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Posted: 11 years ago
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Love stories ... we've read countless of them. Beautiful damsel in distress and her Prince Charming, stories of ugly beasts and pretty dames, even love stories of vampires, werewolves, modern love stories, passionate ones and cute ones ... but we never get enough of them. Love drives us all in one way or other.

This A-P-P-A-R-E-N-T-L-Y new story☺️ revolves around the lives of a young widow, with a 7 month baby boy and her young brother. Life has dealt them the wrong cards, and yet they strive to live each day, fighting all odds, and never giving up. Will there be a saviour in their lives, or will they save a wretched soul. This story is gonna be unpredictable like their lives ... hope some of you would like to join their journey through hardships and hope.

V. Imp: Please note!! So that you don't throw things (that I fear mentioning🤔) at me later. The plot and the main characters of this ff are inspired by a recent novel I had come across accidentally, since I am not much into pulp fiction, though I've written some exclusively for IF, and esp. MAANEET.

Will update the first part tonight or tomorrow. Wanna know what you think of this new beginning. I know I have an ongoing ff ... but currently I am blank regarding that. Will update that too when I get some start. Till then need your support on this. Do comment and give your tips regarding the unfurling of this story. I'll try to include them as well.


Title: Yet to finalise...still thinking on it.

Luv PJ😃

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Posted: 11 years ago
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will love to read it so update soon
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Happy Shiv-ratri to all😃


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*PROLOGUE*
:Escape from Hell:
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Intresting prologue. Would love to continue it.

Waiting for part 1
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Prologue

When a heart breaks there is no sound, since the cries drown in tears ... and sometimes the only sound is silence ... and there is no one to listen. Who knows how it sounds ... but I definitely feel it is painful, and perhaps that is why we refer to the hurt of highest order as heart breaking.

Uske dil ki siskiyon main itna dard tha ki khud bhagwaan ko bhi rona aa jaye. Phir kyun yeh sab hua? Iska jawaab na uske paas tha aur na hi mere.


She wanted to leave the party from the moment she entered, and breathe the fresh air. To be in the same room, seeing him, and breathing the same air was killing her, after what he did to her. She wanted to slap him, kill him, and rip his heart open just like he did to her. She tried but every step she took towards her goal was exhausting her emotionally. And then she saw him, laughing with his wife, who clung to him like he was some trophy, someone would steal away from her. She knew how fake his laughter was, because she had seen him smile from the bottom his heart, like an innocent child. She hates him so much ... Why? Why because he snatched away everything from her ... and she now lived only to avenge the murder of her baby and the butchering of her heart.

They were in close proximity now, she could feel it. Someone called her from behind, "GEET!"

She turned and with her he also turned hearing her name.

"Hi Geet. So long...Wow!" screamed the excited looking girl and hugged Geet. The girl then saw him and gaped in excitement, "OMG ... MAAN!! MAAN and GEET in my party. MAANEET!!"

...

The awkwardness increased and they both silently looked here and there, not knowing how to start. His wife threw daggers at Geet with her stares. He hasn't changed a bit, thought Geet ... so full of pretense, she smirked.

"Geet" finally he spoke her name and she knew her heart skipped a beat. She hated herself, even after all this she still loved him. She looked at him and saw his eyes were on her. Their eyes met, and all the pain came flooded, but pain was nothing compared to the love she had. They stood there lost in each other's eyes...but there was something amiss ... the depth perhaps once so evident in those muddy eyes.

The music brought them back to reality.

...

A few moments later ... the party lightened and everyone moved to their respective corners with their chats and all. Also the lights went away suddenly, but came back as quickly as it had gone.

Geet picked her bag to leave and that's when she heard him call her again, but this time it was so strong, the pull at her heart strings. If she hadn't turned back, the pain would have killed her. And there he was pulling her with his muddy eyes, this time not at all lacking in depth. An involuntary sigh of pain mixed with longing and love left her lips (Sorry I dunno what to call that emotion).

And Geet knew it is the last time she is going to see him. And just the thought brought a surge of emotions, and she didn't even know when her eyes filled and tears rolled down her cheeks.


Maan saw it and walked involuntarily towards her, under a strange pull.


Sameera his wife fumed, and stopped him. But he simply pulled off her hands holding his arm and walked towards Geet.

"What is wrong with him? He was alright till a few moments ago ... until this witch appeared. But he never dared to go against me ... he seems so different," she whined all artificially.


The lights dimmed and music began...

(Please listen to the song Lag Ja Gale by Lata Mangeshkar)

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lag ja gale ki phir ye hasin raat ho na ho

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shaayad phir is janam men mulaaqaat ho na ho

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lag jaa gale se ...


