Medusa Ishkara SS chap 4 pg 15(17/9/16) - Page 5

Originally posted by: -Abhiya-

it was so brilliant

I loved it

I could feel Jaanvi and Om's pain

Loved how Om took that promise from Shivaye

And who was that girl u said Ishana will enter in next chapter so maybe its not her but her elder sis that part was amazing how perfectly you described her emotions

excited for next parts

cont soon

Originally posted by: aadi720

Wonderful update dear
You almost cast a spell without your words, which left me tangled in it.
You explained jhanvi's pain so well...
Omkara's feelings were so well written that I can actually feel it like my own...
The turmoil thorough which the girl going was heart wrenching and so well written, it gave me goosebumps
We got glimpse of Shivkara relation, it was so soothing
Overall amazing part...
Thanks for the pm and do continue whenever you get time

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Snow Queen!

This was a real treat. My imagination is burning with the vines of rapture you have woven with your words. It is seriously impactful and intense like I had hoped for.

I loved the fact that you gave us a glimpse of the childhood of Omkara. Jhanvi appeared indifferent to her husband's repeated attempts to break her but the shattering of Omkara's innocence is too big a shock for her to ignore. What she feared had come true!

And then a girl running from some men. Then the prey turns the predator. This scene was so beautifully penned down. I loved the line "the nature betrayed her". Gave me goosebumps!

I wonder who she is!!!!

Shivaay sees Om sitting on the terrace getting drenched in the out-pour and this time there is something different about him. A piece of his innocence is tarnished and blackened forever.

This part was so brilliant.

And the promise to keep a promise👏

I admire you for this.

Standing ovation!

Niki

Originally posted by: shreyatode1

Thanks for pm

N part was awsm

Continue soon

Originally posted by: BookWormV

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Originally posted by: rhea74

This is so beautiful and different. One that starts right from the beginning. This is so freaking awesome. The pain jhanvi was so beautifully described. And Om and shivaye. Please update soon. And do pm me.

Originally posted by: BookWormV

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Unres:

Sakura 😊
Vrinda Hey🤗
What a fantastic start.! The title was just perfect. That quote made complete sense to me. 😈 😛
Thank you so much dear, you know it means a lot.😃 Yes, it makes complete sense to me too...we are wicked minded people it seems😈
Goodness, your descriptions are just mind-blowing! I could imagine the thunder and lightening so vividly.That TejVi scene sent chills through me. You definitely know how to capture interest. I have always loved the backgrounds you give to characters. This one is no different. I absolutely loved how you have portrayed the relation between TejVi. Jhanvi's character is intriguing on the show and I really liked how she is portrayed here. She is trying to keep up the illusion of happy family for her kids so desperately and Tej is as desperately trying to get away from that illusion. It was absolutely brilliant.
You know I was half the time nervous about the descriptions, personally I find them boring, but too happy you found them worth the read. I wanted a solid background as always and tried to deliver that. TejVi has a lot of capacity here, both of them, with all their good and shades will play a part in their children's lives.
I so loved how you brought about the reason for Om's 'I hate lies' feelings. His illusion of happy famiky is shattered on a terrible night. It was oh so brilliant! 👏
That intense dislike has to have a strong reasoning right? I don't think he is an unreasonable guy, but someone who eve breathes for a reason..ie; his brothers😳
Mysterious teenager running from goons? ouch.. I love how you write mystery. My curiousity is at its heights already. She killed a person. At such an impressionable age that's got to kill her from within. The whole scene was surreal. The aftermath of killing the goon was so perfectly portrayed, hands shaking, seeing blood, something getting killed within... this was sheer perfection.
That part was the Sakura touch Won't tell you who she is, but so very glad she touched some part of your heart deep within. The girl, has a lot to do here, good and otherwise😉 The chapter was all about embracing your darkness, coming in terms with it. The girl did it the worst way possible, and Omkara took the first step towards it, only Shivay is there to pull him back, perhaps the girl might find someone to push her deeper?😕
So the goons wanted someone's location? If I hazard a guess that someone is obviously Ishaana? Has she witnessed something? This teenager is Anika? Are you planning to include something for ShivIka/AnShi?
Yes, the someone was Ishana... And yep the story does have a Shivika angle, not as much as it has Ishkara though...
I love Shivaay's protectiveness for his brothers. This last part was out of the world. The way you have shown how Om has lost a small tiny part of himself was just WOW! And Shivaay realises it. The kid in him asks desperately - do you promise to keep that promise? This line was heart breaking truly!
I adore that about Shivay, he is the mother lioness sometimes. Wanted to portray him in his best qualities before we go to the shades, the great wall of Shivay Singh Oberoi is something I can hardly Ignore. That line is the basement of the story...you'll see why, in future. 😉
You never, ever, ever disappoint. I am absolutely hooked, again. Seriously, can't wait for an update.

Love,
V😊

Originally posted by: Arshi67

The loss of the innocence of childhood, so beautifully portrayed with all three of them.