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rikara94

@Raghav_Rao

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#11

Beautifully written dear...

I am glad gauri want to resume her study its surprising for omkara

In show without sasu ma ko lane ka koi fayda nahi hua but here omkara realize that he did biggest mistake in his life not trusting gauri..now omkara thought what he done to her..acha hai...nice concept smiley...

Cvs wont give us this kind of scenes for rikara

Update soon

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AparnaChinnu

@AparnaChinnu

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#12

awesome update smiley 🤗

I am so happy that you started writing stories on RiKara too...wah it was superb...when I say this you probably will say that I just tried writing one but no... you should write more on RiKara yar...you know wat we all thought the truth will be out when gauri's mom comes but look the writer doesn't use it...the clearing of MU was so rushed. ...anyway I just loved this...

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Navin

@napstermonster

Voyager

+ 7

Posted: 8 years ago

#13

This one made me emotional, and mad at the same time--why cant we have grace and tenderness and nuance onscreen? Why cant we have this beautiful depiction of a woman's honor and a sensitive study of her strength onscreen?

Your work speaks to both the story line, and doesnt conflict with major developments to the overall story by giving them their own small bubble of growth. This is one of the myriad ways that Omkara and Gauri could be given both more screen space and more growth and development without having to introduce robots and boxes containing frozen vamps to make things happen. A courier package. Thats it. This is how you build and add layers to characters and to their love story--how beautiful and poignant this was!

I'm mad because-- Why can we have THIS Om and not the callous, stubborn idiot from DBO? Why must be deal with the hypocrite currently deciding if he will accept his angel of a wife when absolutely everyone other than him knows he doesn't even deserve her in the first place?

Thank you for a wonderful story, as always. This work also shows that us Shivikans can handle the Rikara story line with as much depth and emotional context as any Rikaran could expect from us -- we love both pairings, and can root for both! So, I'm feeling a touch smugly proud of you as well! Please keep writing, my love--this weekend looks promising, its absolutely raining One Shots! 😆

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praj

@Gratitude_Me

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#14

Someone please make sure writer of ib read this. This one is far better than current rikara track.😛😉

There are so amazing writers on forum.

I am glad at least I get to read better version of the rikara.👏

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Rati0992

@Rati0992

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#15

Hey
Very nicely written 😊

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Sayma Afrin Khan

@AfrinHrid

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#16

Nice update...👍🏼

continue soon...

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sky-if

@sky-if

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#17

How sweet! Just one small sequence is all it takes for Om to get the truth. And only when he learns the truth will their story progress 'cause he has to work to win her back.

On the show, I had really expected that Gauri's mom would be the one that would inadvertently break Kali Thakur's truth to Om but no idea what her visit accomplished.

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Vrinda

@vrindagupta

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#18

Perfect update

U made use of Gauri's mom

She was in OM

That could have atleast cleared the MU

Gauri is continuing her education

Wish CVs take inspiration from this FF

She even accepted pari

Omkara's love child

Now that truth is out

The preacher of truth

Has been proved wrong

Wonder how will he ask for her forgiveness

Cuz I know Gauri will forgive him

Which I don't want her to do easily

Waiting eagerly to read more

Update soon

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perFICtionist.

@perFICtionist.

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#19

Amazingly written! beautifully expressed! Gauri's apt reaction to om' queries pulled just the right chords! 👏

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Nirmala

@nim_var

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#20

Lovely OS. The MU between RiKara cleared without much fuss, the entire truth laid at his door. Om feeling burdened by the way he accused and treated Gauri.

Wish Gauri really pursues her education, a very smart girl who has a thirst for knowledge.

Wish we get something like this.