RiKara SS - Catching Feelings Part 5 on Pg 16 (04/11) - Page 10

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Posted: 7 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: asrkasr

Hi there again!.I have been on a reading spree and in me you have an ardent admirer ny friend.These tales are so Rikarish that I feel as if I an watching them portray all these vivid emotions.

Honestly its a case of once bitten twice shy and knowing fully well how fans and their emotions are treated by this particular lady of my last beloved show,I hve vowed to never invest emotionally in an 4 lions show again even though its been years it ended.I have never been a viewer of IB but my friend forced me to watch to some Obros scenes and then there was something about thay long hair,poetic soul,saying couplets and reciting poetries that stuck a chord with me.And since then I have only followed his stuff on and off because well Kunal brings Omkara to life.Though its no hidden fact how the fans have waited for his love story to start and how that turned out not to mention I knew it wld because some people can only craft but not do justice to character like Omkara.The writers here on forum does a much better job than that which was the case with the character I loved earlier as well.But seeing shrenu who I saw for first time as well I have to admit there is thos raw chemistry between them which makes rikara so unique as they portray the unsaid.I remember Kunal said in an interview that if u know everything abt the other person that rawness goes away,something akin to that in terms of chemistry and I agree.Its sad to see such two talented actors not getting theor due when they hve such a huge fanbase and such scope pf a unique love story but theres that.

Foming to you my friend,I hve to ask are you a Jane Austen fan?.I am here to only read stuff that you people write and I have just finished the sequel to this one which is such a fluff fest.Something you want to curl up with on a winter night.Now coming to this I am glad you are writing this prequel and dwlling into Omkara's mind and heart.That man has imperfections and flaws and there is nothing more beautiful than those imperfections.And its core he is the owner of such a pure soul something which has its mate in gauri.

I dnt know how you have planned it but I really hope that here when they both talk they really to the bottom pit of hell so they can disover their haven.Gauri needs to know about his childhood,his commitment issues,his not to be called a relationship with riddhima as I feel it must have been just a conveinence,the drug issues,how he can tell everyone to go ahead and embrace love but for himself he is scared to own that emotion for himself as much as he needs to know about gauri.

We say such big stuff about being feminists but a man is still looked down if he cries but its only to those that you can show your vulnerability are what the people r ur own.

Thanks for reading such blabbering but I have to say this regarding Omkara because you can do justice to it.



Ignore typos as did it trgh phone.


Originally posted by: asrkasr

I forgot to mention about the bit where you have made Omkara say that he will provide gauri the securityto claim his riom as theirs,to be sexure in the position she holds.Omkara did say to gauri in show as well that its her room as well but some words needs to be coupled with actions also he is very much that possessive alpha male beneath all that and Lets see how he takes her indifference and ignorance or worse if she says she has to move on.


Originally posted by: asrkasr

I read this again because I so want to read this further and you do have excuse all the typos in both the posts above as it has been typed through phone.


Oh my! My dear you're a prolific writer... poori ek essay likh di aap ne comment mein.

I love love love reading long comments like this one and I am so happy that you're quite regular about your long comments!

Also, you have really great ideas for stories! I swear I'm gonna write every one of the ideas you've written to me about.

I am a huge Jane Austen fan... in fact I first started writing fan fiction for Pride and Prejudice.

I will PM you some more of my impressions soon...

Stay tuned for an update soon!
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Posted: 7 years ago
#92
Hi y'all

I'm back with an update after a looong time. Sorry about that. But I lost the muse on this one for a while.

But we're back in business.

Here we go
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04

Omkara had a silent bet with himself as to how long the little dynamo could remain quiet and congratulated himself for betting correctly when she pretty much tore into him at the two minute mark.

"Ye aap kya kar rahe the? Akele jaane waale the na us Sultana ki problem se nipatne ke liye? Kab samjhenge aap ki saari problems akele akele solve nahin hoti. Humare baare mein aap kuch achha nahin sochte ye to humein pata hai... magar hum hi the jis ne Chulbul ke roop mein aap ki madad ki thi jab us Sultana ko ghar se baahar nikaalna tha. Aur aap ne hum se kuch kaha tak nahin? Patni to aap humein maante nahin... ek dost bhi nahin maante? Jo bhi rishta aap ke aur Chulbul ke beech tha ab wo bhi nahin raha?"

"Aisa nahin hai Gauri..."

Omkara was speaking to her in a soft, gentle voice and in her haste to make her point in what she was sure would be a long drawn out argument with her Nandi Singh Oberoi, Gauri didn't hear the change in his tone.

"Aisa hi hai Omkaraji... aap humein agar apna dost maante to hum se kuch kehte nahin?"

"Agar kehna chaahta bhi to kaise kehta Gauri?"

"Kyun? Hum ne aap ko kab roka kuch kehne se?"

"In dinon tum to mujhe ek dum se avoid jo kar rahi ho. Do din se tum se baat karne ki koshish kar raha hoon aur tum ho ki kabhi dikhti hi nahin ho aur jab dikhti ho to saare parivaar waalon ke beechon beech rehti ho. Mujhe samajh mein aa gaya ki tum mujhse baat nahin karna chaahti... isi liye maine bhi tum ko force nahin kiya"

All of this was said in the same gentle tone, that she hadn't heard from him in a long, long while. He'd been hesitant and quiet when she'd tried to leave and he'd stopped her... but the last time she remembered hearing this deliberately gentle and soft voice had been while she'd been Chulbul or when he'd been acting around Dhurandhar and his assistant Kranthi.

For a short second she wondered if he was acting and then dismissed the thought because one, she could hear the sincerity in his voice and two, they were alone in a car driving off towards the road that led to Panchgani, out of Mumbai. He wouldn't need to act for anyone else... unless, he wanted something from her.

