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Everyone is so eager to have you back in action again...Get Well Soon Reet...

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no updates today . guys i m sick as avi might have told you ..please try not closing this thread because i m not going to create another one without the update. you have to wait a bit long for that ..cause i cant write due to fever .

i will edit this post again with the link to new thread ..


please refrain spamming until i m back .

p.s will try to update tomorrow

Originally posted by: Amour_Reet

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no updates today . guys i m sick as avi might have told you ..please try not closing this thread because i m not going to create another one without the update. you have to wait a bit long for that ..cause i cant write due to fever .

i will edit this post again with the link to new thread ..


please refrain spamming until i m back .

p.s will try to update tomorrow

May Yew Get Well Soon Reet 😊

Gt well soon dear...god bless u

Originally posted by: Amour_Reet

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no updates today . guys i m sick as avi might have told you ..please try not closing this thread because i m not going to create another one without the update. you have to wait a bit long for that ..cause i cant write due to fever .

i will edit this post again with the link to new thread ..


please refrain spamming until i m back .

p.s will try to update tomorrow

Get Well Soon Dear 😊
will wait 😉

get well soon and take care .

Ok ...

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anybody here to read
age kya hua ?

Originally posted by: palindrome

Chapter 28

Geet's cravings for his attention and love was evident in first part..She actually checked her looks and covered her scar in the hope that he would look at her once..

• i loved writing this part you know .. i added this detail first a long before i started the part .
  

But his ignorance and rejection,made her yell at him..you know,i loved her rant very much..!!! Actually i love everytime both of them yell at each other,don't know why????😛😆

i love rants too .. not only because they look vulnerable but also that each bit of truth comes out ..if u love rants you r defo gonna like the next chapter

The Innova ride to party venue was wonderful..Maan's pain along with Sonu Nigam's voice,perfect combo..!!!! His monologue was perfectly written,depicting his emotion and frustration so well..I wish,geet was reading this story..She would have understood how much pain,her indifference is causing him,when there is only a "gear rod" separating them.. Here i want to mention something more..I love the dresses you imagine for characters,like here peach patiala suit with shades..I could clearly imagine her...!!!

• really ?awww ... i never knew people noticed them ..but there again you are anything but ordinary ! i loved the concept of gear rod .. i m going to use it sometime with ur due permission ... geet reading this story ? aah ..!😛
  

Dia-Satya moment in the car was beautiful and natural..!!You always bring such moments so naturally..They never seemed forced ..It feels like,yes it could happen with anyone sitting in the car...!!!

• i had intend to write something like that from satya's perspective .. about this car rides .. .. usse ayi huyi veeni veeni khusbu made me touch her ..badly ..yet scared to feel the jolt of electricity i stayed apart . but that moment the car bumped and she grabbed my hand . good lord ..tell me i m not dreaming ! but i changed my mind ..i want satya to be a bit different ..instead i diluted dia ..
  
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And then the Kiss..!!!

I think,being married has some perks in writing kissing scenes in stories..I simply suck in this area...I dread the moment when i have to write a kissing scene between the leads because I have no idea,how they must be feeling while kissing each other...!!! After reading this kiss,i went back to older chapter to revise all the kisses between them..I was astonished to see,they all were written with a difference..I felt butterflies in my stomach in all the kisses but the primary emotion that they evoked in my heart was different..Like in this kiss,i felt their pain..The one they had at geet's confession,i felt their longing to feel each other, The first one they had in deserted class room,I felt the intensity of attraction between them..You would say,i am boosting your ego but honestly yaar,you are too good with words..I would say you are beyond perfection in this area..!!! Despite minimal description of physical aspects of a lip lock,you make them magical and noval everytime..!!!👏.👏👏.👏..👏.👏.👏

• kiss .. okie .. no ..being married -- flush .. blush ..i dont know .. . lol ..come on palin ..this is just imagination ..after reading this comment i wrote the next two kiss scenes in the next .waiting for you to illustrate them ..lol ..just because you were the inspiration . !
  

but alas,this kiss ended in a very painful way..She pushed him and he had injured his hand..!!! again when she was expecting words from him,she got his kiss..She would never understand his actions,i guess..!!!

Arjun's pain cum anger was justified..When he wiped his tears thus smearing blood on his cheek,visual evoked a sudden urge in me to hug and soothe him..

• oh palin ...! you noticed smearing blood ? my lady .. take my tightest hug .. brone crushing one .. geet is dumb ..the arjun is all mine .😉😛
  

and then geet's regret and her reaction after hearing his words that he would leave her, evoked same urge to give her a hug..At one minute,i was mad at her and very next minute,i want to soothe her..look what conflicting emotions you stir in your readers,reet...!!!

