THE LOCKET (1) - Page 54

My eyes are closed... 😳

Originally posted by: Onir

My eyes are closed... 😳

Originally posted by: dqno1

Dekhne ke baad bandh karne se kya fayda Onir...😆

Fayda hai na ... I can see it again with closed eyes... 😉😆😆

Originally posted by: Onir

Fayda hai na ... I can see it again with closed eyes... 😉😆😆

Originally posted by: dqno1

Did you notice I got into Onir mode when I typed your comment yesterday...😆

Yes I did... I wanted to comment on it then felt will reply to it all just before I update again... 😉

Originally posted by: Onir

Fayda hai na ... I can see it again with closed eyes... 😉😆😆

Originally posted by: dqno1

Onir entering DQ territory!!! Jai ho!😆

Is it??? I didn't know... 😆

Happy holi peoples !! 🤗

Read through the three updates in one go. Nice flow in the writing.
This style of writing where one character becomes narrator for another is quite becoming and cool. 😎
I will comment more on it below.

When you spoke about beqraar song, i thought it was the other one 'Oh beqraar dil'. 😃 This one is a nice song selection too. Kishore da will always be a classic for me.

Losing parents at such a crucial juncture is .
Is Dev's girlfriend Geet?

A little bit confusing there. I guess the story is yet to begin.
But from what I know and what I presume away let me jot down my blabber below:

The prologue I presume is Maan? The entire update was filled with a feeling of intensity and estrangement. It already showed his character well. There was no need for Daadi to describe him any! It was an awesome beginning. 👏

The second update was filled with a kind of self centered yet sweet brat. (Hey I am the only one in the world who is allowed to have a secret crush on Dev 😡. Mind it! ) Again Daadi's description of him was kind of a moot point.

Daadi's update however confooosed me a little bit. 😕 Did she say Geet?
For me Daadi appears to be the main narrator of this story? With other characters just feeling themselves out but Daadi binding them as a cohesive unit as a matriarch ought to? That is fantastic thinking and writing! Keep it up. 👏


P.S : I am under an ass load of work right now. 😭. *sniff sniff* . With loads of drama I regret to inform you that my tippanis would not be as regular as I would like. *head down on bench and bawls* . Dont phorget me please !!