"Aap ko humse kya chaahiye?"

The abrupt tone of her question made him stare at her for a second before he turned back to concentrate on the road.

"Aise kyun pooch rahi ho? Mujhe kuch nahin chaahiye... haan, I wanted to talk to you but I don't want to force you into anything you don't want"

"Aap ko hum se kuch nahin chaahiye to hum se aise kyun baat kar rahe hain?"

Again, Omkara turned to stare in confusion at his wife before looking back at the road

"Kaise baat kar raha hoon tum se?"

"Aise... ek dum..."

"Ekdum?"

"Aise... aap... hum se aise baat kar rahe hain jaise aap hum se naraaz hi nahin hain"

"Main? Tum se gussa? Maine kab kaha tum se ki main naraaz hoon?"

"Aap to hamesha hum se naraaz hi rehte hain na? Isi liye humein laga ki aap ko hum se kuch chaahiye tha aur usi liye aap hum se aisi aawaaz mein baat kar rahe hain.."

Now Omkara was curious...

"Kaisi aawaaz?"

Gauri, who'd been contemplating his reasons for being so... normal with her, was caught woolgathering

"Huh?"

"Kaisi aawaaz mein baat kar raha hoon tum se?"

"Oh... wo... soft,soft... ekdum... jaise aap dadi se ya apne ghar waalon se baat karte hain... pyaar se"

Gauri, involved as she was in trying to describe what it was she now heard in his voice, failed to be aware of his reaction to her words. Omkara for his part, was beyond shocked. Were things so bad that she had to wonder at him talking to her in a gentle voice? She feared he wanted something from her because he was being polite to her? What had he become if someone who lived with him thought he was trying to get something from her because he was talking to her in a gentler tone?

While Omkara was trying to wrap his head around the fact that Gauri was genuinely worried about his behavior, Gauri was panicking silently beside him. She'd said too much and now she was worried about his reaction to her unfiltered words

"Wo... humara wo matlab nahin tha Omkaraji. Hum jaante hain ki aap hum se... wo... ki aap humare baare mein kya sochte hain. Hum aap se ye nahin keh rahe the ki aap ke dil mein humare liye koi bhi feelings hain. Hum to bas..."

The barrage of words spilling from her lips trickled to a halt as Gauri failed to explain her thought process to an increasingly angry looking Omkara. What she didn't know however was the anger that showed on her jatadhari pati's face was all self-directed.

"Hum ne kuch galat kaha to humein maaf kar dijiye. Humara aap ko naraaz karne ka iraada nahin tha"

Again, in that same deliberately gentle tone, Omkara interrupted her

"Aisa kuch nahin hai Gauri. Main naraaz hoon... magar tum se nahin, khud se. Khair... mujhe actually tum se kuch confess karna hai"

"Con...fess?"

"Haan... actually mujhe tum se baat karni thi, without any interruptions from our family. To maine Rudra se kaha wo tum ko bataaye ki main Svetlana ki wajah se baahar jaa raha hoon. I knew ki tum definitely mujhe akele jaane se rokne aaogi... Isi liye..."

He chanced a glance at her while still concentrating on the road, only to find her looking at him with her eyes and mouth wide open in shock and astonishment. As the silence lengthened between them, Omkara grew more and more antsy, knowing that Gauri was still staring at him with the same wide-eyed look.

"Gauri?... Kya hua? Aise kyun dekh rahi ho?"

Out of the corner of his eyes, he could see her literally jerk out of her reverie at his voice. And when she spoke, Gauri sounded almost dazed like she couldn't believe what she'd heard.

"W-Wo... aap ne... jhoot bola. Humein aap ke saath laane ke liye, aap ne jhoot bola"

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Hope y'all liked this update.

Please let me know what you thought about this story by liking and commenting your thoughts, ideas and suggestions.

Cheers!
Edited by writergenie17 - 7 years ago


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Posted: 7 years ago
#93
loved the new update
now Om finally knows how gauri feels in terms of his behavior towards her
loved how you portrayed it simply
his soft/gentle tone made her insecure and showed him that he had to change that
CANT wait to see what happens next
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Posted: 7 years ago
#94
Awesome update!!
Loved it.
Very beautifully written.
Eagerly waiting for the next part.
Thanks for d pm:)
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Posted: 7 years ago
#95
Totally loved it... was checking my inbox and here it comes from you... Very nice Yaar...
Please update the next part soon... how will Om handles the conversation..I am excited to know about this
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This is amazing, Genie! Loved how you made Om think of his behavior with Gauri, how he started getting angry at himself for treating her in a way that she's scared of his reactions. I wanted to see something like this in DBO specially after that almost slap scene. Anyway, I loved reading this, specially our cute chirraiya being shocked that he lied, just because he wanted to talk to her. Too anxious to know what happens next. Post soonish! Much love ❤️
Edited by Naina280599 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#97
hehehe gauri reaction on OM lie was hilarious can so imagine shrenu expressing this
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Posted: 7 years ago
#98
Wonderful update loved it so much.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#99
Wow amazing...gauri is surprise to know omkara said a lie..waiting for next one
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Posted: 7 years ago
Aww..!! Humari chiraiyya was shocked with her jatadhari's gentle tone..I'm just trying to visualise her wide eyed face...ahaan..!! Shrenu will look too adorable with that expression...I could understand why she was so shocked...saach ka eklauta boyfriend lied for his chiraiyya and that too just to be with her..hayee..!! Pyaar isse kis mod pe le gayaaa...!!! I just loved their convo..I wish I was a little longer..koyi nehi..continue soon..
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