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hum ko mili hain aaj, ye ghadiyaan nasib se

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ji bhar ke dekh lijiye ham ko qarib se


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phir aap ke nasib men ye baat ho na ho

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shaayad phir is janam men mulaaqaat ho na ho



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lag ja gale


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paas aaiye ki ham nahin aaenge baar-baar

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baahen gale men daal ke ham ro le zaar-zaar

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aankhon se phir ye pyaar ki barasaat ho na ho

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shaayad phir is janam men mulaaqaat ho na ho

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lag ja gale ki phir ye hasin raat ho na ho


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shaayad phir is janam men mulaaqaat ho na ho

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lag ja gale

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lag ja gale ki phir ye hasin raat ho na ho

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"Geet" he called her, but she gave a tearful smirk.

"It is too late Maan ... too late."


She left.

Maan looked on helplessly, knowing that she was true.


"Ever has it been that love knows not its own depth until the hour of separation."

-Kahlil Gibran

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nice pro
But Maan is married
Death of her baby, Is their baby dead ??
How and Who is responsible !!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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lovely n interesting prologue. maan is married n geet lost her baby. y she wants to take revenge. eager to know so waiting
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: _BlackPearl_

Nice pro Thank you😃

But Maan is married Yup he is married and his wife is Sam/Sameera.
Death of her baby, Is their baby dead ??As told in the intro. this is the story of a young widow and her baby. Won't disclose much here...the truth will be revealed as the story unveils.
How and Who is responsible !!!Have patience.😉

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Originally posted by: farzu3008

lovely n interesting prologue. maan is married n geet lost her baby. y she wants to take revenge. eager to know so waiting


Glad you liked the prologue ... Promise to post soon.😃
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Escape from Hell

:Lights_flickered_and_her_beautiful_face_marred_with_terror_emerged_in the_wavering_play_of_light_and_shadow. Was_this_a_signal_for_her_to_go_on_with_her_plan:


The fateful night had arrived, and now there was no turning back. If she held back today, she's never leaving this hell hole EVER. Who was she kidding, she couldn't even breathe out of fear that gripped her mind, heart and soul with its vice grip. Rethinking on her decision was not an option for her, she had to save her child, and that was the only way.


...


:A_shabby_rickety_toddy_shop_in_a_village:


"Dev Babu, kya baat hai aaj ghar nahi jaana?"

"HUH!!! Ghar ... kya hai ghar main? **** (string of filthy abuses🤢) ****

"Arre itni khoobsoorat patni hai teri...Kya dikhti hai yaaar" One idiot drooled.

"Patni huh!! Aaj main usse khatam hi kar doonga aur uske uss laadle ko bhi."

He faltered carrying a bottle clenched in between his arm and upper body. His so called friends jeered and catcalled at his inability to control himself let alone his wife. But they all knew it was not true, in fact he controlled her like a slave, tortured her, abused her, and above all killed her very soul.

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:A new start:


A bus started its engine and passengers settled in their seats chatting and all excited. The bus drove out through the narrow lane from the dingy bus station of the small town. And suddenly it came to a halt when the conductor rang the bell.

Some travellers stared at the conductor angrily, and some looked plain curious. Passengers craned their necks to get a view of the object responsible for the sudden halting of the bus. A few moments later the bus started again. But now there was a new passenger in the bus ... settled at the back seat.

...

Unaware of all the commotion, she sat in the bus cuddled to her precious bundle of life. She didn't realise in her reverie when the bus stopped and when it started again. The pink returning to her baby's once tear stained, pale cheeks. She rubbed the soot from her baby's cheek with the sleeves of her blouse. She let her head fall back on the seat and thought of nothing; just let the soothing breeze of freedom soak in. Now and then she'd peck her baby assuring her fluttering heart that now they'll survive ... they'll live after all. The path was going to be a challenging one, but at least now there was a path to lead, unlike the darkness which engulfed their lives before. She knew her baby was alive, since beneath that threadbare blanket his tiny heart was beating against her own. He was her hope, her life.

Baby stirred with a cute yawn pouting his tiny pink lips, when the breeze hit his tender pink skin. She smiled with tears of affection forming in her once again beautiful hazel eyes, and held him close to her heart.

Suddenly a fierce commotion erupted at the back of the bus. A scuffle broke out between some rowdy thugs and the stranger who had earlier got into the bus. Though all were strangers but he fitted the definition in the best possible way, perfect example. He was shabby, with matted hair, manky shoes, and a weird aura of suspense all around him.

At first sight she dreaded him, given her past experience with one such crazy man. But as she saw him clearly there was a bizarre kind of attraction she felt towards him rather than fear or disgust.

It was really uncanny of the stranger, who was silent throughout the scuffle, when the loud mouthed louts were man handling him, hurling abuses at him.

Was it a smirk she saw behind those dark locks? He seemed to be enjoying it all, and suddenly out of the blue, he looked up and looked straight into her eyes through the gap in between the curtain of hair falling on his face. Her heart cringed and she withdrew her gaze, and hid behind the seat tightening her hold on her baby. She dared not look back again. Those eyes...she felt could read her through and through ... her fear, her desires, her very soul. No she cannot be weak any more; she's paid enough for that.

