Two part Short story... Part 2 updated

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"Sagarika... Saga-- aap yaha hai. Sab log aapka intezaar kar rahe hai, chaliye."

Bounty smiled at his wife, who was sitting on the bed sewing something. She looked up at him and blinked. His smile disappeared when she put the stuff on the bed, and got up, fixing her saree. Her eyes were sad and there was no indication in her face that she had been smiled in a while.

"Chaliye."

Sagarika walked past Bunty and down the stairs where everyone was without a second glance at him. She looked at everyone without really seeing anyone. She smiled robotically, pretended to enjoy herself. It was Swara, her sister-in-law's birthday party after all.

Even though she was the daughter in law of the house, and there were guests, strangers, present, no one looked as out of place as she did.

She felt numb. She was neither happy nor sad, neither angry nor elated. She was just... there. It had been 6 months since her wedding, and she was so miserable that she had been rendered numb.

Bunty watched as Sagarika slipped into a corner quietly, and get lost in her own world. He feared for her health sometime. Not physically but her mental health. She had gone strangely quiet in the last few months. He had visibly seen a change in her behavior. There was no expression in her face, and even if there were, they were fake. Her eyes told the real story: they were always so sad. The smile he'd fallen in love with hadn't made an appearance in months, and it worried him.

Making up his mind to make her happy again, Bunty approached Sagarika.

"Sagarika, kal na hum-aap aur main, picture dekhne chalte hai. Shahrukh Khan aapka favorite hero hai na? Uska hi koi film dekhenge." Bunty said.

"Ammaji ko acha nahi lagega. Aap Swara aur Ammaji ko le jaiye, unhe achcha lagega." Sagarika said it almost monotonously.

"Arre, hum amma aur Swara ko kyun lejaye humari pyaari patni ko chodke?" Bunty rebuttled. He took her hand in his and grinned, "kal toh hum aapko hi lekar jaayenge. 5 bane tayyar rehna."

"Bunty--"

"Arre Bunty, tum udhar kaha beth rahe ho. Idhar aao, tumhari behen ki maange suno. Tumhe hi to pure karne hai."

Before Bunty had a chance to say anything, Sagarika spoke up. "Jaiye Bunty, aapki jaga waha hai, yaha nahi. Plus aaj Swara ka din hai, jaiye."

Sagarika watched as the entire family surrounded Swara and laughed and joked. "What you just told Bunty is correct... His place is not with you but with his family. And you really are the outsider. Even Satya is more of a family than you are."

"Beta, bas dekhneka irada hai yah waha Jana bhi hai?" Babu ji came and sat next to Sagarika.

Sagarika turned to babu ji and to his surprise, there were tears in her eyes. "Please... Please mujhse apna wada wapas lijiye. Please."

"Chalo, walk par chalte hai."

Sagarika and babu ji went out of the house and start walking quietly, except for sagarika's sniffles as she's crying.

"Tum sachmuch yaha se jana chahti ho?"

"6 mahine ho gaye hai, babu ji, humari shaadi ko. Maine bahat try kiya adjust karne ki. Maine try kiya ladne ki, jhagadne ki. Maine yaha tak try kiya ki Jo Ammaji bolengi main wahi karungi. Lekin Ammaji ne na mujhe kabhi apna mana hai aur na manengi. Isse pehle ki main nafrat ki aag main chaknachur ho jau, mujhe mukti dijiye is life se," Sagarika requested, and then confessed, "I am miserable babu ji."

Finally, Sagarika burst into tears. Babu ji pulled her into his arms, his eyes welling up. "Tumhari Ammaji aur Bunty dono hi bahat unlucky log hai. Ek tumhe pehchaan nahi paya, aur doosre ne pehchana bhi to kadar nahi kar paya." Babu ji wiped the tears from her face, "aaj main tumhe us wade se mukt karta hoon Jo mane tumse liya tha 2 mahine pehle. Tum ghar chodkar ja sakti ho, beti. Main tumhe nahi rokunga."

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4 days later-

"Sagarika yeh sab kya hai?" Bunty asked Sagarika as she packed her stuff. "Aap kahi ja rahi hai?"

"Ghar."

"Oh, aapke baba ka ghar? Sab kuch thik to hai na?" Bunty looked worried, "aapke baba or buaji thik to hai na?"

"Woh sab thik hai."

"Aap wapas kab aarahi hai?" Bunty continued to watch Sagarika's face. The lack of expression was making his nervous.

"Kabhi nahi."

"Yeh... Yeh aap kya keh rahi hain, Sagarika?"

"Main ghar ja rahi hoon, hamesha ke liye."

