RiKara VM and Drabble

Page

Next Last

kashishsr

@kashishsr

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

Credit for song idea and request goes to @AhamyTed...

[YOUTUBE]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gZPsV8YY7Jw[/YOUTUBE]

Just a little something I wrote a long time ago, but @AhamyTed requested this VM and I felt this fit perfectly... Imagine Gauri had not had the will to defeat Kali...

Gauri spun and spun... her feet moved to the rhythm of the song... an act of memory as she heard no sound... With every turn she acknowledged the men in the crowd... a nod at nothing as she saw no sight... No she was not deaf... but the only sounds she could bear to her were his whispered poetry... No she was not blind... but the only vision before her glazed eyes was his indulgent smile... Him... her savior... her destroyer... the balm to every wound and every scar... but the cause of endless pain and suffering... It had been a choice... his happiness at the price of her eternal misery... or his death for her freedom... Had it really been a choice? She had given her world for him... And he didn't even know...

He hated the sight of her... the very sound of her voice... she yearned for a glimpse of him... for a snippet of his reassuring baritone... She hadn't loved him... Love was too insignificant a word... She'd worshipped him... but he could never know... He could never know that those first few nights she'd screamed for him... cried herself hoarse trying to will him into saving her... but he'd not come... of course he hadn't... after all hadn't she ensured it? Ensured he would never search for her... She'd given him the boon of a happy life and in return received a life-imprisonment...

The first days were hard... the nights the worst... but now six months later, there was nothing... now she could lose herself in his memories... He was far away in Mumbai... probably married by now... She was stuck in Bareilly... paying a debt to a devil...

Omkara Singh Oberoi touched down in Bareilly. It had been 2 hours since he'd discovered the reality of Gauri Kumari Sharma... Gauri Omkara Singh Oberoi...

It was time to bring his wife home...

Edited by kashishsr - 7 years ago

Quote

Frequent Posters

AhamyTed

@AhamyTed

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

OMG This was so beautifully made Kash 👏😲👏

When it started , I thought you'd present from Gauri's POV only...but I was in for a surprise😃

This song is one of those which touched my heart ...

And the way you presented Rikara here😭

Their angst was something so solid and perfect that attracted me as a viewer ...made me always think what a beautiful love story theirs would be one they clear all the misunderstandings😭 Alas...🥱

I always missed Omkara's POV whenever he saw her with Kaali or misunderstood her. This actually made that little wish of mine close to complete😃

A heart touching song on a heart touching RiKara💔

Thank you so much Kash ! It was wonderful❤️🤗

Edited by AhamyTed - 7 years ago

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Feludarocks

@Feludarocks

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

Kash yaar, aaj kal itne saare depressing VMs ek ke baad ek.

I confess I don't usually like stories/vms where Gauri seems defeated. But I like how you chose the scenes and the sync between scenes and lyrics.

I think my fav kind is PKHPKF. Thats like the best.

Quote

rikara94

@Raghav_Rao

Sparkler

Posted: 7 years ago

❤️

Its sooo beautiful kishu

The way you presented rikara..wow amazing

Scene and song selection was superb

'haye andar andar se toota main

Tere ishq mein khud hi se rootha main'

Quote

devildiva21

@devildiva21

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

Beautiful ❤️ I have no words... this was just way too awesome

Quote

The_Inner_Voice

@The_Inner_Voice

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

Dear Kashish 🤗

That was a heart wrenching write up there and the VM was a poetic justice to every word you have written in there. Words fail me and so I leave behind some words down here that I penned long ago for some other forum which dealt with the issue of Woman trafficking.

The poem below may contain a few words that may sound harsh, but the use of the same has been done to provide the impetus that an article then and the VM now had on me. The use of the names of the deity from the epics stands as a metaphor to the female population and I have no intention to hurt anyone's belief or feelings (being God loving myself). Since it is a compilation of Hindi and Urdu words I have translated a few of them at the end of the poem to the best of my knowledge.

This poem goes out to all those Shahzadis (on whom the DH article was written years back)...who yearn to break free.

Bazaar mein hua neelaam, ek haseen khwaab

Bazaar mein hua neelaam, ek haseen khwaab,

Haivaaniyat ki nazoron mein, bas ek shabaab;

Bazaar mein neelaam hua, phir ek haseen khwaab...

