NEW FF - BIKHRE MOTI. Part 2 on page 5 . 14/1

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Hello all
My new ff bikhre moti . hope you all like it.
Story is totally different from serial .so plz don't compere it

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Prologue



Two people made for each other but something happen in their life. He bind her in bandhan n give her new life n she filled his life with so much happiness. But there are some people part of their life but they are like splitted pearl.
Will they become two end of a thread n collect all shattered pearl in thread of love . will they bind


"BIKHRE MOTI"


. Ek kahani koshish , pyar or umeed ki
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~Character sketch~

Omkara sing oberai -
26 year old young man .a handsome , calm n serious guy. He is new person who rent a room in Mini India colony of Mumbai. His only friend is virat who work in a big company. Right now he is jobless n homeless. But virat help him to rent that room at his relative place. No one know more about him other then virat.

Virat arora - he is college friend n bff of om.a fun loving n sweet guy.he is engaged with mona.


Vardan mehta -
A kindhearted soft n helpful man in his late 50's. He is principle of govt school in Mumbai. Believe in humanity n morals .teach children for free who is in need. Husband of vidya n father of ishana and mona .



Vidya mehta -she i
s sweet n soft hearted house wife of vardan n mother of ishana n mona. She believe in family value n teach each her kid all morals.only worry of her is that her
daughters get married to a family who love her like they love her.




Ishana mehta -
25 year old elder daughter of mehta. Apple of eye of each family member.a traditional girl with modern thinking .she is a dance teaher . lovely , simple n friendly girl. But very sensitive n naive girl. Love her sister a lot her sis protect like bro. Great bonding with her would be bil virat

Mona mehta - younger daughter of mehta n younger sis of ishana. Engaged with virat. Love him a lot. She is younger baby of ishana but protect ishana like bro. A smart n confident girl . she is waiting for her sister marriage after that she will marry virat.



Rest character as story progressed...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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interesting concept
please update soon
pm me
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: rinku95

interesting concept

please update soon
pm me



Thanks dear
Yeah I'll sure pm you
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Abhiya-

interesting

cont soon


Thanks
Yeah I'll soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice one
Update soon and do Pm me
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Originally posted by: KRITII

Nice one

Update soon and do Pm me

Thankq😊
Will soon
Yeah sure will pm you
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Part 1




One man is standing out side a chawl type area seeing a board in curve shape .mini india colony name written on board.

Somoone put hand on his shoulder . he look at hand on his shoulder n then that man. He look at his friend.

He sigh n took his luggage n
Another man also has some luggage. Both enter a house in a chawl n second man come forward n take their blessings. Then first man also bend down n take their blessings.

2 man - papa ji ye mera best friend hai om jiske bare mai aapko bataya tha. Ise hi room rent par chahiye par abhi iske pas deposit or rent dene k paise nahi hai.
Par ye aapko jarur de dega. kafi samay se janta hu ise.

Va ( vardan ish's baba) - koi bat nahi beta tu laya hai to pakka accha hi admi hoga. Koi bat nahi paise ka to koi tension hi nahi .bad mai de dena.

Vir - haa papaji Badi mushkil mai hai abhi is waqt.

Vid - koi bat nahi dikra ( son) tera dost hai na to hum iski help karenge . naam kya hai iska

Vir - omkara Singh

Vid - accha

Ch - ha mummy . ishu or Mona kaha hai.

Var - ishana to dance class gayi hai.Or mona office gayi hai.( she work in a company as office assistantmona
Vidya offer them tea n breakfast and vardan give them keys of their roomwith kitchen n latbath attach to them. Virat n om take luggage n shif to room which is beside their house.

Om sit on bad defeatedly n virat put his hand on him.

Vir - sambhal khud ko . Ab chod wo sab.I am sure tujhe yaha bahut accha lagega.

Ar - thanks viru tune mujhe is waqt itna support kiya hai thanku. Warna mai ye kabhi nahi kar pata .

Vir - hum dost hai om or Jo tune mere liye humesha kiya uska kya maine Jo ye to uske aage bahut kam hai.

Om - tu bhi na Viru kab tak wo sab lekar baitha rahega. Khair sorry yar meri wajah se tujhe apne would be inlaws ko jhut bolna pada.

Vir- chal bhi. Maine jhut nhi bola bas sach chupaya hai.

Om- mai kaise wo sach k sath yaha reh sakta tha isiliye

Vir - chal chod .dekh sab set ho gaya hai.or ye mom ne tere liye tifin bheja hai kha Lena .mai chalta hu.

Virat leave n om settle himself n take food sent by virat 's mom.

At evening

Om is laying on back n starring at ceiling

Knock knock

Knock on door

He stand up n open door a young girl with smile at him.he also try to smile

Om- are mona bhabhi aap aaiye

Mon - ohh hii Bahiya . kaisa lag raha hai yaha .aapke g

Om- plz bhabhi don't talk about that

Mo - hmm.so all set .kaisa lag raha hai mini India mai.

