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Krupa

@idunno

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Posted: 11 years ago

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i had strted to read this story but when continuous read dev and nt i lost intrest and stop reading it to day i read teaser on my fb and find maan now rey or still will get more dev and nt?toran and geet sturn from usa and has seen geet in the arm of dev and got angry?so r u going to give more of ma

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1112

Originally posted by: kawaii_geet
marked...

am super excited to see someone whose work I love to read here.. Do let me know if you like it 😃

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KawaiiGeet

@kawaii_geet

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1113

Originally posted by: dqno1

am super excited to see someone whose work I love to read here.. Do let me know if you like it 😃

u read my work???😲 😛😛
its a big story will take time to catch up😆

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1114

Originally posted by: kawaii_geet

u read my work???😲 😛😛
its a big story will take time to catch up😆

Fairytale and Parineeta both... I loved them

I had other user names before ucompleteme and had2bu 😃 I think with Parineeta I had a lot of comments. You have a wonderful style of writing. This is my first Ff so excuse the mess.😃

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KawaiiGeet

@kawaii_geet

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1115

Originally posted by: dqno1

Fairytale and Parineeta both... I loved them

I had other user names before ucompleteme and had2bu 😃 I think with Parineeta I had a lot of comments. You have a wonderful style of writing. This is my first Ff so excuse the mess.😃

yeahh i remeber all comments from had2bu on parineeta's thread
i used to look forward to ur comnts😳
didnt see u in my new ff???
i will comnt slowly because xams coming up ahead🤢🤢
advanced sorry for tht

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1116

Originally posted by: kawaii_geet

yeahh i remeber all comments from had2bu on parineeta's thread
i used to look forward to ur comnts😳
didnt see u in my new ff???
i will comnt slowly because xams coming up ahead🤢🤢
advanced sorry for tht

koi baat nahi.. saw a couple of new ones that I want to catch up on, both sayaneeka and abhi nahi, but right now all free time is taken by writing. I have this horrid writing style where each update is 10-15 pages in word so it sucks up my time. plus I work 6 days a week and am married so it leaves me with very less time. Do want to read them peacefully..

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KawaiiGeet

@kawaii_geet

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1117

Originally posted by: dqno1

koi baat nahi.. saw a couple of new ones that I want to catch up on, both sayaneeka and abhi nahi, but right now all free time is taken by writing. I have this horrid writing style where each update is 10-15 pages in word so it sucks up my time. plus I work 6 days a week and am married so it leaves me with very less time. Do want to read them peacefully..

😲
married??? its funny but nowadays whoever i come across come out to be married😆
ohh no worried for parineeta i used to write 14 pages of word daily like 5000 words or so
take ur time and do it wenever u r free
ritzy di had been telling me to read this ff for so long and i finally found the thread on FB😳

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KawaiiGeet

@kawaii_geet

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1118

just read the prologue and first chapter...
was a little shocked ke maan n dev r twins (as i would not want my maan to be less unique...lol) but later got confirmed tht dey r fraternal twins...(sighh..wht a relief)

and here both da brothers seem so distant from each other... and the girl..who is she that seems to have stirred emotions in both their hearts??
already loving the start...
will comnt as soon as i get thru the other chapters..
but must say ur writing is soo gud yaar...
ur words.. their use..phrases...am loving it

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1119

Originally posted by: kawaii_geet
just read the prologue and first chapter...
was a little shocked ke maan n dev r twins (as i would not want my maan to be less unique...lol) but later got confirmed tht dey r fraternal twins...(sighh..wht a relief)

and here both da brothers seem so distant from each other... and the girl..who is she that seems to have stirred emotions in both their hearts??
already loving the start...
will comnt as soon as i get thru the other chapters..
but must say ur writing is soo gud yaar...
ur words.. their use..phrases...am loving it

I was a little Sherlock-y in those days..😆

It will get sorted by chapter 4.

Thanks so much. I am glad that you are liking it😊

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mishtikhurana

@mishtikhurana

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1120

Originally posted by: dqno1
The Locket

Prologue - below
Chapter 1

Chapter 2

CHAPTER 3

CHAPTER 4

THREAD 2
A/N:
This is a story of two brothers Maan and Dev and their journey from being teenagers to men.
There are two girls who fall in love with them in the process, Geet and Naintara.
While one love story is sweet and gentle, the other is no less than fireworks.
There will be confusions, misunderstandings, growing up, breaking up, making up, standing up and lots of love along the way.
Hope you enjoy it.
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He walked into the room after two years shutting the doors behind him squeezing his eyes tightly. He did not want to relive the scene downstairs and yet it floated into his eyelids. She was being carried in his twin brother's hands. The next scene of Daadima hugging her and blessing Dev and kissing his forehead. All three faces beaming with radiant smiles. He had shut the front door and stood outside for a few minutes before composing his face and walking in. The pooja thali was brought and Daadima had blessed him as he entered, her joy complete having both her beloved grandsons with her.
After a few minutes of chitchat he had escaped to his room on the excuse of jetlag. The shards crushing his heart which had beat for two years on hope and faith alone seemed to shred it into tiny pieces... His hands fisted to the side as he opened his eyes.

The room looked exactly the way he had left it. Daadima must have placed the yellow roses in a vase near the nightstand. The soft fragrance of them and another memory wafted into his mind. His diary lay on his desk, where he had forgotten it before leaving for London. The diary which captured all his thoughts about her. He opened the drawer and tucked it inside, too raw to look at it now. This room filled with thoughts of her is how he had spent his years of college. Today he was suffocated in here.
He turned on the stereo to escape the thoughts rushing in and out of his head as if it was rush hour. As the humming began, he should have shut the stereo off but strangely his hands refused to leave his sides. It was their song and maybe for the last time he would hear it out.
Pyar Maanga Hai Tumhi Se,
Na Inqaar Karo
Paas Baitho Zara Aaj To
Iqraar Karo
Mujhe pyaar karo, mujhe pyaar karo

Thank you for reading. Do drop me a line to let me know that you are interested! Please listen to the song to get an idea of what is to come..😊

Avi[YOUTUBE]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TlyDLz1Lqhw[/YOUTUBE]

Please send me a buddy request if you would like a PM for this story.