. your thirst for love can never be quenched geet .,

oh god..this line literally made my eyes misty..!!!😭

Their silent call and witnessing the dawn together,was utterly beautiful..In this silence,their love was screaming loud...!!!!

And"assumed good bye gift"..red saree..!!! Saree was really very elegant and beautiful dear..!!!Thank you for posting the picture..!!! You know what was more beautiful than saree..portrayal of geet's emotions on finding the saree..!!!

i will color myself in his parting gift . I will cloak my love around my heart to hide the hurt and adorn my pain with red . red the color of love .

My salute to the brain cum heart,which generate such beautiful one liners,,!!!👏

• madame .. a word coming from you means what you would never know and i can never explain .. palin .. i m hearts content reading this ..mere bas chaliti tumhare haton ko ..not to mention dimag ko ..sone se saja deti
• when you say reet you are best ..you pick up the exact lines that i looovvved writing ..describe it in your amazing style and i feel yes ..my hardwork is worth it ..palin liked ..good ..now i just hope she likes the next one
  
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Maan's description of her beauty was simple and "to the point",without any metaphors!! A normal man would have described a beautiful girl this way only..Ok,.what caught my attention was him noticing her "bangle less" arm..??? It did turn him on??? 😲😳Now i know,why do girls wear bangles in one hand only sometimes..😉😆.Thank you for the knowledge reet...!!!😆

• okay palin ..thats imagination ..ask avi ..she might help you ..because i really cant ask ahem .. actually i want it to be a turn on ..so used :D
  

ok,here comes my favourite moment.."The silent conversation between beauty clad in purple saree and handsome in fawn suit.." Now,i literally want to yell and tell everybody that "Reet is best"⭐️.⭐️.⭐️.⭐️.⭐️ for creating such intense moment without any words between the characters..You just used three "actions" basically..Him staring in her eyes,she lowering her eyes and then that smile in her eyes, and at last him brushing his nose with index finger..!!! and here,anyone could have seen a myriad of emotion playing on my face,while reading it..It all ended with a shy and stupid grin on my face..!!! Kudos..bravo..take a bow...is there something else that i can use for praising you???👏.👏.👏.👏.👏. You are pretty good observer of human behaviour,doc...!!!

• silent conversation is my favorite thing in any fiction ..i actually take pride in observing them you know how ? i got at least 15 off the bench affair in my college by reading body language ..they are almost scared of me
• woah ! now when you describe it in one sentence i m seeing them ..there palin .. your describing style has it ..
• you with your few words make it sound so ..honorable
  
• oh palin realy really thanx for reading the story and adorning with such jewel of a comment ..u have any idea how many times i read your one single comment ..you make my exhaustion go away just like that .
  
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Geet's song at the stage..!!

No comments for that..!!!It was "raw pain" enveloped in "words and melody"...!!! Superb song selection,,,special thanks for giving the meaning of "urdu words"..I have heard the song before too but never knew the meaning or i must admit,never felt the meaning the way i felt while reading this portion...!!!

• i decided the song 2 weeks ago then pmed avi ..she seconded my choice without even knowing the situation ..but glad that i found the english words ..i love that song .
  

Oh..Mr. Awasathy finally played the important role,i was hoping for since he had come into the picture..He told arjun the reality...He told him what a growing kid has endured during those years of loneliness...!!! But secretly,i had wished for misunderstanding to be cleared on geet's side first.I want her to know first what her grandpa did with maan...how he lost his mother...Arjun is still mature with his reactions...Despite the misunderstanding..his love was never decreased for geet...Now I am afraid for geet's reaction on revelation of truth..She would be heart broken for sure..!!! if not because of arjun,then because of her grandpa's cruel deed,whom she considers her only family..Girl has only got pain in relationships...!!!😭

and last part..!!!

Finally ring reached to her rightful owner...I have always wanted this to happen near neem tree but i have never imagined that pain would be their companion along with love in this precious moment..!!! I just loved the scene...!!!

I believe this is yours ..!

His words flew back at her ..

What the hell did he mean by that ??

I would kill geet,if she did not understood now,what he meant by this..She could understand those complicated poems and verses of english literature..bas yahi uske bheje mein nahi ghusta..!!!😡

Maan would be adamant with his habit of emoting his love through actions..and geet would be stubborn with her habit of not understanding his actions..!!!😕

I hate both of them as much i love them..!!!😡❤️

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palin .. i love you .. you are the most talented person with words ..not because you praised me through out but because your way of saying it .. i am simply a fan of yours ..thank you palin for being so good !