Om - its fine here .waise maine abhi is room or apke hall k alawa kuch nahi dekha.

Mo - ohh koi nahi no fear when I'm here.waise bhi is colony ka naam mini India hai jaise humra India sabko khule dil se apnata hai waise hi humari colony bhi yaha ane walo ko dil se gale lagati hai.so welcome to our heart om Bhaiya.

He hug her.om smile n feel her care n concern

Om - thanks bhabhi n sorry meri wajah she aap ne.bhi apne parents ko



Mo - Offo aap bhi na .ap virat k dost cum bhai hai. Or rahi bat meri family ki to koi fark nahi padta wo mind nahi karenge.they are so sweer

Om - hmm..wo to hai bhabhi.

Both smile n mona jokes make him smile n reduce his uncomfort to new environment.

Mo - waise mujhe virat ne call kiya tha or bataya tha apko job chahiye.

Om - haa wo bhi urgent


Mo - ohh.then aisa karo kal mere sath chalna meri company k malik se apko introduce kar dungi.dekhte hai kya hota hai.

Om - thanku bhabhi

Mo - its ok bhai.to kal thik 10 baje humare ghar aa jana. Or plz don't call me bhabhi.it feel so old or mai to apse choti bhi hu.

She pout

Om - to kya bolu.

Mo - simple bas Mona .

Om - ok done BH..ahh mona

Next morning

Om wake up at 7 am .he freashnup n come out .he see vidya

Om- good morning aunty

She smile n wish him back.

Vid - beta mai batana bhul gayi.peene ka pani k nal 8 baje ayenge pani bhar lena

Om- ji aunty

She smile n go to her house

At 8 am

Om come out of his room with 2 buckets.

He is shocked to see a big line in front of him his face show a shocked expression

Tabhi

Ha ha ha kya dekh rahe ho kabhi chawl mai nahi gaye kya aaj se pehle.

He see in voice direction its a girl.om move his head in no mechanically.

Gi - hii I am soumya . aap vardan kaka k tenent hai na.

Om - hmm.

Sou - ohh..mai mona or ishana ki bachpan ki dost hu.

Om - ohh aap yahi rehti hai.par ye sab kya hai

So - ohh to aisa hai mere bhai ye line pani k liye lagi hai.yaha pani ki Badi Mara mari hai. Aise hi bharna padega .or kabhi kabhi to pani bharne k lite dance competition bhi hota hai.

Om face show horror.

Om- par mujhe dance nahi aata.

Soumya laugh

So - sorry joke tha. Dance competition to nahi par ye line competition jarur hota hai. Humare yaha to ayi ye kam karte hai.ab jaldi jao.

Om move his head obediently.he goes to line.

He wait for his no.but one man come

Man - ye meri jagah hai yaha mai lagta hu.

Om- ok

Or wo ek no piche chala jata hai.

Aise hi kuch log ise fool banate hai.

Or jab om ka no aata hai nal chale jate hai.

Om - what nal chale gaye ab pani

Tabhi

Use ek khanakti hui hasi Sinai deti hai wo us taraf dekhta hai.waha ek ladki Jo mid or early 20 mai hogi khadi hui has rahi hai. Usne brown suit pehna hai. Side Choti n small bindi on forehead bangles in hand.looking very beautiful.

Om look at her

Gi- aise kya dekh rahe ho.tumne Jo kiya hai uske bad hasungi hi na.

Om - Maine .Maine kya kiya

Gi - kya kiya. Laugh. Are aise sabke liye apni jagah chodoge to bhar liya pani. Laugh.

Om - par un kaka ka no or un Dada ko imp kam tha.or
Wo

Gi - unhone tumhe buddhu banaya silkyji

Ar - kya mujhe buddhu banaya .or ye silky ji kya hai.

He is confused n irritated

gi - silky ji tum .tumhare bal kitne silky or cute hai.or kitne bhole ho inlogone tumhe buddhu banaya . Ye lo mujhse pani le lo .par kal se time par aa Jana mai sikha dungi tumhe kaise pani bharte hai.

She give her beautiful smile.

Om- mera naam omkara hai.

Gi - or mai ishana

Ishkara - matlab tum meri makan Malkin /mere kiraydar ho.

Ishkara - haa

Both laugh .

Om - by the way thanks khushi

Ish - khushi ..ye kya hai.

Om- jaise mai silky ji waise tum
Khushi

Ish - matlab

Om- matlab tumne mujhe pani dekar meri help ki or mere face par smile layi or mujhe tumse milkar bahut khushi hui.

Both smile n go to their houses.

TBC...


Precap - om's job interview. Om effort to adjust in chawl.ishkara scenes.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awsm update,
Thnx 4 the p.m
Conti s0onish

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