"Lekin yeh bhi toh--"

"Nahi Bunty, yeh mat kehna hi yeh bhi to mera hi ghar hai. Sabne base baar prove kiya hai yeh ghar mera nahi hai." Sagarika closed her suitcase and turned to look at Bunty, "zindagi bhar hum shayad pyaar sirf aapse karenge, par shaadike har bandhan se ab hume nafrat hone lagi hai. Sare kasme wade jhoote hai, sare rasme jhooti hai. Aap jhoote hai, humara rishta jhoota hai." Sagarika took a deep, shuddering breath while Bunty gaped at her with wide shocked eyes. "Aap beta bahat achche hai Bunty, lekin achche pati nahi ban paye."

Sagarika wiped her tears that she had not even know existed and sniffled. She walked up to the dresser and handed his a file, "yeh rahe humare talak ke papers."

"Ta...talak?" Bunty was more shocked than he had eve been his life. "Par..."

"Maine already sign karliya hai, aap karke Bhupali ko dedena. Woh submit kar degi papers." Sagarika grabbed her suitcase and stood in front of Bunty, "kuch mahino main sab kuch finalize ho jaayenge. Phil aap Ammaji ke pasand ke saath shaadi kar lijiyega. Phil aapko dono ke beech phas na nahi padega. Have a good life Bunty."

Sagarika walked away leaving a shocked Bunty in his room.

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3 years later...

"Mamoni, kiya kar rahi ho?"

"Baba, one selfie. Aiye na! Just one." Sagarika pulled her father closer to herself to take a picture with her phone. " Acha now tell me, Bhupali kaha hai? Aur hamare hone wale jeejaji? I haven't even met him yet!"

"Mamoni, relax. Abhi to aayi ho, Thoda relax karo."

"Baba...I --"

Sagarika froze as she saw Bunty standing at the entrance of her house. Her heart filled partly with misery and partly with happiness. A part of her wanted to run to him and forget the world, the other part, more practical part, wanted to kick him out of her baba's house.

With a heavy heart she smiled at Bunty. "Hi Bunty, aap kaise hai?"

"Hum thik hai." Bunty just stood there with a blank expression on his face.

"Aur gharme sab kaise hai? Suna hai Pappu bhaiya papa ban Gaye hai?"

"Haan, Ratna didi ka bhi chautha mahina chal raha hai."

"Aur Swara? Woh computers main masters karna chahti thi. Usse... Permission mili?"

"Haan, Babuji ne--"

"Beta Bunty, come inside. Waha se kab se baat kar rahe ho. Come in. Main tumhari liye chai lata hoon"

Sagarika frowned as she watched her father go into the kitchen. What was going on? Why was Bunty here? How could her father just leave her here alone with Bunty? Sagarika was suddenly startled out of her trance by Bunty's proximity. He was standing uncomfortably close to her. Now that he was closer she notices some things about him. His eyes had bags under them, his forehead had worry creases on the . The lines by his mouth from his smiles were strangely missing. And now that she looked at his entire body, he seemed slimmer than she remembered.

While Sagarika was observing Bunty, he was doing the same with her. She had lost weight too. She looked anorexic at best, and a tiredness to her that did not suit her. The smile he was crazy about was lacking, and did not quite reach her eyes.

"Why did you leave me?"

Sagarika was startled.

"Why did you let me go?"

Bunty placed a hand on her cheek, "aap bas... Chali gayi. Ek baar nahi socha ki aapke bina aapke is Bunty ka kya hota?"

"Aur aapne yeh nahi socha ki mujhpe kya beeti hogi ke mujhe yaha chodke wapas London Jana pada. Aapke liye aapki Ammaji thi Jo aapko samhal sake. Who did I have? In London?" Sagarika closed her eyes with remembered pain, "aap hamesha chahte rahe ki main aapki nazariye se dekhun. Did you ever try to see things from my perspective?"

Bunty was struck dumb. Had he done that? Had he not tried to see things from her perspective?

"Forget it. Ab in sabko discuss kar ke kya faida? Hamari divorce ho chuki hai."

Sagarika took a few steps back. "By the way, Satya kaisi hai? I bet she won't be happy you're here with me."

"We're not divorced. Humne talak ke papers sign hi nahi kiye. I never signed them."

I'm working on part two, I'll post it tomorrow!

Edited by MUNNIBABA2009 - 10 years ago

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VerboseG thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Loved this story... wish it comes true!
Waiting eagerly for part 2!
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Very interesting, loved the way you have described Sagarika. I wish CVs would take inspiration from this story, thank you!
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Nice Story, Loved the way you described Sagaarika's emotions. Next story please😃
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Amazing story! Can't wait for part two!
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Well written story TM . Waiting for the part 2 😊
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@TM show Sagaarika and Bunty in a progressive way. Not the way they are showing in the show. Eagerly waiting for part 2
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Munni [can I call you like this ?] a well written story . After Seetha , there is no well written story so far . Waiting for the second part . Give due importance to Sagz and her dreams . She must be the decision maker , not a lame follower !
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Really lied the story, but the law-studying part of me is nnot agreeing to a point. If Bunty had not sgned hte paers then wouldn't Sags have known about it before.


