chandni to keep it as a secret. She still informed the villagers.

In both instances (telling the priests about Dev's mother's flying abilities or telling the villagers about Dev and Miku's whereabouts) Chandni did not hesitate even for a second.

If Dev is a very good friend, won't she hesitate? It did not look like someone prompted her. Even if she was blackmailed into revealing those half-truths, I did not see any kind of hesitation or fear on her face.

So, before Advay decides a punishment for Chandni, won't any of these memories play in his mind?

You can say something else has happened to make Dev believe that Chandni betrayed him. Let us leave that speculation aside for a second.

Dev's mother was burnt to death in front of Chandni's eyes on the basis of her declaration. Dev and Miku had to run away from their home and town because of her revelation on their whereabouts. Dev was her best friend and she is still waiting for him to come back. So, what does Chandni think about the incidents 16 years ago? Does she remember them? Does she feel guilty? Does she feel sorry for Dev and Miku? Is she waiting for Dev's return, so she can ask for forgiveness?

Chandni's keeps recollecting her trauma during kidnapping.

Wasn't she traumatised when Dev's mother was burning or father was bleeding to death or Dev running away with Miku in front of her?

I still can't hold her responsible for what happened to Dev's family. The adults and priest must have told her not to feel guilty for revealing the truth.

Like I said before, a grownup Advay should understand that Chandni said what she said, but it is the adults with ulterior motives, who actually killed his parents.

Similarly, Chandni said what she said, but shouldn't she remember those incidents and shudder even for a second? For goodness sake, this happened with her best friend Dev!

Hope I am making sense.

Cheers...

Originally posted by: cineraria

Thank you so much. 😃

Wreckage

He had a count of all the variables and constants in this equation, he calculated their behavior and positions from all angles, he had assumed values for the unknowns, every parameter was covered to his mind. Shilpa had been planted two years ago in the Vashishth family, she had their trust, he had his information. Sixth months prior to the impending visit to his native town, he had gotten the Mahant's property evaluated, he maintained a more meticulous ledger of their dwindling finances than Indirani Vashisht could of their monthly expenses. Then five months ago, an anonymous party delivered the usurer to whom Indirani had mortgaged the Mahant's property, an offer of to buy out along with promise of handsome down payment. The man had resisted, displayed pass concerns around his alliance with the Mahant, his buttons were found and pressed. Enough so that he couldn't raise his suspicions on being transferred money from 7 different accounts over the course of next five months by the end of which he was a more than willing participant of the game. Fifteen days prior to diving into the sea himself, unbeknownt to the family, Advay Sigh Raizada was the owner of the Mahant's house. The news surely would reach them but the day and act for that too had been pre-cogitated to exactly two days after Maha-aarti.

But nothing, absolutely nothing could have prepared him for this. He had always been the operator in the equation never the operand, not till beneath his palms he felt the freaking pulse of aged wood that made the entrance to the Mahant's haveli. Not till the door creaked open and his feet felt the ground they had trodden for sixteen years, not till he moved three steps straight and then shifted left for he knew there was a bump in the ground to his right, not till he was hit with a familiarity so profound that it twisted his gut, an air so bewilderingly calm as nowhere but home, he couldn't breathe. The chandelier above, the window facing south, the spiral staircase on whose railing he'd slide, the house that once belonged to his family and now to a wreckage of memories.