Destructive Love/Pg.146-16Oct - Page 73

catching up with all parts now..

Part 1 - 3
the way you have described the characters of Maaneet..and the scenes, dialogues you write to develop them, underlining their characteristics, it is amazing...

that ek guroor and ek junoon is apt to describe Maan..
the egoistic, powerful person..
the junoon for fulfilling his dream project, the level of hatred he carried for Handas..
the smart, clever player..
the way he kept calm during the laptop incident and used it for his own advantage later..
and the soft side of his personality...bonding with his sister
and somewhat started developing a soft corner for Geet as well...
loved his saying during Geet's kidnap..the one with - ''jaise dhoop pe koi paaon nahi rakh sakata..."

Part 4 - 6

Geet's innocent, stubborn nature which lets her can believe others easily...
and Darji is right in saying that she is like that dew drop, which can quench the fire..
so, it started as a hate and love story between Maaneet, and though he said he will never forget she is also a Handa, he felt guilty, regretted his actions when she got hurt because of him..the changes in the him are obvious when she is with him..

and wow for that dialogue -- "kash tum tum na hoti, main main na hota..hum sirf Maan and Geet hote, toh kaisa hota..."
Then It would have been easy for him to accept his feeling without having the hatred for Handas in between them..but in a way, he has he has admitted that he has feelings for her...

Part 7 - 9

Saleet is too good..jaroor Maan ne kuchh achchhe kaam kiye the, jiski vajah se he got Saleel as his friend :)
the way he easily made friends with Geet...him and Dadima playing cupid for Maaneet..
he knows how to press the exact nerve and lift the ego of Maaneet to persuade them for making Geet work in his office..
and he is the one who keeps Maan's conscience awake, advises him about the right side and tries to stop him doing any wrong things like a true friend..

Part 10 - 12

love the way you make the leads of your stories fall in love...bit by bit, gradually just like the blooming of flowers..
and not only the main leads Maan and Geet, but also the supporting ones like Jay and Shefali..

Maaneet date was fabulous..simple and honest talk of the truth and feelings in their hearts...
which was followed by the jealousy and possessiveness for each other..Natasha and Rishi got a major role to play in that..but all in all this helped love to bloom for both the couples..

Part 13 - 15

that was shocking...Maan was behind her shares..all that was a trap !!

though I did not like Maan playing with her emotions specially when Geet is immensely in love with him, I must say that was a fantastic turn to the story..so that way I liked it very much..he did all this to get the land..now I realize all the time he really played it in a shrewd way..he made her confess but he himself never did it..but really loved the way you used a bit of grey shade in his character for the story..

he feels that she will be ready to do anything for him, but he is not aware that he himself is trapped in her love, and there is no escape to it..
the thing that he left the deal with Natasha for Geet is enough to confirm that he is in love with her..

finally his conscience got him the dream about his father not talking to him..he tried to suppress his conscience but he knows what he is doing is not right..he has already started feeling guilty about it..

Idiotic geet and idiotic dev. I so hate geet I wish maan wild take akeel away from her, she was never a good wife/lover or a mother now. All she thinks is about herself.

nice part
Loved Maan and Akheel's bonding a lot
Definitly Akheel is a very sweet child
Poor thing wants to become strong so that he can fight with Dev
Dev is such a pest yaar
I hope Maan is able to explain Geet what Dev is doing with her little life

Part-

Akhil:kal papa meeting k lye jaeynge out of town.phir ek din bad aaeynge to chance hai.Aap mom se baat kr skte ho.
Maan sitting wid him on bench,in school area,snapped:agr wo nhe bhi jate to men khud aaj tumhare ghar aane wala tha.
Only his heart knew how terribly he wanted to kick dt evil ass & strangle his neck to death.Akhil shook his head,the fear was clear on his innocent face:unhe pta nhe chlna chahey.wo mujhe bhi mar denge aur mom ko bhi.
Maan frustated ran fingers in his hairs.To get his innocent assurance he had to work wid patience:everything will be fine.mat daro.
He shudred:men darta nhe hun.Maan slipped arm around him,smiled at his strength:i know.jb tumhare papa meeting k lye shehr se bahir jaeynge to men tumhari mom se baat krne aaunga.Par as u said i ll wait for ur call first.
To Maan disapointment his bus arrived & he found his heart sequezed as he waved bye.He couldnt control,pulling him once again in a hug"everything will be fine" he assured Akhil & himself.
As he walked back to his car he found Jay,probably came to pick Sam from school.Maan walked to him sensing his frozen state.Jay abruptly closed his open mouth:umm sir aap yahan.I mean mujhe lga aap Shimla se chle gae honge.
"aaj tk mene koi kaam adhura choda hai?Itna to tum jante ho mujhe Jay.Arent you?"He went back to his car & drove away while Jay rooted on spot.His X boss mocking tone,challenging gaze was enough to sense da intensity of trouble.