Simply signing a Divorse papers does nto guarantee a divorse. There is also registering of the papers and some court appearances even when the Divorse is mutual.


Baki sab toh stor mein bhadhiya hai. It is just that part which I am not agreeing with.

I'm sorry lekin mein apke story mein nuks nikalna nahi chahati lekin mere andar ka hone wala lawyer agree nahi karta.

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"We're not divorced. Humne talak ke papers sign hi nahi kiye. I never signed them."

"So we are separated, it's the same thing." Sagarika folded her arms.

"Nahi, yeh ek hi baat nahi hai. Lawfully hum aur aap abhi bhi pati patni hai. Alag ho jaane se rishte khatam nahi hote." Bunty said.

"Aur sirf naam ke pati-patni hojanese rishte nahi judte." Sagarika retorted. "Aap kya chahte the Bunty? Main wahi rehke, eventually ammaji aur apse nafrat karne lagu? I was hurt, Bunty, very hurt. Aur jab main sochti hoon uske baareme, I get hurt all over again. Lekin Maine kabhi kissise nafrat nahi ki. Main aaj bhi apse utna hi pyaar karti hoon, aur ammaji ki izzat bhi."

Floored by her confession, Bunty took a step forward. "Hum bhi to apko pagalon ki tarah pyaar Karte hain." He raised his arms to embrace her but was stunned when she took a step backwards, and raised her hand signaling him to stop.

"Maine kabhi apke pyaar ko question nahi kiya. Him dono ek dusrese bahat pyaar Karte hain. No doubt about it. Lekin hamara rishta kabhi kamiyaab nahi ho sakta." Sagarika gave a sad smile.

"Dekho Sagarika, amma---"

"Nahi Bunty, don't bring ammaji into this. Unki koi galati nahi hai, not in our marriage." Sagarika interrupted. "Shaadi do logo ke beech hoti hai. Aapke aur mere beech hui thi. Yeh kamiyaab hoti, to hamari wajah se. Nakamiyaab hui hai to bhi hamari wajah se: aapki aur meri."

Bunty and Sagarika continued to stare at each other.

"Thik hai kamiyaab nahi hui hamari shaadi, aur mana gunehgaar hum aur aap hai. Lekin yehi baat aap 3 saal pehle bhi to bol sakti thi. We could have resolved it then. Aap chodkar gayi, wo bhi seedhe london."

"Aur nahi to kya karti?" A tear rolled down her cheek, "aap phir se koi promise karke mujhe wapas lejate. Main bahat hurt thi tab. I was starved for love, for some attention. Agar aap lene aate to main khushi khushi aapke saath wapas aajati. Lekin mujhe yeh yakeen tha ki agar main london gayi to aap nahi aapayenge. Apne ghar ko chodkar, apne parivaar ko chodkar. Apni amma ko chodkar." Sagarika looked at him, almost accusatory, "aur mujhe yeh bhi yakeen that ki agar main wapas us ghar main gayi to main puri tarahse toot jati. At least london main rehkar, I got to regroup an find myself again."

"Are you happy now?" Bunty asked softly. "In London, are you happy? Parivaar ke bina. Aapke baba aur Pishima ke bina. Hamare bina."

"Jitna khush ho sakti thi, utna hoon." Sagarika smiled tearfully, "acha Kaam hai. Acha ghar hai. Dost hain Jo mujhe bahat pyaar Karte hain. Sabki yaad bahat aati thi lekin."

"And are you fulfilled? Kya aap aise hi zindagi bita payengi?"

"Aapke saath wapas aake main fulfil hojaungi?" Sagarika questioned, "at least London main rehkar meri ek life hai. Aap nahi the, lekin apni pehchan hai. Main Sagarika hoon, a businesswoman, ek entrepreneur. Apna boutique hai mera. Azaadi ki sans le sakti hoon. Jab chahun apne baba se baat kar sakti hoon, jab chahun Bhupali se har baat share kar sakti hoon. Aap bataiye Bunty, aapke saath rehti ho kya wajood reh jata mera?"

Bunty tried to speak but Sagarika continued, "aaj aapko meri baat Sunna padega Bunty!" Sagarika pointed a finger at him, "sochiye. Why did I marry you? Kya mujhe pehle se hi pata nahi tha ki Ammaji mujhe pasand nahi karti hai? Kya nahi bataya tha Maine aapko jab aapne pehli baar propose kiya tha?"

