THE LOCKET (2) MG FF, thread 3 link pg 1 COMPLETED - Page 99

Originally posted by: dqno1

22nd ko... I was giving on 19th... theek hai 22 it is..

Originally posted by: sweetkj

chalo me chali.!!

yahan bhaari bharkaam baatein ho rahi hai abb.!!

jo thodi der me mere sarr ke upar se jaengi.!!

so mera pachka ho..!! iske pehle me patli gali pakad leti hu.

Originally posted by: sweetkj

chalo me chali.!!

yahan bhaari bharkaam baatein ho rahi hai abb.!!

jo thodi der me mere sarr ke upar se jaengi.!!

so mera pachka ho..!! iske pehle me patli gali pakad leti hu.

Kaunse bhaari bharkaam baatien... ??

Originally posted by: dqno1

Bye Sweety! Best of Luck dear!

15th ko nahi toh will try for Tuesday ok? 16th

Originally posted by: sweetkj

thankyou thankyou..!! 😃

theek hai.!! will wait 😃🤗

Originally posted by: sweetkj

about that writing stuff.!!

:P

Arey ... ab tujhe aadat dalni padegi as after exams you too are going to write ... 😉

Edited My comment on page 127... 😊

Originally posted by: heytal

Flawless update Avi

👏 👏 👏

Kudos to u for the perfect song and my fav too

I think its too much coincidence that these songs we love

even in Ritzy's updates many songs are my personal fav😳

The shayari was perfect

Naureen Thank you😊

Suri saab cha gaye😆

Poor Maan jealous with a J🤢

He is actually checking out about his sudden competition

and introspecting it too😳

Mrs Menon and Prof Shetty unknowingly playing cupids 😛

I totally agree with Maari about the Black- White symbolism that you used and I have nothing more to say than PERFECT!!!!!

Thank you Heytal. I am so glad that you guys are finding my soft sweet jodi loveable. Tried all the masti with Dr. Khurana so thought to see the younger sweeter side of them.

Their walk to the hostel

Oh it was dreamy

Sharing of a umbrella in the light shower

Maan having his fill drinking her beauty and cherishing this moment to the fullest😳

I really felt bad when his doubts instantly made him restless

but the last part just brought a smile on my face along with Maaneet😃

He is only 17, just lost his mom, so there would be no one to confide or ask so his character is going to be like this. Hesitant shy doubtful, when the MU part comes more into play MSK will come out. Then MSK will go after Geet. So I get to write that romance too..

As Geet said in the show

'Zindagi inn chti choti khushiyon se hi banti hai...'

Avi 🤗

and already waiting

For your note I will go along what u have decided and I am loving all ur characters Dev-Tara too😳

🤗

Originally posted by: Onir

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First Rains: To start with the shayari was like ' so beautiful. 👏 It in the start itself transported me to a world of happiness, romance, love'. Each line, word in the shayari held so much of emotions & depth & very aptly & perfectly mirrored Maan's sentiments, helplessness & longing her. How he is each time captivated by her eyes, her whole persona. 😳

Her smile, shyness, and coy behaviour' the way her eyes promise Maan of all the mischievousness he wants to see in her'. Leading him to dream of things he would like to happen in future for them both as a couple. Naureen 👏 I really must appreciate & thank you for writing such beautiful lines.

Naureen has a collection. She does not write but if I tell her a scene she picks some for me to choose from. This itself is the biggest help. Her choice is perfect..👏

I was so captured by the lines that for some time I just didn't want to do anything other than feeling the emotions described in the words used. Indeed unique way of expressing love that shayari brings is unmatched. I honestly agree to this statement. 😊

He wanting to be like Dev to express his emotions through word to please his lady love showed how helpless he feels' & made me fall for him all the more. I somehow wanted to tell him that you don't need to ape him but you have your own charm & ways to do things'.. Your eyes do all the talking & the intensity & passion they hold within can melt Geet to be putty in your hands. 😳 Sometimes I too feel like Maan when I can't use any poems or cheery words or creative forms to express it all'. But then I guess it all can't be possible each one has their own way of expressing. He wants to listen to her, know her more closely without her being conscious or so aware of his presence where she becomes all mute & shy'. So just takes up an opportunity to observe her in shadows. There's so much softness in him just for her.

