RiKara guide to perfect romance - OS (Happy BDay Pooru)

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Poorva Chakraborty

@Cinnamon_Kisses

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Posted: 7 years ago

#11

You attempted to write something romantic *Sigh*

Rose petals, candles, thick layered curtains ... My curiosity is climbing to the peak now ... A proper wedding night for RiKara is a dream ☺️

Even I was thinking about all the pinnochios of the Oh-My-Mata enroute Tirupati Balaji family 😆 realizing ke tumne unn sabko bhi thikaane laga hi diya hoga

And now the mention of Rudra reminds me of his dialogue ... "Chulbul Bhabhi pregnant hai ... Ab iss ghar mein lambe Baal waale do O honge ... Ek capital O ... Ek small O."

I am feeling chalo achha hai ... Bhaujaai bhi busy ho gayi 😆

Ohohohoho ... BHAANG WAALE LADDOO ... bohot saari yaadein judi hain unse ... One more point to be noted is ... Gauri ki

maa kuch toh kaam aayi ... Very good Saasu mummy 😎

"Choti Maa was in a deep slumber and could not come along on her crusade to stop consummation in the Oberoi Mansion." 🤣

Omkara apne ghar waalo ki vein vein se waakif hai 😆

Jahnvi and her own missions Jahnvi complaining what to wear 🤣 One specific specimen of a mother she is ...

*Suhaag Raat Feels* *Tujhe yaad kar liya hai aayat ki tarah*

Laal Saree

Ooh La La ... My obsession with his possession of her backless blouses ... 😳 ... Special wala thank you for this Kash

Gauri madam frustrated hai and she is thinking so much ... These are the side effects of her husband becoming Mr. India for a whole day ... For the kind of person he is ... She is ought to think in this direction ... But husband ho toh Omkara jaisa ho ... #SmartKara ...

And we have our beloved Chulbul back ... Gauri bhi ekdum alag aur atrangi hai 😉

Romantic Kara surfacing now *Dhak Dhak* *Dhak Dhak*

Chinta mat Karo Omkaraji ... Gauri ne Baal nahi kaate 😆

and you recreated that ChulKara moment for us! I lobh you so much Kash *Flying Kisses*

"Aaj hi ki raat mili thi tumhe apne dual role ko yaad karne ke liye?" Uff uff Gauri 😆 His little thunder blunder ...

" Such romance could only come from the minds of truly troubled people." I expected this out of Gauri ... She is yet another namoona of the highly Fashion forward OMM circus ... The EJMDPSJ BAREILLY ISHTYLEWA 😆

And she thinks he wants inspiration

Bohot tez dimaag chalta hai iss chirraiyya ka bilkul bullet train jaise 😆

Mr. Gauri Kumari Sharma at work 😎

"Aapko bohot kaam Karna hai ... Hum let jaaye" babare kya kya sochne lagi thhi main ☺️

Ohho 😆 even when Kara does every kind of arrangement for their special night ... Crazy Ri is enough to spoil every plan 😆

I loved loved loved it Kashish ... Thank you so much for this wonderful birthday present ... This is one of the best i have received ... You know this whole thing can be written as screenplay as it is ... This has everything ... Romance ... Comedy ... A little bit of drama ... So apt for TV audience ... You made me so happy girl ... Thank you

About this story ... There is so much of scope ... Om and his dream of a proper Suhaag raat, the bhaang waale bareilly ke laddoo ... Rudy and his movie plans ... That red Saree ... *Nudge Nudge* Can I do a steamy part two adding some more elements to this! Okay okay I have footsie ... Curtains and some rain in my mind!

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kashishsr

@kashishsr

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Posted: 7 years ago

#12

Pooru, it's your present, do with it what you want. I would really love it if you wrote a steamy part two.

You know me I add Drama to everything, don't I? Yeah so did I actually manage to fool you into thinking RiKara were going to a get a conventionally perfect First Night? - that's not my style😆. I contemplated finishing with Omkara finally getting some action after all the trouble he went through, but I realised that's SOOO not my department - so please take over, you do it so well.

I don't think their night needed outside interaction to be Masaaledaar - what is Gauri for?😆 Usually I incorporate the whole lot of pinnochios don't I? but I thought Omkara must know the rug-rug of his intrusive family and he has ShivIka's example of how long this lot can delay a SR, so he's not taking any chances.

Is Aayat really your SR song? Personally, I thought you would want more of an Aur Ho (from Rockstar). I see Omkara going full 'Dil Ibadat kara haha hai, dadhkanen meri sunn. Tujh ko main karloon haasil lagi hai yehi dunn.', whereas Gauri would be on some other 90s track altogether and they would both finally join together in the cheesy and overused but still my favourite 'in lamhon ke daaman mein'.

I'm so glad you liked it😳. I tried to incorporate a few of your favs like possessiveness and backless saaris, but ultimately I guess I can never write GKS as any kind of purposefully sensual - so I'll leave it to the Pro, - you, Pooru😊.