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Shefali excitedly:ab to tum Sam ko time par ghar le aaey.Now v can go on shopping.
Jay tensed:no jaan,we cant.Men Geet se milne ja rha hun.
Sam stopped taking out his shoes on finally hearing da most awaited Name.He quietly followed his parents to bedroom.Jay worriedly:mene Geet ko islye Sir k bare men nhe btaya tha men use preshan nhe krna chahta tha.mujhe to lga tha ek,do din men Sir chle jaeynge par u know what mene aaj unhe school men dekha.
Shefali:to kya Geet ko kuch btaya?
Jay:nhe,mene use yehi text kya buht zruri baat hai phone par nhe bta skta.mene Silver plaza bulaya hai.bs fresh ho kr ja rha hun.
Shefali left & Jay slammed da door of washroom.So getting da chance Sam get in & picked his papa cell from bed"Hello,Maan uncle"

~*~
"mujhe Geet ko btana hoga Maan k baare men is se pehle buht deyr ho jaey"Jay steeped out of car wid determination.

He took out his cell to call Geet & no of Maan in his dialed list wided his eyes"oh shit..men kese bhool gya ye Maan Singh Khuranna hai.Sam ye tum ne kya kyaa"

Geet impatiently looked at her watch"jay ko kya zruri baat btani thi..kyun bulaya hai mujhe yahan..kahan reh gya"

And then she found da world around her shatterd.Shiver ran down her spine as her eyes met wid Maan intense eyes...

The crowdy coffee area became deserted to her.All her senses could react to was da man infront of her.Shock was not the enough word on his sudden appearence after five Long years.She stood up on her trembling legs as he finally started taking steps to her,dangerously like always..His pace more determined,the span of time turned his features more sharp,those brown eyes on his handsome face was piercing her soul like always.
His eyes wided in surprise as she turned her back & almost started runing away from him.As fast as possible she lost in crowd & finally reached to elevator.In a quick swip she stepped inside & abruptly close it back.Resting her head back she closed her eyes.Her chest was constantly falling up & down because of her rapid breathing.Then her eyes snapped open to found him standing,so close.Her breath lost some where in her throat in effect of similar scent of his colonge."Geet" Her name from his lips like a drugged melody.The happiness was clearly visible in his dazed eyes.His hand lifted upto her soft hairs"in 5 saalo k hr mahine,hr din,hr pal men mrra hun.tumhe hmesha k lye kho dene ka darr ek zehar ki trhan behta rha hai meri rago me. .
His hand slipped down to cupping her chin:I . .
She pushed him away wid all her will she snapped:Mein shadi kr chuki hun.
Without looking him even for a moment she rushed out like a wind.

~*~


She jumped up in horror on sound of clicking door.Dev entered wid a sneeze"oh God,its just getting miserble"He luked up & in a moment his eyes became full of worry:kya hua?
She got up as he snezed once again:ek to pehle hi sar ka dard nhe ja rha tha,aur ab ye baarish ka tauhfa.
He surprise luked up as she started drying his hairs wid towel.Her face wid weavy hairs in moon light was luking so angelic,so beautiful"change krlo,men coffe lati hun.tablet le kr theek ho jao ge"He hold her wrists when she tried to left.To her confuse stare he made her sit next to him & replied wid a grin:ab men theek hun.
Geet first gave him a look & dn taunted:ho skta hai,par itne nhi k kal meeting attend krne ja sko.
Dev instantly raised up his hands:No yaar,its damn important.
Geet:par tumhe ab bhi fever hai.
Dev sighed:par ye buht confidentl hai,men kisi bhi employee par trust nhe kr skta.
Geet:to men jaungi.U take rest.Kyun men nhe kr skti?
Dev:mene kb kha.tum to khud he office se dour hui ho jb se bcho ka school start hua hai.i know u r best par.
Geet:to kal men jaungi,dts final.aur tum sara din ghar men rest kroge.
Dev sighed:Ok boss.