PICTURE CREDIT: GEET PICTURE GALLERY ON IF
VIDEO CREDIT TO UPLOADER.

Prolounge , "He walked into the room after two years shutting the doors behind him squeezing his eyes tightly. He did not want to relive the scene downstairs and yet it floated into his eyelids. She was being carried in his twin brother's hands. The next scene of Daadima hugging her and blessing Dev and kissing his forehead. All three faces beaming with radiant smiles. ... Today he was suffocated in here." and then the song selection 'pyar managa hai tumhi se...' I have full sympathy with Devil and wanna hug him. Koi baat nahi maan, geet nahi hai ti kya hua...mein bethungi na tumhare pass.

Chapter 1, "....He rubbed his cheek fondly as he remembered the day he had proposed..." of course in dramatic and romantic way, the song 'Tumhi dekho na' is perfect to portray DEV's feelings. "...Tumhara Hoon Main Aur Tum Meri, Yeh Din Mein Hui Kaisi ChaandanTumhara Hoon Main Aur Tum Meri, Yeh Din Mein Hui Kaisi Chaandani..." soft, sentimental,romantic and melodious music with heart touching lyrics perfect to giver romantic feel. Perfect song selection AVI.

Chapter 2, What an emotional update. Love the mother-son bonding. And how dadi understood Maan's pain (after loss of his parent's) but couldn't pin point the reason. Love the song selection 'beqarar dil' to portray Maan' state and the last part of the song is really too sad and heart breaking.The pain which change calm and innocent boy into DD.

Chapter 3, Love the way Dev invaded in Nt's Dream and selection of song 'dil kyon yeh mera'....after reading chap 1 and 3, looks like the spark of love at first sight from both side. and then scary and enless night mares. "... There could be no man like Dev Khurana in her life, he was way out of her league. Time to stop the pipe dreams and face her reality. ..." and getting ready for the office with strong-faced. Eve-teasing is highly criticized by every-one and every-where but still no-one try to take first step, only be mute-specter, unless its related to their own female-family member. Love the way Nt's confronted the man and her reaction toward whole scenario ...but BECHARA DEV...ha ha ha 🤣"...With his one cheek slightly pink and with a shocked and outraged expression on his face there he stood, the person she has slapped on his first day in her group. Dev Khurana.😳🤣😳🤣😳🤣😳🤣😳🤣😳🤣

Savitri Khurana in all her glamour and poise introduced the two, "Naintara meet my grandson and your team leader, Dev Khurana. Dev beta this is Miss Naintara Kapoor. She will be on your team."⭐️ What an intro

Chapter 4, Love the way, Jhalli Geet gave her intro and endless talking to Maan and and thrilled that he will return today after two years. Love letter na sahi Diary to padh li... Hmmm...I am also curious to know how she turned Daadima's part time PA, as dadima said in chap 2 "... it was more like she dragged Geet into her life." Love the way you describe geet's emotions happy, insecure, shy, excited, nervous hope

happy- "This has to be one of the happiest days of my life. " waiting for her shehri babu..."At last Tara di had gone to tell her Mama and Mami about Dev today and her SMS says that she can't reach Dev but to tell him that they agreed to meet Daadima and Devji tomorrow. I am so glad for them. This day is getting better and better." happy for dev-tara

insecure - "Will the two years away from me have changed your feelings for me? Could it be that some English girl would have taken your heart away? I hear they are very beautiful and smart, where as I am just a simple village girl. "..."where as I am a part time PA working for your grandmother in the evenings and some weekends. Have we grown apart? I am scared as well as happy."...

pride -""You have made so much progress where as I have just done my MBA in our college. You are running all of the London division"..."

hope- " hopefully your jhalli.."

scared "To be completely honest, I confess I am a little scared also Maan. Will the two years away from me have changed your feelings for me?'

excitement,shy, nervous - " As I write down the message to give to Daadima, my joy is overflowing out of every pore and cell of my body."..."I stumble and I fumble along the way as I try to hide my face and find a corner to conceal my excitement."..."In my nervousness, I want to race home and hide myself from all eyes. I fear that if I look at you, my eyes will not look away. It's been ages seeing your face and I long to see you now. My heart is singing a tune hearing the news. " perfect song selected to portray geet's emotions."My heart is leaping out of my chest as I try to steal a glance at you. "

love - As always I am blown away by how stunning and handsome you are. Is the veil of love through which my eyes are looking at you deceiving me or have you become more handsome than before, taller, more dashing? I take in the broad shoulders covered by the pale blue shirt as Daadima does your tilak and aarti, the fluttering long lashes, the perfection of your mouth and nose and your angular jaw which is covered by stubble. I can see those eyes that speak to me more than you ever do, the eyes that I love. She runs her hands through your dark hair and opens up her arms. I shut my eyes and clutch my veil to my heart, opening my eyes again to watch your hands enfold her in your embrace."

"I rush home and hide under the covers so that I don't reveal my heart to you. Kyun? You are the boy. You are supposed to say it first, hai na "...AAWWW...Love the crazy-shy GG❤️☺️

lekin teaser de ker tumne Geet ke armano ka metti pleed ker diya...bechari 😭🥺

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