Gradually the sounds died down, and the bus became eerily silent. She still didn't look back. She realised that not much passengers were left in the bus. There was a seventy plus lady in the seat next to hers, and she was dozing off with her mouth open. The old lady was almost about to slide off her seat, when Geet supported her from falling. She looked disoriented for a moment, but then realised what might have happened. Old age sometimes makes you lose control over your senses, and this was clearly one of those situations.

"Thank you beta ... this always happens with me ... but I have to travel alone, there's no one to look after me ... my son lives in this big city I can't even pronounce, and would sent me some money every month. He doesn't realise it is not the money I need, I only want to see him once ... sometimes I wonder why I want to see such an indifferent and stone hearted son, but what to do it is the mother's heart which longs for his one look, even if it's full of hatred," she broke down. The old woman wept beyond control, and Geet wondered what to do, when she herself was travelling in a similar boat, or rather a bus.

"Don't cry D-d..." she hesitated.

And the old lady who was till now crying bitterly wiped her eyes on her sleeves and smiled at her, "You can call me Daadi."

Geet smiled back feeling the warmth and love generating from her big heart. She felt loved and cared for the first time, or may be after a long time, she didn't remember.

Daadi and Geet struck a wonderful cord, and talked like they were really grandmother and grand daughter who knew each other all the while. She forgot about all the pain, and also the stranger at the back seat.

Baby awoke and began crying, and the cry became stronger so strong that Geet feared something serious. She couldn't think ... her mind was blank after the whole ordeal ... she had lost her ability to think. And that is when Daadi's words put some sense into her blank mind.

"Feed him some milk, he is hungry."

She realised how her poor child was hungry all the while. And she forgot about it. What kind of a mother was she? Baby's wailing got louder, but she was helpless, she had nothing to give him, to satisfy his tiny tummy crying for food.

In all this she didn't even realise that the bus had stopped at some dhabba, so that the driver and passengers could rest and fill their tummies.

"Geet beta, why don't you buy some milk for the baby?"

Buy...milk??? She never thought about it ... in all the adrenaline rush to escape...she forgot about one of the most important component she'd need to survive...money. She trembled at the realisation striking her so hard that she felt even her bones weeping. She was such a fool to take such a ruckus step, what was she thinking? Survival was going to be tough, or it probably had ended even before it started. A tear escaped her eyes, but before it could fall down, it fell on something else.

"Here, feed the baby and make him stop. I can't take this ear pain any more. Is it really a baby cuz it doesn't sound like one? Pain in the ***" some one grumbled annoyingly.

*SMACK*

Daadi had smacked the man on his arm, who was actually the stranger from the back seat. Geet was speechless, seeing him suddenly near them and didn't even hear what he said. She was too scared to even move her eyelashes or was it simply her nerves. But she couldn't avoid the fact that he looked much human now with the hair tucked carelessly behind his ears.

"What was that for Old woman?" he complained looking confusingly at Daadi.

"You are asking me ... I mean look at you ... you look like a filthy animal ... specifically a were-wolf ... and the words from your mouth ... any normal person would feel sympathy towards this poor child ... and you are her husband I guess. What kind of a father are you?" she reprimanded like a typical elder.

"WHAT????" both Geet and "the stranger" looked aghast at the statement by Daadi, and stared at her open-mouthed. The baby, who was getting no attention from the three adults, pouted cutely sucking his upper lip hungrily and tried to reach for the bottle in the stranger's hand.

Geet and "stranger" got distracted by baby's action and forgot to clear Daadi's unfounded remark.

"Aww...baby wants milk," Daadi cooed, and snatched the bottle from his hand glaring at him, and held it to baby's pink lips. Baby opened his mouth and sucked the milk hungrily. Geet couldn't stop her tears, and broke down seeing her baby happily feeding on to the milk.

Daadi thought she needs her husband right now, and pushed the "stranger" to the seat near her. They both were getting shock after shock and Daadi was not ready to even listen to them.

"No no no ... I don't want to listen to anything. Fights happen between husband and wife, but that doesn't mean you'll behave like kids, not talking to each other and all. You both are parents to such a wonderful boy ... look at this angel here," she pulled his chubby cheeks, "Look how he is happy seeing both of you. Now c'mon forget about your silly fight, and take care of your wife and kid. This place is not safe to be staying away from them, you know."

"What the hell ..." he began to swear, when the old woman again smacked his head, which made Geet struggle to stifle her laughter.

"Gosh you look so pretty with that smile my child. AND YOU!!" she gave "the stranger" a pointed glare and spoke, "You are so lucky to have them ... never lose them."

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Edited by pj2012 - 11 years ago

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