Although he is the older son by a few minutes, he does have this thing that Dev is better at talking than he is. Siblings generally are like that. I know a bro-sis twin like that, the brother can't stop talking whereas the sister only talks if he is not around.

His jealousy for SRK' So cute 😆(I don't like SRK so much but then Maan's these emotions were all thanks to him) What I loved the most is his acceptance of him being jealous shows his simplicity & innocence of heart not tainted, just his mother's boy. His stating he likes action movies justifying his dislike was so boyish.

His joy on being able to spend some time with her on the pretext of walking her to the hostel shows how he craves for simple joys as his life has dished out to him so many adversities at such young age with him to shoulder responsibilities with absence of his strong support dad and his emotional pillar mom who could read him inside out.

His love story is about observing her and trying to find out from being around her. Sort of like someone who has a crush on you and hangs onto your every word. In their shyness they can't express to each other yet but the silence will speak.

Avi, I'm day by day becoming a bigger fan of your writing' there's something so capturing in the words you use' the whole presentation & feel changes taking me in a world full of hope, love & dreams.😳 Moonless night with him in black mingling with the shadows & she for him being the source of light in white' shows his pure love for her, where he extols her on a greater pedestal as she redeems him of his despair & loneliness. In the moonless night she is the moon for him in her simple adornments of shy smile, expressive eyes, hesitant steps, & care for him. Hayee ' ❤️ I've fallen quite hard for this boyish innocence in a Man who has matured well before time for his family but yet has retained his teenage desires & charm for his lady love only. 😳You said it better than me Onir. That's what first love feels like to me.

Loved how Prof. Shetty played a role in helping them spend some time, & then the rain with him being without an umbrella, as if nature is conspiring for them to be together' Also her concern & care for him through her gestures & unsaid words, him understanding it (todha tube light hai but chalega..😉), him also trying to cover her the most against the rain' so sweet & adorable!

The music & the lyrics' I'm so mesmerised by it'👏😳. Don't have words. Very apt to his state of longing, desires, fears of rejection & her not reciprocating the same feelings, insecurity, seeking approval' and also how her each glimpse is like heaven for him' ❤️

I love the music I have picked for the story. Each song. I am driving my hubby crazy since I have to put it on repeat play to write the chapter...😆

Also I liked how he describes her through his mind's eye... a chavi he has imprinted within his soul.. There's no lust but pure emotions of love, trust & want for companionship. He describes her feature with softness relating it to softness of nature. Even fragrance of first rain just becomes a means of symbolisation with her & gives him a message of many promises of moments to spend with her similar to what rain promises to earth quenching all thirst & bareness... So also Geet's presence in his life promises him of filling all gaps of loneliness.

Teri ummed pe thukra raha hoon, duniya ko'. Tujhe bhi apne pe ye aetbaar hai ke nahi'. ❤️❤️

Kaifi Azmi, Shabana Azmi's father was a beautiful lyricist. So true that you pass on but your words never do.

Beautiful lines'😳 this has just stuck with me now' I can't seem to get over its depth. So selfless & submissive'. He can't help feeling negative as she doesn't give words to her feelings' the restlessness caused by her pulling away of the dupata caused so much of flutter in him' But yet he just remains asking for trust ' how deep & loved. I dream about having such companion' you have made me weave such dreams through your writing Avi. 😳

Also Maan becoming MSK in front of Ms. Iyer just for his Geet was so sweet.

I liked that too. And then he softened his tone because she was shocked and my jhalli just nods at the floor. I adore these two.

Somewhere I feel there's another love story here' Ms. Iyer & Prof. Shetty'❤️ I'm reminded of Shola aur shabnam movie' 😉😆

Avi I loved this whole sign in the first rain...👏 as she understood she is concerned for him, is equally aware of his presence & is affected by him, also is longing for his love as she keeps staring at his image that's going far from her. I loved how he went happily as a teenager al the stress of the day at work vanished by her presence & getting of the sign.

..Sometimes a small sign is all that's required even in real life. I know someone who has kicked a few puddles in their day...😉

The shayari at the end' was a cherry on the cake'

Uttar chuke hai meri zindagi me kisi ki nigaah, Tarap rahi hai meri rooh kisi ka hone ke liye' ❤️❤️

Everything that transpired put together brilliantly in these few words' 😊

Loved the pics you added 'a treat to the eye' 😳

Waiting for more'. Please update soon.