SS: The Journey To Love (Shivika & Obros) Part 1 updtd, pg3 (23rd)

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FoundLife

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Posted: 8 years ago

So guys I have mentioned about this before. So its kind of Shivaay's short redemption track, from an additional character's point of view. I'll update the rest of it according to your response.

Characters
All the characters in the show as such.
Pairings Same

The Priyanka Omkara accident past and ACP track stands cancelled!

Additional Cast
Divya Raichand ( Shrenu Parikh)
Riya Mehta - Main Protagonist
PA/ Secretary of SSO, 10% Anika, Practical, Modern Indian Girl
(Not a typical onscreen heroine or vamp!!)

{Suggest an actress : Requirements
Young Girl(21 or 22 years) Looks good in business wear & Desi Dresses. Looks Good with Nakul. Fair & Slim, Tall 😆 }

The story will be kind of in a third person PoV!!
What do you think guys??

Edited by MariaRebecca - 8 years ago

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Prologue

Omkara Singh Oberoi PoV
Anika had told my everything, her love for him. Everything that had happened between the two, which we were ignorant about. I felt for her, I felt bad, wrong. We had just tried to tie her up with Shivaay for his happiness, for his wellbeing. We actually never thought of her. We never did.

Shivaay was indeed bright today, all the problems were sorted out, the Kapoor Sisters exposed. The press meeting at the office went well. But he hadn't announced about his real marriage yet. As Tia was already married to Robin while she should have had married Shivaay, that marriage stands cancelled before public. But the real woman behind everything is still safe under the veil.

As we drove back he was singing a song or something. I felt weird. Rudra was sulking at the back seat while Saumya was trying to stop her flowing tears. I sat staring at my older brother.
S: I told her to come with us, but she is more interested in her 'taadi'
I looked at him quizzically. He blushed! Yes he did, he blushed at her mention, O God where is this heading to? I need to call up the doctor!!
What are you planning next Shivaay, I asked?
S: I need to announce our marriage.
A high pitched What!! chorus cut him off.
S: What? What..I need to announce my marriage with Anika, but before that I need to ask her or else she'll eat me up saying I'm doing 'taadi' and all. And she'll start her I won't talk to you, and Ill go insane..
I feared an attack while Rudra hid himself in Saumya's lap.
Sa: Baade bhaiya are you telling about Anika Di?
S: Not Didi, Bhabhi! You call me bhaiya right so she'll be your bhabhi too..
I heard saumya gasp as she clutched Rudra's hands.
R: Bhaiyya Please stop this now!
He snarled tears threatening to fall.
S: What happened you now? You all wanted this right?
I gave him a sheepish smile as we drove into the mansion. I saw a small velvet case in his hand. I stepped back and held
Rudra's hand, he cried into my shoulders while Saumya soothed his back.
We stood between the rest of the family, everyone was happy or the happiness and security had returned after a long time. I saw his gaze search for her, and his eyebrows twitched in frustration.
S: Where is Anika?
He asked Saumya & Rudra, who turned to look at me in horror.
He mumbed something about her being totally crazy and his lips curved into the happiest smile I had ever seen on his face. This was seriously going out of control, it had been like this every time the subject had been her. But he had always masked up his emotions and reprimanded us with a 'mujhe farak nahi padta'. But now, he is openly accepting the 'farak' in front of us.
I remembered Anika's version of it 'he'll never choose me, I'm too small for his world'. How ironic!!
After a good search he had come back totally irritated. He was now calling her name out while bending down to look under couches & divans, all those wierd places where she used to hide to ignore him. I walked towards him and sighed.
O: Shivaay, she left, she won't come back!
I could see, Saumya covering her eyes, from the corner of mine.
S: Matlab?
O: She just went away Shivaay, she was just fed up with you us..everything, let her be, she went through a lot. Let her live!!
Shivaay's face changed into a denial mode.
S: Why would she go, that too without telling me, and yesterday..
O: What did she do yesterday?

//Fb The Last Night
Shivaay was happy that finally that everything would be fine. He had found out that Mrs Kapoor was fooling him with Om's illegitimacy tale. Anika had actually setup a checkup for all the OM inhabitants and it had struck not one, but three targets. The sisterhood of Tia-Swetlana, The negative result of his & Tia's child and he had tried his luck with Om & Jhanvi's blood samples to get them positive.
So everything was perfect, it was just a day more, then he could tell her what she meant to him. Something he should have realised long ago, but was stupid not to. She entered wearing the white gownish nightwear.
A: Shivaay, will you have this?
She asked holding a plate of parathas and gravy. He wanted to show some attitude but he longed for her presence too. She broke a piece of the paratha dipped it in the gravy and forwarded it towards him. He was surprised but he had it, and then the realisation dawned on him.
S: Paneer Butter Masala?
A: Haan...I thought you won't eat if I told, last time I made you feel sick. So I made it with Saumya's help. Is it good?
He was amused with this cute innocent version of his taadibaaz billi
S: Yes Pannika (my Pussy cat!)
//

O: What do you think she had been doing?
He was lost in his Anika land, and he was startled by my question. He looked at me confused.
Sa: Making memories?