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Poorva Chakraborty

@Cinnamon_Kisses

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Posted: 7 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: kashishsr
Pooru, it's your present, do with it what you want. I would really love it if you wrote a steamy part two.
DEFINITELY
You know me I add Drama to everything, don't I? Yeah so did I actually manage to fool you into thinking RiKara were going to a get a conventionally perfect First Night? - that's not my style😆.
The Jerry in you ran away from the tom in me ... Girl I was expecting some cheese! 😆
I contemplated finishing with Omkara finally getting some action after all the trouble he went through, but I realised that's SOOO not my department - so please take over, you do it so well.
Well well ... Action Kara after so much mehnat would have been routine but I got you now ... Kash is unconventional 😉

I don't think their night needed outside interaction to be Masaaledaar - what is Gauri for?😆
🤣 Samajh gayi main 😆 ... She is bulldozer bhaari on him

Usually I incorporate the whole lot of pinnochios don't I? but I thought Omkara must know the rug-rug of his intrusive family and he has ShivIka's example of how long this lot can delay a SR, so he's not taking any chances.
I love all your pinnochios ... And don't worry Omkara is going to have one proper suhaagraat 😉

Is Aayat really your SR song? Personally, I thought you would want more of an Aur Ho (from Rockstar). I see Omkara going full 'Dil Ibadat kara haha hai, dadhkanen meri sunn. Tujh ko main karloon haasil lagi hai yehi dunn.', whereas Gauri would be on some other 90s track altogether and they would both finally join together in the cheesy and overused but still my favourite 'in lamhon ke daaman mein'.
Aayat is not actually an SR song ... But I have to think about it ... Tum ho ... Is better ... Sochti hoon.

I'm so glad you liked it😳. I tried to incorporate a few of your favs like possessiveness and backless saaris, but ultimately I guess I can never write GKS as any kind of purposefully sensual - so I'll leave it to the Pro, - you, Pooru😊.
A purposefully sensual GKS! that's exactly what's running in my mind ... Now when she will realize that what she has done to all his hard work and intentions ... She will get to work... 😉

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kashishsr

@kashishsr

Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#14

'The Jerry in you ran away from the tom in me ... Girl I was expecting some cheese! 😆'

🤣 Where do you come up with these lines Pooru?!😆

Waah, unconventional ka title milgaya - I love it!😊

I know you will pick the perfect song - full faith in you.

Really looking forward to this piece now - get to work😉!

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kashishsr

@kashishsr

Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: Z.A.A
Aww! Such an adorable version of our chirriya and chirota 😆
Loved it. Poor Om!

Special mention to "Choti Maa was in a deep slumber and could not come along on her crusade to stop consummation in the Oberoi Mansion" still guffawing at it-ROFL! 🤣

This OS was hilarious, light-hearted and sweet-and that made it a great read.

Thanks for being the first comment and like!😊

I'm glad you found it enjoyable. I was actually hesitant to write that special mention bit, but then I thought - that's basically Pinky's purpose in life, she's miserable so she makes others miserable.

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kashishsr

@kashishsr

Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: GoWithTheRhythm
Loved loved loved it
Dear you have a talent for combining humor and romance
I was laughing my butt off when she misunderstood the situation 😆
great work keep up the good work and I love how you always translate the part in Hindi( for me as a non Hindi speaker that is very helpful)
good job

Thanks for reading and commenting and for the lovely compliment😳.

GKS will always surprise you.

I'm glad you appreciate the translations, although they increase the editing time a bit, it's worth it if it helps.

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kashishsr

@kashishsr

Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: Naina280599
This is so adorable. This is already going in my re-read list. I. Love. This. ❤️ Omkie was totes love while planning a perfect evening for his wife, especially the way he got everyone busy in their stuff, specially his choti maa and his parents; I loved that part. Gauri is the cutest and the most adorable ever! She thought he was ignoring her because he was upset with something which he won't open up to her and hence dressed up like chulbul! I so want chulbul to come up, once, in the show xD This OS is like many of my wishes combined in one, starting with chulbul, the back hug and then the fairy lights scene. I so loved the fairy lights scene. It was so cute. I was ROFL-ing while reading all Om's thoughts about hugging the wrong person and then his frustrated talks; poor guy xD And our selfless chirraiya was so adorable when she cried thinking that she ruined Om's surprise and then when she thought he wanted her to be his inspiration again. I burst out laughing reading that part. 😆 The dialogues there, making Om wonder how his naive wife got so much boldness in her, were so hilarious. I seriously can't get over it xD And then Om finally realising about what she was thinking about, and when he thanked her and said 'I love you' to her That was such a lovely scene! I loved reading this OS.

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave this lovely long comment.

The return of Chulbul is solidly on my wishlist too. GKS always has a way of convoluting any situation😆. I really felt in the inspiration scene Omkara would have gone for a suhaag raat if Gauri had not mentioned Bareilly, so I incorporated that in a different way.

Poor Omkara thinking Gauri was in the mood😆. I think her craziness is part and package of her, so he needs to love that too.