***

Havas ke andheron se, hui main ru-ba-ru,

Rondhi hui padi hai ab, meri aabaroo;

Aaine mein aks hai koi, jo milta hai hu-ba-hu,

Use na khushi ki tamanna, na mujhe jeene ki aarzoo...

***

Bazaar mein hua neelaam, ek haseen khwaab,

Zindagi ke pyaale mein, gham ka sharaab;

Bazaar mein neelaam hua, phir ek haseen khwaab...

***

Bematlab sa lagta hai, yeh dhai aakhad ka pyaar,

Pal bhar ka hai gulshan, umr bhar intezaar;

Umeed ki dehleez se, lauti hoon baar baar,

Wo maanjhi na mila jo le chale, us kinare paar...

***

Bazaar mein hua neelaam, ek haseen khwaab,

Zakhmi hai rooh meri, siskiyaan behisaab;

Bazaar mein neelaam hua phir ek haseen khwaab...

***

Kisi aur ko na de, tadkeer yun sazaa,

Gunah kisi aur ka, zindagi mujhse khafa;

Us khuda se meri, ek yehi hai ilteja,

Woh mera bachpan lauta de, sirf ek dafa...

***

Bazaar mein hua neelaam, ek haseen khwaab,

Woh khada gunehgaar mera, bebaak benakaab;

Bazaar mein neelaam hua, phir ek haseen khwaab...

***

Tamashaa dekh rahen hain, namard yahan tamaam,

Ruswa ho rahi Draupadi, Sita ho rahi badnaam;

Jab miloge apne khuda se, Kya doge jawaab?

Ki ho raha tha neelam, koi haseen khwaab?

*******************************************************************************************

Word help

Neelaam=Auctioned; Shabaab= Youth; Ru-ba-ru= Face to face; Aks= Reflection; Aakhad= Word; Dehleez= Entrance; Maanjhi= Boatman; Ilteja= Plea; Bebaak=Fearless; Ruswa= Dishonour.

Thanks for writers like you that bring out the angst and pathos in the most beautiful ways.

Thanks Kashish 🤗

Much Love ❤️

Quote

OoViVioO

@OoViVioO

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

Kash this was 😭 So good and the VM made it even better 😭

Quote

Ryma22

@Ryma22

Beginner

Posted: 7 years ago

Its. Really beautiful. ...the way. You present Rikara. .. Thier.pain. ..thier against...thier. Felling. ...and the vm lovvve its. Amazing ...in fact i always want. To. Hear this song. Or. Mujhe teri zaroot hai. In some of strong. Emotional scene of them...you make my wish come true 😊😊 ... Thanks

Quote

kashishsr

@kashishsr

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: AhamyTed
OMG This was so beautifully made Kash👏😲👏
When it started , I thought you'd present from Gauri's POV only...but I was in for a surprise😃

This song is one of those which touched my heart ...
And the way you presented Rikara here😭
Their angst was something so solid and perfect that attracted me as a viewer ...made me always think what a beautiful love story theirs would be one they clear all the misunderstandings😭Alas...🥱

I always missed Omkara's POV whenever he saw her with Kaali or misunderstood her. This actually made that little wish of mine close to complete😃

A heart touching song on a heart touching RiKara💔
Thank you so much Kash ! It was wonderful❤️🤗

Aww, ur cute 😳!

Actually I adore GKS but what many people probably don't know is that Omkara (the original version) is one I'll have as my favourite male fictional character on Indian TV. This guy is literal goals... I could discuss him for days... I've actually always related Gauri's situation with this song and you provided the perfect opportunity so thank you, really! 😛

Do u remember Omkara saying to Gauri that he knew jealousy? I rewatched all these scenes that day trying to identify that feeling and it's apparent if you look for it... Kunal and Atif utilised Omkara's anger perfectly and also left it open to interpretation... they're both amazing - the real dream team.

Thanks again 😃 !

Quote

kashishsr

@kashishsr

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#10

Originally posted by: rikara94
❤️
Its sooo beautiful kishu

The way you presented rikara..wow amazing

Scene and song selection was superb

'haye andar andar se toota main
Tere ishq mein khud hi se rootha main'

Thankooo Jyoti!!!

That line gets me again and again...

Quote

1 2

RiKara VM and Drabble

Related Topics

Explore Topics