Saumya contributed.Yes she had been making memories, memories to keep herself breathing!!
Before Shivaay could process all these happenings, ChottiMa came rushing into the hall. Ughh.. Worst timing ever!!
P: Whats the happenings here?
R: Bhaabhi left, and she is not coming back.
Rudra let out with anger and disappointment clear in his voice.
P: Yeh toh acha hua, abh saara problems clear, now I doonds new girl for Shivaay!!
I stared at her in disbelief while the water jug on the table crashed on to the floor and the crystal scattered in different directions. ChottiMa screamed as Shivaay fumed!
P: You will kills your mother for that girl?
I was happy that ChottiMa didn't use any specific adjective for Anika. What could she use now?
S: Woh meri biwi thi aur hamesh rahengi!!
Shivaay's wild roar thundered through the mansion shaking all the glassware! He stomped towards his room followed by Me & Rudra, Saumya also stood behind us at a distance.
R: Kya Bhaiya you need Di back now why? why? to hurt her again?
Rudra spat fire!!
Knowing Shivaay's conditionI wanted to stop Rudra but he was mad with rage at this point of time. He looked affected by the fact that Rudra had addressed her 'Di'
R: Because of you, even we can't see her!
S: Look Rudra..I didn't mean to.I was going.
R: Do what bhaiya? I heard what you said to her in the Jungle..
Rudra searched his phone for the voice message he had accidentally got from Shivaay's phone while he was trying to contact me. He finally played it.
"Tume yaha lekar aya ,Kuch dino se achchi se baat ki tho, tu tho biwi ban bete ho meri..Kya tum is shaadi seriously le gayi ho Anika"
Shivaay's face hung in shame, he truly regretted what he had said. It was his anger, his fear of someone seeing him weak. But it would have been really traumatising for Anika. Rudra tried to walk away while I held his hand.
R: O, Bhaiya was getting real touch feely with Di and then he said all this? What would have she felt?
He had a point there. He turned to Shivaay.
R: We could see everything!!
After he walked away I held Shivaay's hand. I shouldn't be doing this now, but I felt like I couldn't wrong Bhaabi( feels nice) again!
O: He is right Shivaay. You had earlier blamed her with Daksh's incident then you had got 'touchy feely?' with her and after everything you did this? How would have she felt, a simple innocent girl like Anika?
I noticed a thin layer of tears forming in his eyes, he rushed inside the room and locked himself up.

Shivaay PoV
I felt OmRu's words ring in my ears, they were right I had made her feel so small. I tried to call her, but it buzzed somewhere near. She had left back that phone, the one I had gifted her.

The last night she had been crying and shivering I had thought she was just being worried about today. I had hugged her tight trying to comfort her and we had fallen asleep in each others arms. In the morning she had wished me best luck, but had denied to accompany for the press meet. I didn't know she had lined up something like this.

I was finding it difficult to breathe, the pain & emptiness cutting deep through my chest. I opened my wardrobe to pick up my night wear. I can't wear that white Kurta again, it has too many memories of her. I wanted to sleep, I felt drained out. That wine-red suit is lying on the corner of my bed. She might have had kept it there..I single tear drop made its way down from my eyes..

Omkara PoV
I heard the first crashing sound followed by a series of big & small ones. He had just let out an agonising wail. Rudra & I somehow broke opened the door. His room was a complete mess. Shattered glass & overturned furniture everywhere . He sat on the floor near the bed, leaning against it, resting his head on his hand. The rest of the family had assembled behind us. He had crushed the crystal curious with his hand and it was bleeding badly.

I had seen this coming, he had given his heart to her long ago, it was just his brain that denied to agree. He looked so broken and empty, I flopped on the ground next to him. As I ran my fingers through his messed up hair, he hugged me tight and sobbed into my shoulders.
S: Challi gayi woh...bataya bhi nahi, akele chod diya...mujhe Om!

"Jis din tujhe pyaar ho jayengi..tum roke meri paas avungi!"

So finally done with prologue or background story. Please cope with my horrible hindi, and you can correct me there.And do giveyour reviews, was it worth, where should I improve?

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rinku95

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Posted: 8 years ago

Superb prologue
Continue soon

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Nohsin10

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Posted: 8 years ago

It's awesome 👏👏.

Feeling bad for Shivaay but he deserves this 😭

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FoundLife

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: MysticRiver
Waiting..

Prologue updated!

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FoundLife

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Nohsin10
It's awesome👏👏.
Feeling bad for Shivaay but he deserves this😭

Thanks dear. I'm also very sensitive about Shivaay's feelings. But separation is seriously needed here!
I won't live through it on the show, seeing him break down now & then ( aww nakuul!)
😆 😆

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annniiii

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Posted: 8 years ago

superb as always... . He looked so broken and empty, I flopped on the ground next to him. As I ran my fingers through his messed up hair, he hugged me tight and sobbed into my shoulders.S: Challi gayi woh...bataya bhi nahi, akele chod diya...mujhe Om!...💔...🥺...oh! and thanks for the pm...continue soon

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FoundLife

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Originally posted by: annniii
superb as always... . He looked so broken and empty, I flopped on the ground next to him. As I ran my fingers through his messed up hair, he hugged me tight and sobbed into my shoulders.S: Challi gayi woh...bataya bhi nahi, akele chod diya...mujhe Om!...💔...🥺...oh! and thanks for the pm...continue soon

Tysm 🥳 I'm feeling at bliss seeing you quote my lines 😃

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ArhiIPKKND

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Posted: 8 years ago

Awww...so sad to see him like this but i like d way u hv set this up...annika deserves a proper everything...looking forward to this...

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1105905

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Hey Maria!
I really like what you wrote there. We do need Redemption track. Don't know whether they are gonna show it on the show or not, but glad we are getting to read it, even though its fiction. And about your Hindi, I think it was pretty good. So don't worry about that. You could use both the language ,(HinGlish) ,
Looking forward to read your next part anytime soon:)
Good going girl.
Cheers.

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