Sagarika's baba stayed in the kitchen wanting to give them some privacy. He was weirdly enjoying the conversation though. His cell phone vibrated.

"Hello?" He whispered.

"Bunty pohach Gaya?"

"Haan Haan, he's here. Dono ki baatein chal rahi hai. Dono ne confess bhi karliya hai ke ow dono ek doosrese pyaar karte hai."

"Acha? Yeh to bahat achi baat hai. In dono ka bas ab

Meanwhile, Sagarika and Bunty were still arguing.

"Aapne baar baar mujhe yakeen dilaya ki Ammaji mujhe apna lengi. Har din, har pal unki tane Sunna pade, apna wajood khona pade, Woh har chez karna pade aur Phir bhi apna pati ka saath tak na mile to aapko kaisa lagta?"

Bunty stared at her dumbfounded. She was bringing up points he'd never even considered.

"Chalo manliya k main Woh sab kuch sehti. Main tane sunti, sab kuch karti, agar aapne mera saath diya hota to. Agar aap apne vaade pure kiye hite to. Ammaji ko mera naam badalna tha, mein nahi chahti thi, par aapne kuch nahi kaha. Wo Satya ko baar baar meri Jagah deti gayi, aapne kuch nahi kaha. Yaha tak ki hamari shaadi ke waqt aap mujhe beech mein chodkar Gaye. Maine aapse kabhi yeh nahi kaha ke mere aur Ammaji ke beech mein ek ko chunna padega. Lekin main yeh bhi expect karti hoon ki mera pati mera saath de when things are important to me."

"Sagarika..." Bunty took her hand in his. "Sagarika, hum hamesha aapke saath hi hain."

"Nahi Bunty, aap kabhi humare saath nahi the." Sagarika tried to take hand out of his.

"Sagarika hum--."

"Ek aur vaada mat karna Bunty. Phirse todne ke liye ek aur vaada mat karna."

"Nahi Sagarika. Amma hamari pran hai to aap hamari jaan hai. Hum apni jaan ke bina kaise rahe?"

"Teen saal to reh liya na? Aap rehlenge. Aur Satya to--"

"Satya chudail hai. Amma ka kaan woh hi bharti rahi hai itne saal." Bunty said angrily. Almost agitated, he took her hand and made her sit down. He kneeled in front of her, "Sagarika yeh teen saal humne kaise kata hai yeh bas hame hi pata hai. Aap sach keh rahi thi, humne Aapka saath nahi diya jab aapko hamare saath ki sabse zyaada zaroorat thi. Hame please maan kar dijiye. Please."

"Bunty."

"Nahi Sagarika, bas aap hamare saath ghar chaliye."

"Bunty woh mera ghar nahi hai."

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Few hours later, Bunty managed to drag Sagarika over to his house.

"Bunty, chodiye mujhe. Bunty!"

Everyone was sitting outside in the aangan. Pappu and Rani were playing with their son. Babuji was reading newspaper. Ammaji and Swara were peeling potatoes. They all looked up when they saw Bunty bring Sagarika in.

"Bunty chodiye!" Sagarika finally pulled her arm away from Bunty. It was too late though. Everyone had already seen her.


"Yeh sab kya hai Bunty?" Ammaji asked, angrily.

"Kya hai, amma? Hum bas apni patni ko ghar wapas le aaye hai."

" kyun?" Rani blurted out, then silenced herself.

"Kyunki yeh hamari patni hai aur unki Jagah yaha hai, hum sab ke saath."

Sagarika, feeling uncomfortable tried to leave but Bunty interlocked his hands with her. "Hum ek baat sabse kehna chahte hai. Yeh hai Sagarika," he looked pointedly at amma, "hamari patni, SA-GA-RI-KA. Inka is ghar mein tuna hi hak hai, jitna hamari hai. Yeh chod kar gayi thi, lekin ab woh wapas aarahi hai yahi. Main wapas lekar aaunga."

He turned to Sagarika without giving anyone a chance to say anything. "Aap wapas yahi aarahi hai Sagarika. Hum hak se keh rahe hain ki hum aapko koi shikayat ka mauka nahi denge."

"Bunty yeh--"

"Sagarika, aap chinta mat keejiye. Hum hain na."


Hey guys. Hope you liked this part. The ending is a bit rushed because I'm half asleep right now and don't actually know what I'm writing anymore. I didn't wanna have a random change in character for amma and everything to be resolved suddenly. Just wanted Bunty to understand Sagarika's point of view and stand up for her. Hopefully it wasn't too disappointing. Thanks for all the comments. Lemme know if you guys wanna read anything else I write. Or if you have ideas or a brief how the story should go and I can write it. ^_^



Edited by MUNNIBABA2009 - 10 years ago

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