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Tip Tip Tip. .da tiny rain drops were still killing da silence of dark night.Slipping helplessly on da glass window like her tears.Instead of da warm robe around her she was shivering.Her skin was still freezing in effect of early encounter wid da familiar heat of
the man she loved more than words could describe.The man who had destroyed her heart,her soul,her beliefs,her strength.And now her face was completely pale just thinking da coming disaster.
He did not followed her , not call her from behind.No calls,No pounding on her door dts what making her stomach cling in fear because she knew it was silence before storm.Thats why she chosed to run wid excuse of meeting.It will be hard for him to track her in small town.And maybe because shortage of time he leave.
leave.she shudered on her heart whisper.Shaking her head in No she wiped her fresh tears:men doubara tumhe khud ko barbad nhi krne dungi.I will not let u win again Maan.Singh Khuranna...Never


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Sam tried to hide behind Shefali:mom please bchao.
Shefali complained:Jay bs kro,baby dar rha hai.
Jay snapped:iski maa kya kbhi mujhse dari hai jo ye mujh se dare ga?mujhe hi bewkof bnaya ja rha tha mere hi ghar men,mera hi phone aur wo bhi mera hi beta.Great!
Shefali signaled Sam to ran out in lawn while she sat wid him:Relax Jay ab gussa chod bhi do.
Jay worriedly:mujhe dar lag rha hai Shefali.pta nhe ab kya hoga.Geet ka to phone hi off hai.tum to janti ho Maan sir ko. .
Shefali: haan unko bhi aur unke pyar ko bhi.islye keh rhi hun dnt worry.To his confuse stare she added:unki life men kuch bhi hogya ho,dy love eachother we know.past men tum the unki love life men aur aaj tumhara beta..unka samna ek din to hona he tha.koi bhi story adhuri to nhe chodi jati.Kuch to End hona hi hai. .taufan aay ga to par dekho phr kya bchta hai?

~*~

After getting fresh Geet went down meeting area of hotel.The gathering of several buisness men were on sing.After greeting her client She kept her files down but da flowers in pot snatched colour from her face.Odd collection of Rose wid sunflower & tulips brought da memory of an unforgatble night.
"shopkeeper ne kaha sb phool ache hen to mene kaha sb ek ek de do"

She instantly stood up & looked around in horror but find no trace of him.To confuse stare of Mr.Sharma,Mrs.Suneeta & Mrs.Patel she requested:dusre table par bhet te hen.
She found her mind wanderd in meeting"kya Maan sch men yahan hai?"
As da discusion finally over Mr.Sharma declared to sign meeting in end of this party.She didnt knew what to feel on it.She had planned to spend a night,even 2 or more days here. .12 kilometr away from Shimla away from Maan but da bouqet mean hint of his precense around her.And now She just wanted to fly to some far castle before its too late.

~*~

Akhil slowly on phone:papa nhe gaey meeting par mom chli gaey,aap mt aana.
"kis se baat kr rhe ho?"Hearing Dev roar da kid throw back da phone in horror.Dev suspiciously checked da phone but da call had cut.He bent on his knees infront of Akhil.Akhil sequezed shut his eyes as Dev hand raised in air but stopped hearing Preet voice.The little doll ran coming toward them:papa medicine kha kr aap thek ho gaey,ab park chlen please.
Dev pulled his jaan in arms lovingly.Kissing her forehead:as u wish my baby.
She kissed him back:i love u papa.men apne shose pehnti hun.Akhil tum bhi tyar ho jao.I ll nt go widout u.
She ran away excitedly.Akhil looked wid fearful eyes as dy were alone once again.Dev smirked:dnt worry,men tumhe marunga nhi.men tang aa gya hun.mene decide kr lya hai tumhara permanent ilaj.men tumhe boarding bhejh rha hun,yahan se buht dur.hmesha k lye.
He got up,harshly:get ready,men nhi chahta Preet ka mood khrab ho.
Akhil went to his room wid trembling lips & teary eyes.Closing washroom door he brust into tears:mujhe mom aur Preet se dour nhe jana.plz help me my Angel. .my Maan.


Precap:His lips claimed her.

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